Sun's Immortal Journey

The sect that lasted for tens of thousands of years was gone in one fell swoop? And when it's not very weak? Don't you even have a few means to support others? I think the other three major sects must have lost a little bit of their high-end combat power, or if they just want to escape in this realm, they can only escape one or two, right? Why do you feel like every time you go there, people are dying, but you don't feel any pain here? I think when you reach a certain level, you won't be beaten to death so easily. Besides, you don't have any formations, so it's not like you can't run away. Just a personal opinion.

After reading nearly a hundred chapters, I feel like it's too bland.

The name of the monster is difficult to comment on 😥

The success of the family lies in persistence. In fact, Qinglian is not good at all aspects of writing. She may not be good at the front but not at the back, but her grades are still stable because besides the advantage of writing first, the author said that she writes to the fairy world.

Sun Xiaochuan, the number one genius of the Sun family, is on the list! ! !

It's so unreasonable for you to advance to one level in fifty years. How long is the lifespan of the Foundation Establishment stage? With such an improvement, the protagonist will not be able to reach the later stage of Foundation Establishment until he dies of old age.

It took more than fifty years for the pig's trotters to enter the fourth floor of the foundation building. It feels like ten years to complete the fifth and sixth floors. Isn't this time setting very unreasonable? Moreover, how could Sun Mingzeng be so slow? How could Sun Mingzeng be so strong and the second spiritual root is so good? There is no reason to be so slow in one foundation building period.

The writing is too poor. If you don't have much in your stomach, just write normally. Don't use idioms and allusions indiscriminately. On the contrary, it will be ridiculous. For example, to describe a family that is strong, just write strong. If you write about strong strength, it will not be useful at all. Tong, not cheap is used to describe value, not strength. For example, Sun Xunkang failed to build the foundation and died. If he is remote, he will write that he lost his life. What the hell is the life of a beautiful woman? A man who is dozens of years old, what a shitty life he has? There are many more like this. You can tell at a glance that the author has no ink at all, and he also likes to pretend that people use words indiscriminately, which is disgusting.

I mentioned the natal magic weapon twice during the golden elixir period, but it turned out that even at the eighth level, I never mentioned it again. The Phoenix Stone is a natal magic weapon. If you don't want to write about it, don't bring up this concept. I mentioned it myself, but never wrote about it. It felt very uncomfortable to read.

The protagonist himself has already broken through the third level, and has experienced the feedback from the spiritual veins. He also has dozens of mid-level second-level elixirs, which not only increase his mana, but also have miraculous effects on breakthroughs. As a result, the protagonist has spent 50 years practicing day and night and has just broken through the fourth level. The dual spiritual roots are still on the third level after 50 years. It is written like a kind of feces.

After the Nascent Soul Ceremony, a wave of invitations are needed for the 800th birthday. Holding one is equivalent to collecting the resources of the Song Dynasty. The lifespan of the Nascent Soul stage must be explained, and the lifespan of the Divine Transformation stage must be explained. It is recommended to make it more reasonable. Otherwise, each major realm is nine levels, and the lifespan is simply not enough to cultivate to the next realm.

It's well written, not too sinister. I just want to say that you can give the protagonist some opportunities, such as obtaining high-level elixirs in the Beast Control Mountains. There is no need to write too much about the Qi training realm. The main thing is to explain the setting and background. The development of the family after the foundation is the main content.

I just gave up after seeing that it took 50 years to go from the third floor to the fourth floor.

It's really too poisonous. Let's not talk about writing his wife to death. It took 50 years to go from the third level to the fourth level of foundation building. There are still various elixirs and spiritual vein upgrades to feed back. The same is true for another double spiritual root. The protagonist's son actually broke through the golden elixir from the ninth level of foundation building and polished his cultivation for hundreds of years. It can be dozens or even hundreds of years. I don't understand that you have so much time to waste in the foundation building period? The prices of various commodities are also outrageous. The Foundation Establishment Pills are actually more expensive than the weapons used by real Jindan people. Some people actually say that this kind of novel is good-looking.

What a nonsense novel, the foundation building period is 50 years of seclusion, from the third level of foundation building to the fourth level of foundation building. . . . There are four to nine floors. . . How many 50 years will it take? How long is the lifespan of the foundation building period? . . Speechless. . . . .

It kind of affects the reading. I mentioned before that the Hundred Tribes Conference is about 10 years away, and then inexplicably after practicing for 50 years, the eldest brother only improved one level in 50 years... The most outrageous thing is that the peer who raised spiritual beasts, I remember that he built the foundation before ascending the pulse, and 50 years later he still built the first level of the foundation. Before, I suspected that the time was written wrong and it should be 5 years, but the following content is all about a 50-year timeline, which is a bit outrageous.

The spiritual root is not prominent, there is no golden finger, and he is not a time traveler and a reborn person. How can such a person be the protagonist? What's there to write about?

The protagonist Chun Chun is a tool man. His family provides him with almost no help, and he has to hand over half of the loot.

I feel like the protagonist doesn't have any unique signature tricks. He must have some special strengths and talents. Otherwise, how will he advance to the Golden Elixir and Nascent Soul realm later?

