A Game with the Fairies

The worldview that the author wants to write about is too big. Judging from the current writing power, it is doomed to collapse later. The further the story goes, the more difficult it is to fill in the foreshadowing. Moreover, there will be more and more characters and girl characters appearing, and the intersecting lines will become more and more complicated. It is too difficult to sort out a simple outline. However, the concept of the book is really good. In the game mode, the story of the protagonist becoming a boss and saving the world is written, and they intersect at various nodes of history and reality. I have read a similar book before, but it also had a problem with my writing skills. It was difficult to write as smoothly as at the beginning. The reading experience is that if the author can insist on finishing the story, it will at least be a good story, but he is afraid that it will collapse later and the author will give up directly because of subscription issues. As for the heroine, there are many options, but there is only one at the moment. The emotional drama is relatively average, and the heroine's strength has not been explained too much yet. If you choose a girl, how to get them together to form a group is also a big test. Overall, the author chose a very difficult path. But if it really works, it will be a good novel.

Sister Li Yuechan Elder Yan Xiaoru Blood Lotus Sect Shen Yan Dragon Girl (biting the moon dragon) Young man Jiang Xiaoyu Liu Glass Fairy Chu Qingxue Young Little Weed Expression

Why do some people always like to call single heroines in harem novels? Isn't it written in the introduction that the complete illustrated book is already screening users?

It was identified as Yang Wei's protagonist, a waste of money, and the author just wanted to make money easily, which is extremely clumsy.

I was attracted by the title of the book and have already ordered 300 chapters. So far, there is almost no meat. Except for the younger sister, all the female characters are very mechanical, and even the younger sister is very strong. Those who like to watch emotional lines may not be able to bear it. There are also quite a few minor flaws such as inconsistencies and the suppression of the protagonist's combat power. If you can't stand it, you can leave. Based on the author's out-of-the-box thinking, the content is written in a mixed manner and seems very watery. Although it is not actually very watery, it also makes the reading experience bad, and those who can't afford to read can just leave.

Blood Lotus Sect Shen Yan

What book friends say is still too conservative and too watery. I can see that you have an outline, but I really don't see what ideas you have. Don't write if it's stuck. There's no need to continue the story. Cultivation in this line relies purely on copies, but you don't want to innovate and put old wine in new bottles. Regarding the love line, I found that you don't know how to write at all. You can only write about a blushing face, and then a flirtation in chapters 3 or 5, and then the relationship develops further. I've read more than 200 chapters of the protagonist's character, but I haven't finished it yet. In the front, he is detached from things and only cares about cultivation. In the back, he is trapped by emotion and gets involved in the situation with his own body. The protagonist should be a statue, not the plasticine in your hand, not a tool to promote the plot. I just want to ask, since you have spent so much ink on the dungeon, why do you focus on writing the dungeon line? Your love line is basically zero. A stranger can stay with you for 10 days and become intimate until death. Do you know why people say you are inexplicable? Because in your plot, it seems that a woman has either admiration or hatred for the protagonist. It is obvious that the atmosphere in the early stage is to exaggerate interests first, which makes the protagonist's behavior later look like child's play. Copy this line, my suggestion is that if you don't know how to write multiple lines, just write one. Anyway, there is only one assembly line for all the copies you write: accept tasks, encounter n pcs and fight a boss. There are fewer and fewer places to solve puzzles. I guess it's because you are too lazy to write and don't want to level up. The male protagonist is just a fly with sugar water on his back, flying around following the system's instructions. The female protagonists are even more important. You have written them as pure objects. Your portrayal and shaping of them is simply zero. If you create a copy, the protagonist is guided by the system, and the supporting characters are guided by the protagonist. The system is the core of the world you write, not the people. You don't shape their inner beings in the plot at all, but you directly define and summarize them in a general way after completing the level. For example, the Dragon Fairy and the Glazed Fairy were both very strong, had difficulties, were led by the protagonist, and after solving the difficulties, they somehow developed a liking for the protagonist without any foreshadowing. So the question is, apart from their different names, what else is different about these two people? Setting? Could it be that the way you write this type of novel is to cut a few grooves on the assembly line, and then carve some plastic figures in advance, and pull them out and plug them in when needed. Then this novel is meaningless. It doesn't matter if the protagonist's last name is Li or Zhang. My suggestion is that the main line must emphasize the subjectivity of the protagonist. The different personalities, circumstances, and destinies of the heroines must also be distinguished and emphasized. The branch plot must also set off the subjectivity of the protagonist. It's not for you to spread your thoughts, it's just to write about the protagonist's skin and it's not serious. Writing copy should be a small tool for you to discover and resolve character conflicts, not a trick for you to skip and avoid plot conflicts. I didn't want to say this at first. But the impression from the 180th to the 200th photo was very, very bad. One eye and ten lines are completely indifferent. The information density is low enough, and the foreshadowing has no details or is not implemented. It is all plain water. If you think that in front of the two armies, there is a shrewd elder and a young man who understands the world and have a sweet love story. I don't think there's anything to say. Then again. I only saw 200, but this one has the latest 500. I can't stand it any longer. If people find out that the author's problems have improved later and come back to kick me, I'll read it again.

