The Faint King Looks at the Sword

Call it a cool novel, the protagonist is frustrated throughout the whole process Call it a fairy tale, you can't fight monsters without upgrading Call it a harem, the ambiguity is quite sudden Call it a plot, the protagonist is so "insignificant" that there is no hope of a comeback Although the reader is from a God's perspective, it always feels like the first person. The contradictions are not outstanding, the main plot is unclear, the protagonist is not attractive, and the plug-ins are not even useful. It feels that the setting of Proton is just forced to rely on the experience of the ancestor dragon (The First Emperor: Don't get involved 😏). You replace the emperor's memory of "up and down five thousand years" with the system and add some (Modo Modo) cool writing routines according to the general system writing routines. The writing should be handled more logically. Don't say 🔥, readers will not be like this. The environment you set is dark and terrible, but the protagonist cannot hold it at all, and cannot give readers a sense of security! ! ! 😡(Key points) The above are personal suggestions🙂

Aren't you tired of writing about trash talk now?

The overall early stage experience was very poor. The world view was unclear and the protagonist's path was unclear. In The Riddler, development was slow and the lack of improvement made people anxious.

Already 56 chapters! Do you want to look back and see what nonsense you wrote? Is Tang a boy or a girl? If he is a man, why is he so shy and his heartbeat is racing? Why would he pursue the heroine after she was engaged to her? It's understandable that modern people who travel to the world of immortality are deaf to what's going on outside the window. You call him a loser and he's super literary. You call him a great guy. After a few words, he starts to be sentimental and conscience-stricken... So, buddy, what on earth are you writing? You really need to look back and take a closer look

Ah, I'm releasing a new book quietly, and I'm still waiting for the extra story at the Red Mansion 😌😌

Mader Riddler, riddle author, riddle book, you and me under the riddle tree. Withdraw

It looks good, come on, author, it looks very interesting. Those who find faults can write a better one with the same theme and let me take a look~

No matter how tired you are, you must persevere, come on! 👊

It's no use asking for protons from a country. The Renxianmen can just change the country if they want. It's so troublesome. Do you think it's the background of the Warring States Period?

The pace is too slow. It seems that the protagonist will not change much after this situation is released.

The visual impression is very poor, mainly due to the setting of the world view. According to the setting, the royal family should be on an equal footing with the immortal cultivators. However, the royal family is very weak. So, is the dragon vein high-level or low-level?

The pace is too slow and the turtles eat too much. I would have quit if I didn't see the excitement.

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