On the 60Th Birthday of the System, My Son's Engagement Was Annulled!

We should focus on the plot of the protagonist. What you wrote recently, um, is okay. The front part is too detailed. You did not bind the system and the protagonist well in the early stage of the family junior. The writing is too streamlined, like a drag bottle, the tail is too big, and there is no conflict. The style is not well shaped, and the details are not grasped and polished. Originally, it was quite good on the new book list in the early stage, but I don't know if it was bought by someone else. Although there were some problems with the free chapters in the early stage, you listened too much to others. You should polish it and slow down the update for three to five days. Write slowly, polish and revise the previous chapters slowly, and then post it again. If you write so many chapters like this, you will really lose it.

This is the first time the author has written fantasy, and I can tell you that the writing is not good (but don't just criticize it directly, a new book is not easy). If there are indeed problems, the author will correct them according to the outline. I just like to listen to advice.

The old routines plus some novel settings are still worth watching, but the pace has to be accelerated.

It's already 2024, why do you still write "Don't bully the elderly and the poor"?

I am also convinced by the author. It can be considered as solid food. Look at what you wrote. How many times have you used the old jokes from more than ten years ago? That's fine. The key point is that you still have to press the pig's feet. The system comes out every half a day to upgrade the level. You also have early, middle, late, peak, and great perfection. It's just like adding food to your meal. 💩💩💩

This is the first time I've seen someone write about the break-up of an engagement in such a slow way. There's so much bullshit, it's so dragging.

What does it really feel like? Hmmmm It can be written well, but it looks like shit In fact, it's not really shit, it's just suitable for people who are new to reading novels.

The concept of the book was good, but the author had no ability and ended up writing it in such a bad way. . . . Wasted

I reward you with two book coins just so that you can see this book, which is only worthy of being thrown into the trash can

Just like the title, I'm too lazy to say the rest, just three words to stitch together monsters!

The system is not that good. To be honest, this kind of old man is going against the will of heaven. At least the novice gift package should be awesome. If nothing else, at least give him a holy body. Either that, it's just the halo of the protagonist, or with this speed of causing trouble, and this speed of upgrading, it would be weird if someone with a truly high level of cultivation doesn't die.

By the way, this is the Hehe continent, right? Why does everyone have to say "Hehe" before saying anything?

Well, I read the book review and threw it into the trash can after a while. The author went into the factory honestly and didn't have any crooked ideas.

It smells like a short drama, an imitation, no, it should be said to be a copy of Dou Po Cangqiong, and it's not even the slightest bit worse. It's like Dou Po Cangqiong's version of Long Aotian. Anyone who wants to watch it can watch it.

It's boring. To be honest, the protagonist can reach level 17 without the garbage bones before the system. Given such a strong character, you might as well change the golden finger to awaken a certain type of root and then advance by leaps and bounds directly to become a boss, pretending to be raising a baby. They are all people who have seen the big world and have interacted with the best people. They have also been fighting with these low-class things. They are pretending to be exciting, but it is boring.

The protagonist's character, academy, master, and junior sister are exactly the same

I don't think it's good. Although the creativity is good, the overall writing feels rough. Not that cool. It's not possible to change skin or cancel the engagement. The summary is that it doesn't look good.

The person who conquered such a big family is still in his 60s. He has no brains. He has no strength to fight to the death with the people of the overlord sect. If his direct disciple says a word, your whole family will have to die. It's 2024 for him to fight Doupoliu.

Have I traveled through time? It seems like I am back to the novel I read when I was in elementary school and junior high school

In the part about breaking off the engagement, the protagonist and the woman had a life-long relationship between good brothers. Under normal circumstances, he knew that his son was a loser and his good brother's daughter was a genius, so he took the initiative to break off the engagement early. There was no need to say what kind of engagement it was, and he just said it casually after drinking too much. Don't take it seriously. I really can't stand the protagonist's behavior after breaking off the engagement. What's wrong with your son's failure to break off the engagement? Are you using your 985/211 daughter to live a miserable life with your son who graduated from high school and has no future? Even Xiao Huohuo of Fighting to the Sky was not angry because of breaking off the engagement. If Nalan Yanran could break off the engagement quietly and gently, Xiao Yan would be able to accept it. Xiao Yan was angry because the Yunlan Sect of the Nalan family did not give any face.

