The Witch Also Wants to Fall in Love! !

After reading four chapters, let me share my thoughts: 1. The language is not concise enough, the characters appear too late, and there is too much introduction about the witch. Many readers do not have the patience to finish it, and the hero only appears in the second chapter. The main reason is that the first chapter is too short. Maybe it would be better to combine it? 2. There is a lack of hook. It is far from enough to just point out that the lonely witch wants to fall in love, and it will appear inexplicable. The hero's injury should be a good point of development. Taking care of the injury is a good plot. Why is it leaving so soon? I would like to say that readers would rather see the hero being poisoned by the succubus, and then can't help but feel good about it. 3. I always feel that there is too little description of the heart, and the emotions are not delicate enough. You can think of it as being in the water, but sometimes it should be done in close-up, such as when the witch touches a man's hand for the first time. Anyway, come on, author, the writing is very good, and I hope to make further progress.