Immortality: Fairy, Don't Run Away, Cao Is a Good Person

I recommend that the author make the male protagonist's vision more insightful. After all, he also absorbs memories, right? As a strong man of the highest level, the Demon Emperor should be more powerful in this aspect.

If it were me, find a reason. Go to the mortal world and find a few wealthy families. It is still possible to get dozens of mortal girls with the talent to cultivate immortality. Then he was imprisoned in the Crystal Palace for dual cultivation.

I've made a bad mistake, I don't know if I can criticize it. If the author finds it annoying, I can delete it. First of all, this book is about people who eat soft rice, so eating soft food is a technical job. You can eat soft rice softly, you can eat soft rice hard, you can win soft rice, and you can eat hard rice. However, the two times in the book I couldn't eat soft rice, and I ended up eating soft rice and eating cheaply. In this way, there is no refreshing feeling. For example, the first oiran, what are they doing here? You can't make money there, so you have to be an oiran? One explanation for such a bad reputation is that people also need to practice double cultivation. You can scare people away from such a person. This is illogical and looks down on the status of an oiran. I just pushed it for the sake of the plot. It is best to change this to have the protagonist walk holding on to the wall, so as to show that soft rice does not taste good. You can also lead out the back, settle for the next best thing, and get together with Haima. The second Haima didn't handle it well either. The time was stretched too fast and they were in pairs all of a sudden. Haima is a madam. Even if you want to find a partner, you have to taste the sweetness in her mouth before she can fully embrace the protagonist. As soon as your timeline is stretched, it will seem very abrupt. If it were written that Haima also benefited from dual cultivation and was a little jealous of others, the subsequent plot would be much better. Secondly, the memory at the beginning is too long. It can be explained in a few sentences. It is best for the three apprentices to only hear the sound of the stairs and not see the people downstairs. Their beauty and arrogance can be described in various aspects. Then, the protagonist can reveal their true faces while slowly eating them one by one, so as to attract the readers' attention. Finally, the protagonist is a poor loser, but the Demon King is not. Let alone living for hundreds of years, he has never seen bloody storms. Just take us ordinary people. After decades of experience, we can see through many things. Why does the protagonist look like a young boy? The Demon Lord must have a plan and strive to use all means to improve his cultivation at all costs. What kind of Demon Lord is Fang Yuan? You are a demon king. If you don't have money to get an oiran, you can first find a mortal to practice double cultivation. No matter how small a mosquito is, it is still meat. Look at Fang Yuan robbing his classmates for a few spiritual stones. In short, a demon king must have demonic nature, a plan, and a back-up plan. And you, the protagonist, don't have any of these three things. Later, if you want to write a brilliant story, you have to work hard on these three aspects 😁😁😁 Also, you have to write distinctive characters for witches, maidens, and fairies. Because the things written by the author, whether they are about cultivation or supporting roles, basically have the names changed, such as foundation building, golden elixir, Yuanying and the rest, but they are actually the same as when practicing qi. Just change the names of places and people. This phenomenon is that the author did not write out all levels of writing, and the characters were too single. Let's talk about this for now😁😁😁

I used to be a big boss in the Tribulation Period. Don't people in the world of immortality train their bodies? He was actually being chased and beaten by the Qi Refining Layer. I'm afraid it was just a fake tribulation period.

Regardless of cultivating Taoism, practicing martial arts, or doing business, mentality is very important. Not striving for hegemony in ordinary life does not mean cowardice or fear of trouble. On the surface, Han Paopao is afraid of trouble and death. He will kill your whole family at night!

Not bad, not bad, take it and take a look at the fairy

It's so boring and can be said to be a plagiarism from several other books. If the Demon Emperor is like this, don't write it. So boring

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