Ace of Diamonds: the Demon King Arrives

There are too many hydrology parts in the article, and there are too many unnecessary side descriptions, which completely give readers a feeling of water word count. The pace is too slow. I have written several books and have no experience at all. I have read all the latest chapters. It is a bit intellectually depressing to watch the competition. Some descriptions can embarrassingly deduct three rooms and one living room.

Japanese high school baseball has come to Koshien. There is not even a live commentary during the game. Many interesting points cannot be written. I feel that the author is still relying on the opponent's various shocks to promote the plot. I really can't stand it. It's too streamlined.

Forty chapters were written for one game, and they were paid chapters after they were released. Man, are they a bit watered down? 😅

Falling Valley is really a cheating template. It's a pity that the author's writing style is not interesting, and the reading experience is a bit poor. In addition, it is best to combine it with reality. It is very cool to drop the ball speed to 154, but if you go to 180, it will be distorted and completely meaningless. The highest ball speed in reality is only close to 170. When you go to 180, you will have no sense of substitution at all.

I remember in the anime, it was pretty cool for a normal person to break 160 in high school. Now it's 180. This is the reincarnation of a god. I don't know if a catcher, let alone a batter, can catch such a ball.

A ball speed of 180 kilometers is not as good as understanding a different dimension.

Fanggu has improved his ball control ability. He has that super high-speed ball that is really invincible. He can also practice vertical sliders and crossballs early. He also has strong hitting ability and can shoot and hit yyds!

180What concept? Are aliens pitching?

Things that can be said in one sentence must be described in two or even three paragraphs, which is very disturbing to the senses.

There are too many narrations in recent chapters. There is no description of the plot and no psychological activities of the characters. Only narrations account for one-third.

What did I discover! ! ! ! Diamond Ace! ! ! Or Falling Valley 😍😍, author Wuhu, I have read your previous works and they are all very good! Ecstasy! !

Finally there is an article about Jianggu! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! Yeah

When Aomi met the Giants in the Koshien finals, and Akatsuki Fukutani met Hongo Masamune, who also had a ball speed of over 150. When everyone on the two teams thought it was a pitching match, Akatsuki Fukutani said, "I won't pretend anymore, it's a showdown. In fact, I He is left-handed. When Akatsuki Fukitani held the baseball with his left hand and was about to throw the ball, the whole audience was in an uproar. They didn't understand why he was throwing the ball with his left hand. At the moment when they were distracted, Akatsuki Fukutani had already thrown the baseball, and the audience heard a huge bang. They came back to their senses only after the sound of the ball hitting their gloves. When they saw the 175 ball speed on the screen, the whole place was in a sensation. All the players from the Trolls directly collapsed to the ground, with no morale. In the end, Qingdao easily won the championship. With the third grade After the player's retirement, Shenggu Xiao went to the Spring and Summer League Grand Slam for the next two years. Until graduation, she never lost a game. This was the familiar melody of the alarm clock in her ears. Sheng Guxiao recalled that what just happened was a dream, and the whole play ended 😰

I have read several novels by the author... Almost every one of them has a common problem... You describe too many supporting characters, and the proportion of supporting characters in one novel actually accounts for 2/3... Write a ball of yarn...

With the protagonist's ball speed, which wealthy club can't join him? Just because Qingdao is a declining wealthy family? Just trying to go to Qingdao, you have the strength but you can't be the ace?

The main character's high school ball speed of 170 is almost like Bolt in the baseball world, but the high school ball speed of 180 can only be fantasy baseball.

180 Kilometers per hour, unicorn arms, otherwise the shoulders will be ruined

There is another Japanese comic about baseball. I don't know if you have seen it. I think it is quite good, but the male protagonist is a bit miserable. Just "Major League Baseball"

The author is also a veteran who has written several fan fiction books. Baseball playing methods and how to train must have some ideas. To be honest, watching this game is too painful. The inexplicable scheduling makes the audience unable to understand the point. In addition, if the pitcher's ball type requires changing the pitching posture, it will basically be a defective product. For the enhanced version you wrote, you can completely use the sinker to throw a two-seam ball. Anyway, the holding method is similar. Use the two-seam to throw it as a four-seam, and use the four-seam to grab strikes. Ahead is a dream capture, there is no need to be afraid of capture.