What should I say? Let's start with expectation management, shall we? First of all, judging from the synopsis I read, this is a system + harem story Looking at the synopsis, what everyone expected was the opening of the harem + the fairies coming up in the later stage to beat the protagonist to his knees + the Shura field But in fact, in the end, the fairies are gone, the heroine is gone, and the main plot that has been seriously promoted is also anticlimactic. Start with the fairies first. In the later stages, there are fewer and fewer fairies, and many of them are not heroines. The heroine of the game, Lord Eru (should it be called this?), Even died directly. In the last few games, there are no fairies 🤔 Then there is the problem of the heroine. Let's not mention Shen Miao. The problem of the heroine in the later stage is that the heroines are actually actively reducing the power of the heroine! ! ! ! ! ! ! First of all, Yan Xiaoru, the first official wife, her problem is, do you think she will go crazy because the protagonist has given her heart to her? But in fact, she has become a crazy woman, and she is also the protagonist, which makes the originally useless female protagonist even less 😵 Then there is the only designated female protagonist in this game, AKA Xiaoweicao. Of course, come back and dodge like crazy + open the Shura field! As a result, she actually couldn't recognize the protagonist. I wondered what this was all about? Shouldn't the quintessential love story be "No matter what you look like, I will always recognize you"? The result was that the reverse was done, and my husband couldn't recognize him in front of me 😵 I was thinking that it would work if you wanted to completely resurrect the little weed as the finishing touch. You can make her look like a child, but her husband can't recognize her in front of her. She is the only female protagonist who can be beaten. Why do she persecute her like this and let her control the male protagonist's body 🤔 I won't talk about the other female protagonists. The ending is just a passerby, and none of them can be beaten. Okay, let's talk about the main plot lastly. I won't be too harsh here, because it's easy to imagine that the first two items won't be able to be written later, but it's really unexpected that the outline won't work at all. But I wonder If you really want to take the small weed END, you don't have to go around so many detours, right? For example, lay a foreshadowing or something For example, leave a letter I may not recognize my brother when I wake up, so I'll leave it to you. Something like that Or At the end, there is no need to go around in so many circles and dream about it Replay the past life As time goes by, the relationship between the two becomes better and better. Although I don't think about it, it is still the same as before. Finally, I discovered that I had actually remembered it at a certain moment. Hmm Seriously, that's it. I can only say that after leaving Little Wild Grass END I hope the next one will be better

It's a similar formula to "They All Want to Kill Me", it's very well written but it's a pity that it's a eunuch. The author should not follow suit.

OK I found the big poison spot and feel comfortable. The spiritual weapon is useless in the current situation and cannot be sold to make a profit. In fact, it is useless to sell it, because the spiritual rice is enough for practice. What Wealth Couple Dharma Land lacks most now is Dharma, which is to strengthen its ability to resist external disasters. It's really ridiculous. The spiritual weapon only improves the protagonist's passive ability to resist risks, but that's not necessarily the case. After all, it will also cause disasters and drive the protagonist to search for rare minerals and then make enemies. So it looks strong, but in fact it's just useless. Looking at his reasons, the secret book cannot be converted into combat power immediately, so can a spiritual weapon be used? Don't you need to make your spiritual weapon? Will it meet your conditions of use if it is made? If you don't choose the secrets because they can't be immediately converted into combat effectiveness, then don't choose them, don't practice, and just keep practicing the outer sect's breaking skills. After all, they can't be converted into combat effectiveness immediately. If you keep clearing the levels perfectly and saving up good things, then you will be discovered to be a walking treasure compressed package.