Lord of Coral Island

Otherwise, write the economics carefully. If you want to write, check the information and think about it. A carrack ship in the Middle Ages cost more than 400 pounds to build, and it was even more expensive to sell. It was fully loaded with 55 people. The crew members ranged from low to high (trainee to captain) with a yearly salary of 5 to 65 pounds. At that time, the price of beef was 0.05 Pounds per pound. This is why I am often deducted. Just check the cost and salary, the living conditions of the crew (they are often deducted, and when you go to sea, there is a new society on the ship.), You can find everything.

It looks pretty good. Keep it up and don't learn those routines. There was once a Western fantasy book that was originally well written, and the protagonist was about to come into contact with extraordinary powers. However, the author said that he had an in-depth talk with the editor, and the editor strongly suggested that he change the book to an outline and a setting. The book, which was quite fresh and interesting, was forced to be changed into a novice novel, and it exploded. Most of the comments said that after the changes, they were no longer interested in reading it. I hope this won't be like this in this book. I'd rather die without being able to continue writing than follow the trend.

Deliberately show off, and then produced a lot of awkward sentences

What can I say? I feel that the protagonist is too vague. I don't know the level, the combat power, how much money I have. I don't know the specific abilities of the gods. Some abilities don't come out until very late. I feel like they are just to fill some logical loopholes. I deliberately didn't write them clearly. There are loopholes. Now I want to have a setting to fill them. I don't have the feeling of watching the protagonist improve himself step by step. Refreshment, logically speaking, this type of farming development stream attaches great importance to this aspect. Readers see how the protagonist builds his own territory step by step, enriches his pocketbook, improves his abilities, and develops his own power. It is just like fighting monsters and upgrading in the game. Only by knowing what skills and things the characters you control have can enjoy the thrill of upgrading.

If you think there is something toxic, please point it out in the paragraph, and I will reply and explain it one by one. If I can't explain it, I will change the article. If it can't be changed, either you have a problem or I have a problem. One of us must have a problem.

Can you please stop scolding your system or your plug-in? Otherwise, I won't write anymore, I won't write any more plug-ins. Good guy, I have to use them and scold them at the same time. My head hurts when I see it. It feels like a part-time job. The boss scolds you and wants to use it and you don't pay for it. It's kind of shameless, and it's also shameless. It's very disgusting.

Okay, brothers, now I dare to say that there is no problem with the economic system!

It is a bit suspected of forcibly creating contradictions and conflicts. It is understandable that the protagonist is not a person who kills indiscriminately. It is understandable that Cameron has helped the protagonist and the protagonist does not kill him. Once the other three are exposed, it will obviously bring great danger to their identities. Why not kill them? This church is obviously a Xie cult. Most of the people in it are not good people. If you kill them all, there won't necessarily be many innocent people. Just let them live and be captured to create conflicts. There are big problems with the logic of this plot. It would be more reasonable for you to keep Cameron and let him be caught. In addition, the first three chapters of the book are really messy. I really don't understand how an author who writes about time travel can write such a bad beginning at the beginning of time travel. I just skipped the front and read the back. The writing style in the back is indeed very good. I hope the author will still follow the persona of his character when creating the plot. In addition, it is a very good design not to throw out a large section of the world view and combat power ladder. What we want to read is the novel, not the setting collection.

Prices collapsed at the beginning. A ship sold for 20 gold. Then you told me that the salary of a dozen or so crew members was 12 gold. Then the profit from a trade would have to be at least 50 gold before anyone could run the ship. Otherwise, an accident can make the captain bankrupt and give each person a pension of 10 gold, which is quite funny.

I feel like the author is just narrating, especially the later chapters, which give me a feeling of "rushing to reincarnate". Of course, what I said may be a bit excessive, after all, the subplot should be dealt with concisely. But some places are too concise and difficult to understand.