Reading this book doesn't feel as exciting as the previous books In fact, the protagonist does not need to be in Qingdao, and the original supporting characters go to other high schools. It's like the internet king's novels go to the youth school, and he can't write any new ideas. If the author doesn't make it more difficult for himself and innovate, the book will be like this. More systems can be combined. After all, Brick A itself is a fantasy anime. Can a normal person hit this speed in high school?

If you don't want to write it, don't write it. Just go to the finals. Write about youth and return to the field. You might as well write about super powers. It's quite down-to-earth in the first place, but as you write it, you get carried away. You're a newbie.

You can totally read the title as a novel, High School 168. What you wrote is Diamond Aces, not Major League Baseball. The world record is only 170, and the current fastest is only 168. How can you, a thin bamboo pole, have the same ball speed as a human tendon? . .

Otani's fastest was 147 as a freshman, 151 as a sophomore, 160 as a junior, 158 as a freshman, and 170 as a junior is not impossible.

I sincerely thank Xiao Xiong. I first met Diamond A when I was a primary school student. Fast forward many years, and you are the only fan of Diamond A. It is you who remind me of my love again and again. I suggest that even if I don't write about Diamond A in the next book, I would consider a secondary portrayal based on the personality of the anime character itself to enrich it. In daily life, even cliché plots can add a lot of fun to readers, create the charm of characters, and intersperse exciting performances in competitions, which not only relieves readers from the reading fatigue caused by repeated high-intensity competitions, but also makes the climax effect better, and can also You can try appropriate secondary creations, such as encountering a frustrated baseball kid with tears in his eyes, and the protagonist offers help. After a long time, the kid accidentally turns on the TV to play the Koshien game. When he sees that figure, his excitement and yearning strengthen his love for baseball, and he confidently turns around and picks up the dusty baseball again, etc. You can also add other cool points in daily life, such as having an affair with a player from another school, meeting a fan signing at a sushi restaurant, Seido's second team building after the game, and adding emotional moments to the game, for example For example, the plot of Tanba is given to the protagonist. He is accidentally injured during the game. The seniors feel distressed and the coach also asks him to leave. However, the ace's belief insists on the decisive victory and then falls to the ground. At that moment, everyone in Qingdao rushes to come. During the training process, the team exercises supporting roles, Don't let other characters serve as mere background panels, give them shining points to shape the whole. At the critical moment, the protagonist puts on the team uniform and appears on the field for a second time. Readers will not buy it after it is written. I blame you for tampering with the plot. Maybe I am too strong to make things difficult for others, or the readers are incompetent. Heart, but the writer has tears, but I want to express some thoughts. I know that Xiaoxiong understands better but failed to outline it. In the second half of the book, I can consider incorporating some content that does not affect the overall outline, try to shape it more, and open up new exciting points. Isn't writing this book just to highlight a diamond? Is it a meaningful and exciting article? Then we have been using the intensity of the game and the protagonist's ball speed to inspire. It is indeed a bit monotonous and tiring for readers who have read a few of your books. I sincerely hope that Little Bear will get better and better. I look forward to your next book. Come on 😳

I've been reading Diamond fandoms for a long time and when I searched for them, the first three were all yours 😅

The author has a suggestion for you. Can you delete the last five words of Cheongdao High School Baseball Team and Wucheng High School Baseball Team? There are dozens of high school baseball teams in one chapter, and they look the same as what AI wrote? Or copy and paste?

If the author can do it, I would say that you can actually save your MLB knowledge and write a book about Major League Baseball. If not, write a book by other fans. To be honest, this book is not as good as the previous one and you will get bored writing the same theme yourself. Don't rush to start a new book and slowly adjust it. When you feel that you are in good shape, you can start it again when inspiration comes.

The referee part is a bit ridiculous. You are already a Koshien referee, how can you be afraid?

The author, please open another book, one that is talented, relatively rational, has his own opinions, and uses his brain to play baseball.

Will the new book be distributed yet?