Luck in the Heavens Starts from the Red Mansion

​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​:                                                                                                     I forgot when I added it, so I took it out and read it again, and picked up where I left off. I couldn't stand the pace of this book, the content was watery, and there was no grip, so it was difficult to continue reading. I started to skip reading a little bit, and found that there was no obstacle, and I could understand the plot without affecting the reading, which shows the depth of the water. After watching Red Mansions, I lost interest in reading, so I would like to write down my thoughts after watching it: If nothing else, you are not good at writing Dream of Red Mansions. Rhythm: In the early stage, the tempo was so slow that you could just jump and watch it, and there were no memorable points. After participating in the martial arts competition, the tempo improved rapidly, which was really anticlimactic. By the way, there is also the last chapter. I really want to laugh. I took it all overseas and finished it after a few hundred words. I can still say that it is not a bad ending.       ：，，，……，， As a fan, the application is not applied well. The interaction between the protagonist and the characters only stays on the surface. It talks about how to change the original destiny and gain luck, and then what? What about the character's inner description? What about the changes in the character's environment? Yes, but only a little bit, and then the main character is awesome. This directly leads to the fact that as a reader, the feeling of immersion is not strong enough. To put it bluntly, the urban dragon king's pretense and slap in the face are more enjoyable than your plot. In terms of combat power: The description of combat power is broken. After practicing martial arts for so long, it is only in the following chapters. The protagonist shoots arrows with perfect accuracy; when he enters the enemy's formation, he enters and exits several times. It's not that this kind of description doesn't work, but it makes people feel that the whole story is spoken in plain language and there is no sense of substitution. Military: After having a compass, you can become a military god by practicing it. The protagonist sits at home and knows the world situation well. The situation in the fictional world is unclearly constructed and is directly borrowed from history without adjustment based on actual conditions. The macro and micro description of the war is weak, and it ends in just a few chapters. It is half-baked and tastes the same. It fails to serve as a climax of the plot and disappoints the readers' long-awaited expectations.

The writing is very good. Although it is a refreshing article, it is not brainless. The political analysis is also in place, the character description is also quite detailed, and the plot is not copied. It is a difficult second creation. So I have been reading the original version! It's just that the update is not too fast, learn from Eagle!

The timing of this update is really random. I haven't posted for a few days. What are you doing?

Red Mansions, Mortals, and Bright Sword are some of my favorites.

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The author's writing is really good. Don't listen to their nonsense. There will always be people who don't like to read it. Just write your own. Hong Mansion's writing is great. You can write tens of millions of words first and then write about the next world. Don't worry about whether anyone will read it. Just write it to your satisfaction. There will always be people who like to read it. What? Why am I still a trainee? Oh, I don't watch Red Mansion. I just come in and write a post and then leave.

How much do you love writing about red buildings? It feels like you are living in them?

The protagonist is acting like a loser from beginning to end

How old is Tietou 😡? He is just like a stubborn donkey. It's an old habit, I really want to hang the author up and slap him.

I didn't dare to start reading several of this author's books. Every time I saw a long list of red buildings in the catalog, I was speechless. No book can be compared to Red Mansion, right? Even if you write about the Three Kingdoms, Journey to the West, or Water Margin, I can still read it.

Has the author's account been sold? Although you were stupid in the past, at least you compared it before and after, there are no obvious logical errors, it is very different from the original work, and it can be compared, and there are some ideas that can make people appreciate. Now this book, I just saw Xue Pan coming to Beijing, it is already nonsense. I don't know where it went. I really can't believe you are still the same author as before.

Awesome, I originally wanted to save it until Dream of Red Mansions is over and watch it. As a result, I have written more than 1 million words, and it is still a dream of Red Mansions.

How did this happen? The readers will be so angry that their brains will bleed, and you still have such clear ideas here.

Delete the post, right? You won't even tell the truth, right? Originally, the plot can be told in fifty or sixty chapters. You dragged it on for more than two hundred chapters. It doesn't matter if you drag it on. But in one chapter, you repeatedly talk about the wheel, which is a bit too much. At least add some dryness, it can't be all water!

