Mortal: I Make Great Ways by Refining Weapons

Just have fun reading fan fiction. It's boring to criticize everything. Just don't read it with your brain in mind. There is no charge for this book 🤔 Some people don't know what they are anxious about.

Han Li probably has too many scenes. Not licking either. Can't distinguish priorities

The protagonist is not Han Li. I still can't figure out who the protagonist is

I hope the priority can be clarified. Han Li has too many roles.

Shocking, jumping from the first chapter to the last chapter does not affect reading

Is this fanfic? This is obviously a copy of the original work, right? 🤔🤔🤔 The protagonist is the supporting role, right?🤔🤔🤔

There is no distinction between priority and secondary, the main character is the same as if it was not written

Is this protagonist a Korean model worker? I might as well read the original work

It feels good, please keep writing!

Just reading the first few chapters, I can feel that the author is very serious and laborious in writing. Maybe the author wants to express too much, and the introduction of Zero Finger is a bit complicated, making it difficult for people to get involved. In fact, the coherence and readability of the plot are the most important thing in a novel. We readers do not have an outline for the novel, so we try to write something simple and clear at the beginning, and then slowly introduce the plot to retain readers.

Chapter 2: Prices exploded, 6

Can you tell me whether the golden elixir is a magic weapon or a magic weapon? Yuanying uses a magic weapon or a magic weapon?

There are a lot of problems, it's too vague, there's a title twice, and the article cannot be divided into paragraphs, it's too long, and there's also fighting techniques, why do you introduce so many fighting techniques? Who doesn't know this if you read the fandom?

This fan novel is really fucking talented. Go and see how other people write it. Don't you know the basics? Even if you write two protagonists, you have to have a true and false protagonist. And the content should not be too close to the original work. You have to write your own style. Otherwise, what are the readers doing?

Thank you everyone for watching. If you have any contact with the names of various magical instruments, you can post them in the post. All the excitement will be displayed around various magical instruments.

Come on, add bookshelves first, fatten them up and then kill them.

If you have a saved manuscript, please send it out as soon as possible. There are not many people who will see it if it has more than 60 chapters.

We should create a running technique, the Five Elements Escape Technique, plus formations and puppets. If we grab it, we can run and chase it. The formations can suppress it, add the puppets to self-destruct, and create a few more puppet substitutes. It's really not possible to fake death and escape.

There are many details that are not handled properly, and the author ignored them even when he reminded me. I feel like I am about to enter the palace at any time 🤫

I feel that writing about pill-forming is the same as paper. It is more reasonable to write about trapping pill-forming monks and running away

One thing to say, this article is really good! It's much better than some fan fiction that just turns into a mindless rundown. Many details can be seen to have been written with care. The hot reviews are right. If you pay attention to the rhythm and make the protagonist have a stronger sense of presence, it should be more attractive. My personal opinion, flaws don't cover up strengths

Is there a thunder tribulation in forming pills? It seems not!