Naruto: This Naruto Isn't Passionate at All

The protagonist is written like a child

The character collapsed, not cold enough, and lost the special aloofness of a person who travels to another world It was amazing at the beginning, but when I wrote about Xunzi, I got it wrong Xunzi is a failure The interaction with Kyuubi was okay except at the beginning, but after a few words, it lost its character Kyuubi should have less scenes, and it is more appropriate to use force to subdue it Using Kyuubi chakra to exercise at the beginning is very good Slutty mouth Why are you talking so much to Kyuubi? After all, you've lost your composure.

How should I put it, it feels like it has changed but it doesn't seem to have changed. It's possible to write a cool novel but it insists on abusing the protagonist. Xunzi's part is very strange from the beginning to the follow-up. Anticlimactic

This book is terrible, don't read it

Two lives are human beings, are you sure? Maybe the two lifetimes combined are less than ten years old.

The Nine-Tails Chakra is as conspicuous as a firelight in the dark... You actually separated the Nine-Tails, and no one has noticed yet? Do you really think those sentient ninjas are just doing nothing?

The author's writing about Xunzi is really not good, because there must be many readers who have been persuaded to quit. The protagonist directly surrenders to Zhiming, knowing that she has a problem. The protagonist is as if she is stupid. At the beginning, I felt that she was completely indifferent to the protagonist, but she still had an indifferent face. In the blink of an eye, I felt that she might be sincere. The subsequent development was inexplicable. I remember Kyuubi The jinchūriki can sense people's malice and good intentions (I'm not a pure Naruto fan, so I don't know much about it). It seems to be the ability that Naruto has after mastering the Nine-Tails mode. Kagura's inner eye seems to also have this ability. You can let the protagonist now have this ability to sense the heart of Xunzi, whether it's good intentions or good intentions with guilt or a little malice. Then try to open your heart to her (as for why you are kind, you can make up your own reasons). My idea is not good, but it is better than your inexplicable wisdom. Also, I saw in the comments that the protagonist is just like a child and not like an adult who travels through time. I read it and it is indeed like this. If you write this, if the protagonist is set to accept the time travel The original version of Uzumaki Naruto in the memory of Etsuja is okay, and I have seen some readers who think about darkness. Based on what I have read so far, the third generation of this book is not pure black. Naruto is not treated according to the standards of weapon jinchūriki and is considered the hero of Konoha, the son of Namikaze Minato and Kushina. As for those who are black, they should still be Danzo's black pot.

The subject of Naruto has been around for more than ten years, and there is not a single good book that can be written where one directly travels and becomes the protagonist.

It's hard to describe how high it is and how low it is. It starts from the top of the mountain and goes downhill all the time.

Since you are indifferent, you must be indifferent and ruthless. What does He Erzhuzi mean? Also, I feel like this Naruto loves Konoha very much. Is it really good to show his power to control the Nine-Tails so early? You know, the darkness of Konoha is something no one can imagine. I have nothing to say about Hinata, what about Kakashi? I've always known that Naruto is the son of Nagataimei, so I just had a few low-key chats with you and made saury once, and now I believe it? You are a time traveler, not the original Naruto. This cold and quiet persona really does not fit in at all, and is almost causing trouble. Nothing good will happen if he is with Erzhuzi. Naruto, Gen, and Weasel are all paying attention. Why do you want to improve his strength so much? Improve his strength and continue to compete with you, continue to expose his strength? , I don't know what the plot is in the big outline, don't blame me, I just wanted to complain when I saw this, don't blame me, don't blame me