Mortal: I Have a Portable Fairy Mansion

The author's writing is very suitable for people like us, Xianyu, to appreciate it. Come on (⑉°з°)-♡I will vote for you monthly

Set it up too, and see who among the mortals will watch your journey of water, martial arts, and water.

You can't tell the difference between a woman and a cultivator. Your Taoist heart is unstable. Immortals who cultivate farts should become mortals! Just marry a wife and have children for the rest of your life.

Do you want to write millions of words about a mortal gang? ? ?

Not much to say, rubbish among rubbish! What a waste of time! Even Shennong couldn't bear it, so he left! ! !

The poison is real poison, it's stretched to the limit, and it keeps pushing for dozens of chapters. One moment I'm a waste, the next I want to become an immortal, and the next I can't give up my wife but I have to prepare for becoming an immortal. What have you prepared? The green bottle can be left to eat the ashes. You are really awesome. In the mortal world, people will kill people and set fire to the century-old medicinal herbs. You have all kinds of preparations in hand. I just can't let go of my wife and wait for it to eat the ashes. I almost poisoned myself to death. Immortal cultivators can increase their cultivation level after eating it. You, a warrior, don't know how many months you can stay peacefully and use the green bottle to get pearls and the best medicinal materials to achieve great martial arts? And then go out to find immortality? Changchun Kung is only about two to five spirit stones, and the Five Elements Kung Fu is about the same price. If you are afraid of being killed, just find a plot character, like Wan Xiaoshan, who should be able to exchange medicinal materials for the Kung Fu. You can also try his skills. You have to spend some spiritual stones to buy other skills! I almost smashed my phone after reading dozens of chapters. More than ten chapters were about sex with women. You are the best at Qidian.

I've read more than a dozen chapters and I'm tired! ! This book is destined to hit the streets. Regardless of how well written it is, the character of the main character is not likable.

Chapter 10: Abandon the Pit. It can be seen that the author wanted to write a realistic story, but I just want to say that it is too literary. Reading online texts is a pleasure, let alone fan fiction in online texts. You are not required to come up to kill decisively and have a clear goal. At least don't drag it out so much. You'll be done with the transition in half a chapter. You have to spend several chapters babbling and babbling. There are so many girls who are impressive among mortals. Even if you want to marry a mortal, you would still go after the three sisters of the Mo family. Why is the daughter of an original uncle doing something with big white legs and big breasts? You might as well stop traveling through time and just marry a wife in this world and go to work.

For a novel about cultivating immortals, you are still practicing martial arts in the martial arts world. You might as well write that Zhu Tianliu starts from martial arts, and the main world is a mortal. I'm speechless

Suddenly I thought of a mortal fanfic that I forgot the name of, even Golden Finger. I only remember that the main character is a bulldozer. Later, he went to the Chaotic Star Sea to help an old clam girl in the late stage of forming pills transform into a human form, and then took a two-day break. There seemed to be some water swordfish, baby carp beasts, etc. In the back. After a long time of searching, I couldn't find him, so he must have been removed from the shelves.

The writing is too watery. The little green bottle wants to grab it or not, but also wants to hug the thigh, and still wants to seize the opportunity. The indecisiveness is far different from the character of Han Laomo.

The character design is not good, it's not comfortable to write like this

The old lady's foot-binding cloth is smelly and long. With the way you write it, who dares to spend money to subscribe?

There are too many mental activities, too few conversations, and a very low sense of involvement.

In this way, I admire the author for persisting in writing so many words!

I don't know what I'm writing from the beginning to the end. There are so many beautiful things about it that I can't even practice Qi. I can't even get started in cultivating immortals. What kind of dual cultivation is there? I really don't know what it means to practice martial arts.

It can be said that it is rubbish. It is full of nonsense. People want to read fan fiction for fun. You are more rubbish than Han Li.

I've read more than a dozen chapters. It's really rubbish. Don't write it next time. Find a class.

There are no more than five lines of dialogue in the entire chapter, not one chapter, and 70% of the entire book is nonsense.

The first three chapters mainly explain that there is an immortal mansion. Then for Changchun Gong. I have been practicing external martial arts for two years. Instead of formulas, ask Han Li how to practice. Then I tried it myself. It's like reading a book and only reading the introduction. You can't even fool a child of several years old. Do you still want to grab the bottle? If the writing is not good, there is a high probability that it will be written as a dog-licking article later, which is called exchanging materials. Then he started to seduce women. After taking the bottle, you have strength and supplies, but are you afraid that you won't have a woman? Yunlu Laomo understands. The writing relies on the defense.

After reading more than seventy chapters, I was stunned that I didn't even have the first level of Qi training.

Wouldn't you find someone to test your spiritual roots? Do you still have to wait 18 years for Han Li?

What are you writing about? Garbage🖕🏻

I have written 4 or 5 books, all of which are eunuchs! Author level lv1! Brother author, don't you realize your problem? Can you write cool articles? Is your protagonist decisive in killing? Is your protagonist invincible at the same level? Does your protagonist have opportunities? Is your protagonist Beauty a romantic? Don't write down great principles. Everyone is here to enjoy themselves, not to be educated by you!

I endured it again and again, and I endured it again and again. I couldn't bear it anymore. I read almost 100 chapters. The author was really too good. I remember when it was about 60 or 70 chapters, one idea could last more than a chapter. I was convinced. What could the author do wrong? In order to harm us, the author also insisted on writing the protagonist as procrastinating, hesitant, indecisive, thinking about it but not daring to do it, and the character of fear of wolves and tigers is written to the point of death. I'm afraid this is not, it is also the author's character, otherwise the character would not be described so clearly! (So ​​after seeing this, I really can't stand it anymore. Come here and complain! Author, stop writing in the future and find a class.

Author, where is the portable immortal mansion that your book is titled?

I'm convinced, I have a portable immortal mansion, and it took more than 180 chapters to build the foundation and start knitting.

Worse than a dog. Dogs will look for food when they are hungry, run away when hurt, and show their teeth when offended. Dogs have subjective agency. This realism is a shame for those who travel through time. Don't take the initiative, just be nagging and nagging, and still think her mother wants to become an immortal. Waiting for Han Li to feed. Wimp.

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The writing is very good, I would like to recommend my new book Mortal: I just practice Taoism and cultivate immortality