Zhang Haobai Who Swallowed the Starry Sky

I just read about ten chapters. The overall feeling is good and there are some new ideas. However, there are many places where the logic is not smooth and it is not easy to understand quickly.

In the Earth Chapter in Swallowed Starry Sky, fists are too poisonous. Fighting monsters with knives, guns, and swords can save time and effort. You can use knives to break through the monster's neck, stomach or buttocks. How to fight with fists? Monsters are anywhere from a few meters to tens of meters in length. Can you kill it with several times or even ten times the strength? Just like the golden-horned giant beast, without the knife and gun given by Babata, neither Hong nor Thor could break its belly and seriously injure it. How would the protagonist fight with fists? Can hitting it on the head or belly break its defense?

Doesn't the genius battle require everyone to use the same body, and the test is to understand the rules? . The protagonist's genius battle emphasizes physical strength, and it is definitely not the so-called secret method to bless the body strength, because it is mentioned that the body strength is improved by using the All Souls Purple Blood Juice, and then it is also improved in the genius battle.

The Earth Chapter is by far the best fanfic, it is detailed and realistic. The upgrade makes sense. After entering the universe, the plot feels a bit thin. In fact, when doing training tasks, you can open a few longer dungeons and carefully write several stories and plots. For example, Dragon Tower Star, Xueluo Continent, and Magic Mountain can be written in detail and have more plots. But now it's time to upgrade the Territory Lord. The Territory Lord is in a period of strong military strength. It is recommended to write more copies. The quality of this fanfic seems to be good so far. I hope you can write it patiently and don't have to rush to upgrade it to become a classic work of the fanfic. For example, Lord of All Creations has been written for three years, and it is still very good.

The protagonist's understanding of the law is too slow. Although it is not low, the genius battle is about to begin. If we don't cheat the protagonist, it will be too late. Not to mention defeating Bolan, at least he has to enter the secret realm of Taichu, right?

Chapter 28 of Chapter 7 of the original book Endless Geniuses describes the battle of geniuses: Everyone has the same physical fitness. . If you say that the main character's skills can strengthen the understanding of the law, so I think it's okay, but the more I see the genius battle later, the more wrong it becomes.

Alas, I have gone astray as I write. The plot of Thunder World has reached its peak. In the original universe, when people did not understand the laws, but continued to use all their strength to cultivate the so-called seeds of laws, I had a hunch that the author would never be able to write anymore, because such plot development will only create more and more conflicts with the original plot. Sure enough, I scrolled through the table of contents to the end and looked at the comment area, which directly confirmed my feeling. It is a verification of the taste ability of an old book friend.

While not wanting to be an enemy of Luo Feng, you still find someone to fuck Luo Feng according to the original work. Isn't this sick? He even said that he was afraid of affecting Luo Feng's growth. . .

At the moment, I personally don't think it's too toxic. Many people criticize Zhang Hao for being a brainless licker and deliberately helping Luo Feng to awaken the spiritual master. I think he no longer regards himself as a villain, so he and Luo Feng are high school classmates, and they will face the Golden Horned Behemoth and future world beasts together. It is not that difficult to accept being friends with Luo Feng. And regarding the slow progress, I think it is because the author has set this up to neither big nor small, so the protagonist grows slowly along with the plot.

There are so many Devouring fans, but yours is the most novel and not poisonous. I hope the author will write more about the role of the clone to make this more interesting.

Tell me what you think about the fandom. Generally speaking, the plot needs to be well designed and interconnected, and the logic only needs to be acceptable on the surface. To use system flow, you need to have clear restrictions, conditions or costs. You cannot increase it too easily, otherwise your combat power will soon be out of balance. For example, a certain system can infinitely improve the perception, which is very exciting at first, but once you reach the universe, you must improve the perception of the laws. As a result, in order to maintain the feeling of pleasure, you have to practice the 10 laws of the star level, which seriously violates the logic of the original work. The same goes for the Earth Chapter. When the system comes in, you have to have subtle movement skills at the beginning, a high-level warrior. If you add it once, you have to have perfect movement skills, a warrior, and specialize in sword skills. If you do it again, you will be a god of war. With such rapid and unlimited improvement, there is no need to enter a martial arts gym, fight monsters, take risks and sell money, improve family life, buy cheat equipment, revenge, elite training camps, or apprenticeships. The system is so fast and awesome. It takes the protagonist a year to develop, and the system recommends the invincible God of War. Doesn't it mean everything? These rich plots have become meaningless and uninteresting due to the rapid improvement of the system. Many fans are like this. They create a system that improves quickly, but they are unwilling to create original plots. The design is to simply follow the original work and copy the original plot. This writing method is outdated. In the past few years, fans with high monthly votes have not written like this. For example, Lord of All Things has a lot of original plots, and the protagonist's cultivation route is also different from that of the original Luo Feng. The current Dou Zhan Yan Shen has a completely original plot and original training logic, and even the human race is separated from it. The levels need to be divided very carefully so that the protagonist always has something to do and is always improving. For example, in addition to the big level, there are also body skills, force generation, and law awareness, and then body skills are divided into proficiency, subtlety, perfection, and artistic conception. The force can be multiplied. The Nine Layers Thunder Knife is divided into nine layers. One layer increases the force by 0.7 Times. Then in the universe, the force in the universe can be up to 100 times, but there are new "levels" such as amplitude and gene multiples. Gene multiples are generally up to 100 times, but special beings can have 10081 times perfect genes, so the protagonist has to climb up the levels little by little for this new level. As a result, when we reach the master of the universe, we still have 100,000 times more genes. Let's keep working hard. I feel that since we are all fans, as long as it conforms to the basic logic of the original work, we can boldly imagine and design a plot and growth direction that is different from the original work. For fans, what everyone is interested in is the world created by the original novel, the gameplay, the plot, the aesthetics, the cool points, etc. Similar to a game, the protagonist of the original book plays it once as a warrior, and the fanfic takes the reader to play it again as a mage or other profession. I think this is one of the values ​​of fandom.