It means it's free, otherwise I wouldn't be able to read the chapters before it was released. After more than 200 chapters, I still don't understand what the author wants to do. The author wants to become famous and make a fortune without being manipulated by others, but the way it is written is that the author was stepped on the ground by the old lady and Mrs. Wang, and after being slapped on the left cheek, he had to put the right cheek on top. It's really deliberately disgusting. It feels like a modern short drama. I want to write a resourceful male protagonist but I don't have the ability. It's both stubborn and forceful.

I haven't figured out whether the author's novel is based on the court system or the author's own cultivation and main line. If it is based on the court system, then to be honest, you shouldn't talk about it all day long. What is the progress of martial arts and what level it is. If you think your own practice can determine everything, then what do you care about the court? Find a mountain to practice yourself for 10 years and become invincible and transcendent. Wouldn't it be better to overthrow the imperial court directly? As I write it now, I feel like I haven't made it clear on both ends. It feels like the author is a gift package sent by God to save the Jia family.

Let's change the name of this book. Isn't it inappropriate for Zhu Tianwen to buy dog ​​meat with a sheep's head? The protagonist in more than a hundred chapters is not even 10 years old, and the plug-in breathing method is not even 100% accurate. If you can suppress the protagonist, then don't write Zhu Tianwen. It seems that the story of Red Mansion will not be completed in less than five or six hundred chapters.

The best butt-wiping paper from Jia Baoyu in Red Mansion, bar none!

There is no other best novel in the world. There is only one useful sentence in the whole chapter, and the rest is all nonsense.

This author only knows how to write about the protagonist Tian Eunuch, but he actually writes about Red Mansion, OMG!

All the protagonists in his books have masochism and love to protect their enemies. If the protagonist slaps the left cheek, he will take the initiative to pass the other cheek, and the famous saying is: they are all clouds! The writing is so disgusting, but the writing style is so good, you damn... Forget it, author, please step aside, stop being disgusting!

He pressed hard and pressed the water, and the water took care of him. I think you just don't have the life of a great god. You should stay at level 5.

The protagonist is Jia Cong, and Goldfinger is the time traveler Jia Huan. The plot is narrated from Jia Huan's point of view and the author's hydrology, without any sense of inconsistency!

I don't know whether it's because of your experience or some other reason, but you have now abandoned or downplayed the cool points that gradually formed in your original book. For me personally, the cool points of your work are as follows: 1. Cultivate your subordinates and forces on the cultivation side. I really like how you train your subordinates. From the beginning, they are weaker than the new world, and then they slowly develop. You and your subordinates are always half a level or one level higher than the general environment in strength. 2. The impact and development of various cultivation aspects on the world, such as the previous few talismans or the imagination of the productive society model developed by the cultivation side. 3. After accumulation, show staged results. This is probably the one you are criticized for the most. You are obviously very powerful but do not show it, let others bully you, and do not fight back. Being in a high state of mind does not mean letting others bully you. 4. Water 🤭 This is a common problem of most authors and there is nothing to say about it. As long as you write your special style well, water is also acceptable. Mainly, after you downplay the original unique advantages of your work, your water becomes less acceptable. In addition, Paiyunzhang, I hope you can deal with the problem in reality, adjust your state, and the next one will be better!

🐢The male protagonist, send the female protagonist, √Shi

Gone! The pimping is disgusting, I have sent a girl to you more than once~ Brothers, don't look at me and help you test the poison.

The protagonist has become successful in the Red Mansion. It is useless for those dignitaries to lick Jia Mu and Mrs. Wang. Can't you find out what the protagonist's life was like in the Rong Mansion? Not to mention that the Rong Mansion is still a sieve. Has the author thought about it? ? If the relationship is not close, then the mistress is of no use

How many women have been accepted into Red Mansion World? Shen Nong, who has seen it, tells me.

This time I know why you were scolded. There are more than 100 pictures, but you haven't even touched the martial arts aspect. What you wrote is really embarrassing to the time-traveling army. How about you just make one? In a world without martial arts, it would be better if you all rely on yourself to figure out and practice. The problem is that this is the Red Mansion, not the ordinary world. From the age of eight to nine, you dare to write more than 100 chapters. Who will you not pull? I used to praise you for being rigorous in writing books.

I can't say that the writing is not good-looking, I can only say that the ending is so bad and cut in half that it's really uncomfortable to read.