It's too dull and many settings are unreasonable. A family that has been passed down for a thousand years has no skills at all. There are many Qi and casual cultivators who can refine pills and weapons. A family with so many foundation-building families has nothing. The most important thing is that everything is difficult. One foundation-building pill requires 30,000 spiritual stones. This is crazy.

Is there any setting for writing foundation layers? In the past, the setting of cultivation levels in fairy tales was already very mature, so it was enough to just use it. It's always divided into levels 1 to 9, which seems so jarring.

When writing about the development of the Sun family, I did not see any innovative talents, nor did I see any general process of the development of various cultivation arts. There was no accumulation and organization of inherited skills, powerful special spells, spiritual arts, and treasure arts. The family scripture library was like garbage, the accumulation of family treasures was not mentioned, and the family elixir garden was like a decoration. Some things were unclear, and cultivation was not mentioned. There was no collection of spiritual plants for various needs.

If the author doesn't know how to write about prices, then don't write about it. A first-level high-quality attack talisman costs 3 spirit stones, and a first-level high-quality attack magic weapon costs 300 (as mentioned in the first auction set of magic tools). Defense is more expensive than attack, at least 400. The first place in the competition will be rewarded with a second-level low-grade attack talisman. Ten first-grade high-grade attack talismans only cost 30. If you refine 10 first-grade high-grade attack talismans, they will be worth second-grade. Does 30 become 500? Why don't you sell blood? The inconsistencies are laughable. There are also first-level high-grade ones that cost three yuan a piece. I really vomited. Do you want to see how much the low- and medium-grade first-order ones are priced at? How about wholesale low-level talismans? Why waste time and effort refining high-grade talismans? Why buy broken talisman pens and practice fire pillar techniques? Oh, by the way, fire pillars and fire rocks sell for 3 yuan each. So what kind of fire pillars do you draw? Isn't it better to draw simple fire rocks? The meat of the first-level low-grade spiritual beasts at Feeding the Worms weighs a pound a piece. Do you want to calculate how much a cow weighs? From the beginning to the end, it's all TM routines, and the key is to get yourself involved. The old man's story about mortals cultivating immortality. A few thousand dollars for a fifth-level monster is enough, but yours is even more ridiculous. Sure enough, one of these immortal cultivators who came from a low-level foundation-building family is a novice. Wouldn't it be great if you can get along in such a broken family and let me go to the sect? When the protagonist reaches a higher realm, either his family will grow in the ground like cabbage, or the protagonist will advance to a larger realm and use resources to feed each person and lead the clan. The hardships at the beginning are all nonsense, so why do you need a family? I don't read the back of this book, but I know from the front that this is still the same routine. None of your type of family books have answered this question. Even if you open a family that upgrades as the number of members increases, it is more reasonable than this fool's routine.

When do you go home and show off, don't stay out like a casual cultivator all the time?

The novel about the family tradition is quite good. Try not to cheat. It's okay if there is a treasure.

Author, I would like to make a suggestion. I just came here to read it and haven't subscribed to the chapter yet. Could you please stop using those awkward words and sentences or use them rationally? Don't feel uncomfortable watching it over and over again!

There is only a spiritual medicine garden. To build a branch in the boundless sea, it is better to open some spiritual fish lakes, engage in first-level, second-level, and third-level spiritual fish breeding, recruit monks with spiritual fish breeding technology, and finally become a wealthy family selling spiritual fish to complete the unfinished dream of the fisherman Zhao Shoushou.

​​Bai Qingling... It was clear that when she was in the Beast Control City, she was described as childish and she didn't like her. Later, she went to Bai's house, and then they met again and it was a love affair. It was the kind of love that both parties liked but the parents didn't agree with! Are you laying the groundwork? How many words does the protagonist and her experiences add up to? Are you trying to force yourself into love? The same goes for the development of the Sun family. Two contemporary seed players went to explore the cave together. If they were gone, wouldn't this generation of your family be wasted? The protagonist goes to the war without any preparation! The fire souls captured by the technique are all captured on the battlefield, and can only be refined and used after defeating them! It takes several months to refine a weapon before it can be used! Spells can only be learned after the war begins! What were you doing when you first established the foundation? The protagonist has no characteristics at all, including skills, talents, physique, and spiritual consciousness. None of them are special, nor is he stronger than others, and there is no golden finger. Then the protagonist is nothing, has constant adventures, and can't beat Xiaoqiang! How virtuous and capable is the protagonist? Why did he go to the end? I can't stand reading anymore. I admire those who subscribe to the later chapters! When I clicked on the author's avatar, I realized that I had read two of the author's books, and I had the patience to read them a little and then couldn't read them anymore! The early stage is too bland and long-winded, suppressing the development of the protagonist. The protagonists are all mediocre people. It is obviously impossible to become an immortal and ancestor. It is because they are the protagonists of the author, and all reasonable and unreasonable ones will become immortals! Successful people must have something special about them. Your protagonist is worse than the supporting role. It's boring to watch!

The story frame and events are okay, but the language description seems a bit nondescript. It's a semi-antique style, but the way it's used makes it feel awkward and unnatural.

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