The Legend of the Wang Family Who Cultivated Immortality

The first chapter is completely unnecessary and too verbose. Who cares how you wear it? No one cares if you are flushed down the toilet.

The price system must not collapse in the later stage. The speed of cultivation and family development is a bit too fast. You can suppress it and write more details. Don't just go to three or seven years in the blink of an eye, like the overt and covert fight with the two families next door, the suppression by the foundation-building forces, and the tide of small beasts. Spread, families start to get married, and the heroine can appear. For such mortal cultivators, breeding is the first priority besides making money. The heroine should give birth to monkeys with the protagonist as early as possible, and then recruit various female cultivators and recruit male cultivators.

The author's prices are so bad that no one commented on them. They are all talented people.

You all don't know that I can secretly write two chapters a day at work.

Old watchers move their fingers to vote for recommendations and so on.

Brothers, please don't be cowardly. Just watch it. If you like it, give a recommendation vote. If you don't like it, come to the comment area to give your opinions. I welcome all of them 😂😂

Many novels have sword intention, and they say that swordsmen are the best in attack. Then why are there no sword intention, bow and arrow intention, dagger intention, stick intention? Those who practice boxing have fist intention, and those who practice legs have leg intention. Are these conceptions weaker than sword intention? Those who cultivate immortals, those who use mirrors as weapons, orbs, and all that nonsense, don't these have the meaning of mirrors? If I use a shield, a turtle shell, or something like that to practice some tricks, will it be the best defense in the world?

It is indeed well written, and I should have no problem keeping it up and making it a fine product, but the number of daily updates is too small. A few suggestions for authors: ① Increase the number of daily updates ② Create a book club group ③ Let readers vote for recommendations ④ Go to other book club circles, Baidu Tieba, Douyin comments and promotions, or enter the author group to find other authors to recommend each other's books

The author writes well, don't show it off! Don't include the daily colloquial expressions and internet hot words about "awesome" and "handsome".

Brothers, if you have any suggestions for this book, you can give us some suggestions. Please tell me what the best name is. The author himself can be said to be a bad namer, and I think old readers can see it. I hope everyone can tell me more names, hehehehe😬😁😁😁😁

His father Erlinggen treated him coldly like this. Speechless

Okay, that's interesting. It's just too bland. And the breakthrough was too fast

The author should note that the cultivation of immortality is ancient and cannot use modern units, such as meters.

You can write it well! You don't know how to be a eunuch anymore, do you?

It is advisable for the author to keep writing books and practice his writing skills, but starting a family from scratch is really not easy to write, and the previous books were finished with only a few words, which will also affect the readers' confidence.

The foundation-building fruit tree discovered by the Zhao family, author, have you forgotten? It is a treasure that helps to practice the ninth level of Qi and build the foundation. The protagonist just doesn't want it. No one would dislike this kind of spiritual object that can help break through the big realm, right?

The introduction persuades me to quit, the author needs to pursue something

Damn it, I asked for monthly recommended tickets, so I donated them quickly. I haven't seen any tickets coming in for three days.

I'm a little afraid to subscribe to this author, for fear that he will run away again.