I Returned from Hell

I have read more than 100 chapters, let me tell you what I think are some problems 1. I feel that the heroine's infrastructure construction ability is not very good. So far I only know that a base is being built. The food, drinking water, military equipment, scientific research talents needed in the end of the world are not prepared 🤔, and it is said that the time is only three months. Does the heroine want to accumulate a lot, or go to q at the end of the world? 😥 (The heroine forms a team of more than ten people VS food and a shelter with enough ammunition? Is it possible?) In addition, there are a few mentally obsessive Qs in the team. If those innocent ordinary people have nothing, can they still bear it? 2. The Bureau of Unusual Incidents has a lot of inappropriate points here (1) Conflicts: The first time I was surrounded, my two single seedlings almost stayed there, but they actually gave out information regardless of past suspicions, and more than once? ? ? 🤔 Why? (2) The heroine responded: (Although the heroine did give out information after a long time because of this, it was easy to bully. Others just said something about cooperation and gave it away before the information was given. What is the difference between this and the scumbag who said I love you and painted a pie for you, so you spent money for him without any sense? 🤔) (3) The administration's testing (and even I can see that they are testing the heroine's bottom line by frequently breaking contracts. The heroine doesn't fight back at all. The bottom line and strength of the heroine's power have probably been figured out. The first is a secret siege. The second is a premeditated siege. The second is a premeditated siege. Three times? It's fair and aboveboard) (4) Transaction with the other party: (How should I put it? I thought that the things I exchanged can be used to develop the team, but it can only be used personally, and it is not urgently necessary. Is this transaction meaningful?) 3. I think the hostess has a The problem (Wait, I know some people will scold you for this, why not listen to the reason first 😅) is that there are many excellent n supporting characters around the heroine. Although such people are not common, there are indeed many, and I admire that there are so many around the heroine 😅. (1) The main problem lies in the fact that those top guys are clearly threatening. This is because the heroine with sensitive five senses clearly knows the hidden dangers, but she doesn't solve them in advance but solves them after they happen (just like knowing that there is a bird in your room. , Why wait for it to be pulled out? ) 😰 Even if there is no apocalypse, it is not difficult to put a sack with this power (2) At first, I thought those top quality were just a small problem, until the heroine let Xiao Ai go.? ? ? ... Why (isn't the heroine set to be reborn in the apocalypse? Shouldn't the apocalypse she experienced be one in which even children cannot be looked down upon, otherwise they are very likely to be rebelled against?) When she let Xiao Ai go, did she underestimate Xiao Ai, or did she underestimate the forces that Xiao Ai wanted to join! Shouldn't she know better that "a skinny camel is bigger than a horse" and "a rabbit bites when it's anxious"? Whether it is Xiao Ai or other forces, there is a great possibility that they can trick her! 🙄 4. Plot How should I put it? After reading more than 100 chapters, I felt that I was in a hurry. I was in a rush to upgrade and fight monsters. The early stage was really good 1. In such a rush to enter the dungeon, base construction, and supporting character creation were also ignored, and the overall situation was reduced (for example, the author of "The Change of the World" only briefly touched on the plot) There are no changes in the city situation, domestic or foreign regions, even private organizations (only the heroine is one), it feels like the heroine is living in a world in a bottle. 2. There is also a plot point that catches the horse. The forces that Xiao Ai joined have allowed the administration to confirm the identity of the heroine. She actually did not hide her sick brother, but went back to have a beautiful meal with his brother. (This logic is completely unreasonable) One second he was about to start working, and the next second he was living under someone else's jurisdiction 🙄 5. Character creation 😐 The main character was okay, but the quality of the supporting characters was too single (many of the supporting characters were top-notch, and I have only seen a few smart ones. Even the officials who gathered all the talents could only count them on one hand, and there were not many special features. (Color), the source of the supporting characters is also very single (either from the heroine's side or from the dungeon) I already felt like I was going to jump after reading more than 100 chapters. The author could change it slightly and add some foreshadowing (for example, if the heroine makes illogical reasons, it would be better if it is a huge conspiracy). After all, the front is really interesting

How should I put it, it feels like a heroine written by a male author. From the beginning of the first chapter, the handling is very inconsistent. There are too few descriptions to support the heroine's extraordinary memory. It is difficult for people to accept the setting of "the heroine knows a lot". Moreover, the reasons and sources of the information are not described. Personally, I feel that it is not as smooth as building a system or the ability to predict the future. The theme and world view setting are still good, keep up the good work!

The introduction of this book has been revised at least six times, but the effect is not good. I was really stunned by the introduction. In the comment area, more than one reader said that they almost missed my book because of my introduction. I saw it all and felt even more anxious. But I really can't think of a good one, so I can only post a thread asking for help. I hope I won't be laughed at by my colleagues... I should be the first one to post a thread to ask for help from readers, and there is no one else.

Dear author, please change the introduction. I think it will dissuade many readers. If I hadn't read the text very well and the settings were excellent, I probably wouldn't have clicked in.

This book should be considered a male video. I suggest you change it.

Whether it should be said or not, it is as apocalyptic as ever, and the plot is compact and not sloppy. It would be great if I could write a million words a day.

Although the author's introduction is a bit hasty, I felt at ease when I saw other readers saying it was good. To be honest, the writing is really good. It's just that I was a little scared after reading it in the middle of the night. Hahahahaha, I didn't dare to close my eyes and sleep. Hahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahaha did not dare to close my eyes and sleep.

My thoughts after reading the latest chapter: First, the analysis of human nature is okay. Second, there is no Virgin and Holy Father. Third, there is no Voldemort plot. Look at the profile of the younger brother on the character card. He is also a big boss. This is a double-concealed writing method, which is very good and I am looking forward to it. Fourth, similar to infinite flow. Fifth, Xiayu is cool!

I feel that the plot of this book is quite good, and I also like the heroine. In fact, although I don't like the part about the younger brother very much, I think the other plot aspects are okay. I recruited the younger brother to form a team to complete the level. I don't understand why there are so few comments and collections.

I have almost read the latest chapter. Let me tell you my feelings. Each event has its own characteristics, and most of them are particularly amazing. Although I wrote the role of the younger brother, he really didn't hold me back. He and his sister really joined forces! I like it, please give it a try and look forward to the follow-up!