Versatile Mage: Crimson Arrival

1. There are too many dialects in the northeast, making it difficult for southern readers to understand. Although I am a northerner myself, I still feel uncomfortable with so many Northeastern dialects. Moreover, the dialect is not yet standard. I don't know where the author is from, or which dialect in the Northeast he refers to. Although I have been in the Northeast for many years, there are some things that I cannot understand, and I feel that it is very different from the Northeast dialect spoken by the classmates around me. Suggestions to the author, if you want to attract Northeastern readers, then you should reduce your strange Northeastern dialect and add more Mandarin. If you want to attract readers from all over the country, then don't add Northeastern dialect. You can quickly change it while you are not writing too much. You can occasionally add one or two Northeastern words, but you should not use long paragraphs of Northeastern dialect. 2. There are too many characters, and readers cannot remember the key characters. Author, you can count it yourself. I suggest readers also count how many names appear in the first chapter of your article. By the way, the author can look at other articles and see which article has so many names in the first chapter. However, I have to say that the author's portrayal of the protagonist is still very good. Although the protagonist's name is a rare character, the emphasis at the beginning makes the readers remember the name very well. Now that you haven't written much and you still have some revisions, the author should think carefully about which of the people who appear in your first chapter need to be remembered by readers immediately, and which ones can reappear a few chapters later. It is best for the author to remember that readers should not use their brains too much when reading online articles. You do not need to memorize the entire text of your article. It is not a wise thing for readers to spend a lot of brain power in the first few chapters to get to know so many characters in your novel. 3. There is no plot at the beginning, just lay out the settings. The author needs to remember one thing: everything in the article serves the plot. There is no plot to directly lay out the setting. This is called a running account, and this is not an online novel. My only feeling after reading four chapters is that the plot of your four chapters can actually be compressed into one chapter. The settings can be interspersed in the plot, and can be arranged in the dialogue or thinking of the characters, but they cannot be directly read out by your narration. In other words, you directly use the settings as the base, interspersing a small amount of plot with a large number of settings? In that case, why don't you just post your outline and settings? You wrote about an incident in the first three chapters. A man called you down from the mountain to participate in Magic Awakening, and you got a golden finger and won a prize. Look, I summarized the plot of your three chapters in one sentence. Don't you think the plot you wrote is too little? Again, if you don't write much now, you can still change it, unless you write it for your own entertainment. If you want more people to read it, then detox yourself as soon as possible. 4. The author should keep in mind that most of the readers who read fan fiction have read the original work. Those who have not read the original work will read your article, and most likely they have also watched the anime. They are all people who know the settings, so you can mention the settings related to the original work, but don't mention it too much. The point is that things from other works will obviously appear in your cheating finger. This is what you need to spend a lot of time explaining. Don't expect your readers to have read these works. , Speaking for myself, of the articles that appear in your introduction, I have only read "The Whispers of the Ancient Gods", and I have only read half of it and have not finished it. I have never heard of "The Castle of Phantom Beasts" that appears in the first three chapters of yours. If possible, you should write something for the general public. Even if not everyone has read it, you must at least let readers hear it. For example, although I have not watched Naruto, if you write about Devil Fruit, I will definitely have a general impression in my mind. If you write something that has no impression in the reader's mind, it will be difficult for the reader to continue to follow your ideas. For example, when Lord of Mysteries first came out, Squid also spent a lot of writing power to build a world that people can imagine. The reason why there are more fantasy and fairy tales than Western fantasy and magic novels is because Chinese people can easily imagine the world of fairy tales and fantasy. On the contrary, it is difficult for Chinese people to have an impression of the world of Western fantasy, and it is even difficult for Chinese people to remember the names of foreigners. Therefore, if you want to include content from other articles in your article, it is best to choose some big IPs that most people have heard of. This will make it easier for readers to imagine and create an impression. You can even attract fans of these big IPs to read your article through this content. Finally, to summarize, the opening chapter leaves a good impression. The Northeastern Five Immortals has a good setting and great potential. If all the poisonous points can be removed, it will definitely be a good book. Come on, author, there are not many full-time mage fans, I hope you can write a good one.

The imperial capital is Beijing, the magical capital is Shanghai, the demonic capital is Guangzhou, the divine capital is Shenzhen, the ancient capital is Xi'an, and the imperial capital is Nanjing.

Author, no, let's write less classical Chinese, it's so embarrassing 😰😰😰

Pursue reading, don't keep books

The author updates quickly, updating 100,000 words a day, come on

Wow, the author writes very well. It's just that you don't have much fame. You can do it if you persevere.

Family members, please go and collect books. Pursuing books is so important to subsequent development. I have collected more than a thousand books and reading books should not be so important. Help everyone, don't keep books.

What's your kid's relationship with Shen Lan?

Starting today, the update time will be around 11 p. M., And we will no longer be doing idle updates during the day.

Please, stop keeping books, read more and invest more.

And what levels are those two totem beasts at?

Come on update!

Why haven't you updated it yet? Where did everyone go in one day

Your dark red is not as good as dark blue, add a little bit of loneliness in life, and cultivation depends entirely on my hard work.

Does the protagonist's family in this book have a forbidden curse?

Harem or single? Who are the heroines? ?