Infinite Role-Playing, Starting with Eating

Chapter 12 is revised. You claim to be a descendant of the late Tang Dynasty, but you call Li Ju by his first name. Even idiots know that you are lying. In ancient times, calling others by their names was a form of contemptuous address from top to bottom. Calling the emperor by his first name is even more of a crime of disrespect.

Compared with dnd, the infinite trpg rules are actually not suitable for writing novels with this kind of data flow. Because the data on this thing is a mess...

The emperor asked Long Geer to feel that the problem was bigger. His indecisive character will definitely lead the dynasty completely astray. Especially since this is still the fifth generation! It would be fine if it were in other periods. It's not impossible to forcibly support Adou. But in the Five Dynasties, this was an era where everyone was Lu Bu and there were many lunatics. If you want to be the king of this era, you don't have to be a benevolent person, but you must be a strong one! As for Long Geer's mother-in-law's character, can she control these lunatics?

A sentence is repeated over and over again, the feeling of something, something, when, something, or something. Try not to use the same descriptive words in a paragraph, otherwise it will only give people the impression of being long-winded.

There is too much explanation in front of it, and half a chapter of explanation was inserted inexplicably, which made my veins pop out.

Let me give the author an idea. After you finish writing, feed it to AI and let AI rewrite it. Listening to your novel is really torture. When a passage feels like xx, it feels like xx, as if it feels like xx, it simply feels like xx. Then this sentence pattern appeared in large paragraphs. This is not how elementary school students write their essays. Why do they contain so many idiosyncratic words? Don't you read the essay yourself when you write it?

I like this subject, but I don't like this book

The whole article is full of data, you are suitable for writing a team battle report

When I saw Chapter 8, I really couldn't stand it anymore, so I skipped through the battle chapters and found that after more than 60 chapters, I started adding and subtracting as soon as I started fighting. The data calculation was originally used for fighting deductions, and the final fighting scenes still had to be described in words. The author inserts a lot of data and calculations into the battle, cutting the rhythm of the fight into pieces. Even the data stream will not insert data like this and destroy the rhythm of the writing. You can refer to how the data is processed by the wind, and make reasonable adjustments. Now the battle report does not look like a battle report, and the novel does not look like a novel. Is this book just written for a small group of runners?

There is a great sense of separation between the various formula values ​​and the various activities of the protagonist, especially the various qualities and formulas that are suddenly inserted during the protagonist's battle. It gives me the feeling that the protagonist is actually from a God's perspective, and everything about the enemy is known roughly. The numerical descriptions that appear give me a feeling that it is not a narration, but the voice of the protagonist. The final effect is to give people a feeling of water and drag. These can actually be described through side descriptions. It's completed, and it's not like it's just a variety of numerical values interspersed, giving me the feeling that the protagonist is not traveling to other worlds to complete tasks, but playing games. This kind of sense of fragmentation is really strong. If the set values ​​have to be explained, they can also be written in separate chapters in other places. This is how I felt after reading the first few chapters. I hope there will be improvement in the future, otherwise it will be uncomfortable to read if the sense of fragmentation is too strong. After all, this subject matter is still very interesting.