Pig's trotters don't look like the protagonist, but rather like a villain. Pig's trotters have a petty personality. No wonder the villain said that pig's trotters are mud legs 🙂

The protagonist, as a family head, fights with this or that every day, which is not interesting at all. I want to see the family develop, and then the elders or disciples will do anything. The protagonist is a kind of background, and fights with others every day. That is a shitty family flow.

The author is humble, I would like to read and collect it. If you have any ideas, please send me a message 🙏

Fighting for the sake of fighting is completely mindless, especially later, when his own woman Gong Lewu is almost beaten to death. After the protagonist appears, he is furious and murderous. It stands to reason that he should immediately use his moves. After all, the trump card in the setting has no side effects at all. The enemy is several realms higher than him. Guess what? I don't know what to think. He only used 60 to 70% of his strength to fight the enemy for a long time. In the end, the enemy's The helper came over and was beaten. At this time, he used 80% of his strength and almost died. The half-dead heroine Gong Lewu burned her life to fight against the enemy. Only then did she activate her move. Then the enemy was destroyed and the heroine became a living dead. I really don't understand what the protagonist is thinking. The trump card has no side effects. It's such a time. Why don't you just go up and use it? It's purely for fighting, completely brainless!

I just watched it a lot. The fighting is very well written, and the moves and other descriptions are good. I start to build up the suspense and then push the plot. To put it bluntly, I moved the plot of the first 40 years to the back. I might as well write 200,000 words and then pick up the 60 years old. This is okay. The key is that you describe the fighting in a large space. Also, the confrontation between the country and the sect is a bit intellectually depressing. Supporting a sect and fighting against this sect. The key is that there is a label with an online IQ, which is a bit speechless.

I really can't stand it anymore, can you please stop writing about women? It's not that I can't accept multiple female protagonists, but the way you write it is really speechless. When you meet a beautiful woman, you are an old sweetheart from before. How did you like the protagonist before? Everyone follows the same routine. Then the male protagonist was let down in various ways. First, Gong Ling came behind Gong Wu Le, and then Zhan Tai Mingyue and Li Hongyi were all top beauties and top power. They all loved the male protagonist madly. The male protagonist left them because of his low cultivation and low self-esteem. It really made me laugh. I couldn't bear it. Yi went abroad, thinking that there would finally be no more bloody plots, but here comes Fan Lishi from Good Guy, another top beauty who loved the male protagonist to the point of going crazy decades ago. Please, author, can you stop writing like this? I really can't bear it anymore. Can you be normal?

I really can't stand it anymore, can you please stop writing about women? It's not that I can't accept multiple female protagonists, but the way you write it is really speechless. When you meet a beautiful woman, you are an old sweetheart from before. How did you like the protagonist before? Everyone follows the same routine. Then the male protagonist was let down in various ways. First, Gong Ling came behind Gong Wu Le, and then Zhan Tai Mingyue and Li Hongyi were all top beauties and top power. They all loved the male protagonist madly. The male protagonist left them because of his low cultivation and low self-esteem. It really made me laugh. I couldn't bear it. Yi went abroad, thinking that there would finally be no more bloody plots, but here comes Fan Lishi from Good Guy, another top beauty who loved the male protagonist to the point of going crazy decades ago. Please, author, can you stop writing like this? I really can't bear it anymore. Can you be normal?

You can't watch it with your brain, it's too watery, there are too many meaningless things.

Did the author celebrate the New Year early? There has been no update for a few days.

It's too slow to update tmd, please update it