I have finished reading the latest chapters. The bald intelligent life recognizes its master, the skeleton masters the universe of the true god, the way of the military body, the body of the eight laws, killing Moro, etc. It is very well written.

In the original work, Luo Feng didn't pay much attention to the training of warriors. When he went to the Immortal Altar for the first time, he had about 50 times of power. Any secret book in the universe could have more than ten or twenty times the power. You created your own secret book to seize power. When the genius battle began, you only reached 12 times of power through hard training. At this level, you won't be beaten to death in a genius battle? I really don't understand why you are trying so hard to seize this momentum. Unless it is a secret that can increase the amplitude on the basis of perfect force, it is not worth holding on to. Then again, being able to increase the amplitude of your perfect force is not something you can create on your own at this stage. Any warrior on Genius Zhanzongzhan can exert 50 times more force. What do you want to do with 12 times the force? Moreover, after absorbing so many secrets from the universe, isn't it too funny to only be more than ten times stronger in the end? (Perfect force refers to the force that can exert 100 times of one's own basic strength, and above it is the amplitude. The theoretical amplitude of the universe is 100 times, which means that it can achieve 10,000 times of force in the ultimate state of the original universe.) It's okay to follow the path of self-created secrets, but after all, it's a benchmark against the average. The earth has no secrets to guide you, so your vision is relatively poor and you can only achieve single-digit strength. Don't go into the universe and use the earth's standards to benchmark your strength. It seems very funny.

The dead river field can gradually evolve into blood nerves, directly integrating the beast blood body training technique with the field. With 480 million blood god sons, the blood shadow will immediately turn into the blood and water nourishing method power

Momojiji, 300 chapters, is still at the universe level. This strength is described as speechless, sometimes it is fierce, and sometimes it is not strong. None of the self-made ones are comparable to anything else

Thunder and Lightning Martial Arts Will Suppression Room, are you serious?

Pangu used an ax to create the world, gods used magic weapons, and even Wukong used a Ruyi golden cudgel. When Wu Song fights tigers, he uses two sticks first, and only uses his fists when he has no chance.

If you don't rush to the planet level first if you have the resources, what will happen to your mother-in-law? What difficulties are there on earth when we reach the planetary level? The book you wrote makes me feel uncomfortable.

What a failure to hit this with your fists! In the later stages, if your fists are more powerful than other people's elemental weapons, just blow them up.

I feel that the author did not take full advantage of his own strengths and tell the story in detail, but instead engaged in the ten principles of cosmology at the universe level. Now this is not a fun experience, but a boring routine that lacks imagination. The golden fingers and stories of the new book are not as good as those of Zhang Haobai.

It's very well written. I feel like writing it this way is one of the first among Devouring fanfics. It's not as messy as some brainless fan fiction. Devouring readers are basically more sensible, and less of them like brainless fiction. This kind of rhythm and plot are just right.

What is the level of semi-advanced warrior? The apprentice level itself only has a strength gap, and there is no such thing as a realm or bottleneck. Where did you, a quasi-advanced warrior, come from? Is the saying in the universe going to be: Apprentice's late second-level peak Dzogchen?

Forget about a bunch of settings that deviate from the original work, there are 550 chapters in total, and I was still the Realm Master at the 500th chapter...

The story of low-level scavenging warriors recovering the flesh and blood of beast soldiers is quite well written. The purpose of writing a fanfic is to make up for the shortcomings of the original work under reasonable circumstances. A previous fan also added something: domestic pets protect their owners, and animals rescued by humans repay their kindness, which very well supplements the one-size-fits-all loophole in the original work (that is, all animals are bad after mutation and can only kill, hurt and destroy).

Some suggestions: In the way of the military body, after the foundation is built, the clones of the skeleton clan can practice it. You can even set it as a dead end. No one in the skeleton clan has cultivated to the realm of true gods. The protagonist's clone of the skeleton clan has opened up the inner universe and made it through. (You can bury a line here. When crossing the reincarnation passage, you can take people with you in your body to develop in the Origin Continent) As for the human race, you should practice the Cosmic Chaos Monument, and you can follow the route of the Secret Pattern Map that Luo Feng has not completed. Then, you can also set the skeleton clan clone and the human clan body to die when they die and cannot re-condensate their bodies. The human race is going to get the secret method of innate clones, and get a few clones to increase the sense of anticipation!

The earth is not the same as before, and it has not even been stated that it will be taken back when the master of the universe becomes powerful. When you open a company and become the master of the universe, you still have to act according to the shares. It is not as good as the original conditions.

I find it quite interesting, but the one I'm currently using is relatively small. I don't know how it will be with the enlightenment rules in the future, but if I don't open a bigger one, I guess I'll end up going the same way as Thor and Hong, and they won't be able to pass the peak genius battle in the universe.

Change the title of this book and write a good introduction. Maybe it will become popular. This is the first time I have seen a star-swallowing fanfic written so much like a tomato.

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This is a good book. The author doesn't care about other people's opinions and stick with it