American Variety Show 1999

Some suggestions for the author I have also read some of the author's first two books, although I have not finished them all. Please give me some suggestions! 1. The creativity is good, but the writing seems to be a bit behind, and the plot description is dry but not full. For example, the previous book, the first large copy of the world in the late Qing Dynasty, is still online, the characters and plot are vivid, but it becomes pale in the middle and late stages. Maybe you are under great pressure from grades, and you will become more and more like an outline. My suggestion on this point is to draw more nutrients from other excellent works. You can use more pen and ink when describing the environment, characters, dialogues, psychology and even fighting methods to make the plot appear full and three-dimensional. Your works tend to be fantasy fairy tales. , Then you need to strengthen your knowledge reserve of folklore and religion. In this regard, I recommend you to read Weiye Wizards by Taoist Daoquanzi. As a professional, it is really not difficult to cover up. Various folklore legends from the East and the West can be easily integrated into the plot, and the magic practice can be quoted from scriptures. Interspersed with various poems, sermons, and prayers, especially the fighting scenes are either magnificent or ingenious, making people feel as if they are actually there. It can be said that it is difficult to find a better description of fighting. 2. The level of power must be gradual, and the golden finger must be used appropriately. , It's still the same as the previous book, Golden Finger Altar of the Heavens, which initially played a role that was fairly consistent with the development of the plot, but when it came to the Thai plot, the skills and items that quickly rose to the level of gods and demons collapsed too quickly, so you find that these books of yours are becoming more and more difficult to write towards the end. Regarding this point, my suggestion is that the plot of the book should revolve around the protagonist, not around the golden finger. A reasonable method is to add heavy restrictions to your golden finger, which only plays a limited auxiliary role. And every time you get a resource, you must use it to promote the development of the plot, rather than just useless descriptions. Look back at the low-level resources you got in the early stage. Except for the beginning, they hardly promote the plot. This is a waste of settings, and makes it difficult for you to control the development of the power level in the later stage. In the end, it ends hastily The author will sort it out and make up for the shortcomings. As long as you can ensure that the supervisor is not unfinished and does not become a great god or a small god, you still have the potential

Save your claws and recommend a movie world gift package [Note: Many authors nowadays write about movies and TV shows, but the actual number of film viewings is really unflattering and seriously lacking] ←A:→"Macau Series", "Plan A", "Anna and the Martial Arts", "Ender's Game", "Artemis Hotel", "Love, Death and Robots Series", "Alita: Battle Angel", "Ala" "Ding Live", "Anna", "Dora the Explorer: The Lost City of Gold", "Dr. Night: Morbius" ←B:→"Crisis in Paris", "Batman Series", "Transformers Series", "Night at the Museum Series", "Batman v Superman: Justice League", "Braving the Storm", "Granny in Disguise Series", "Project Baby", "Sicario Series", "Back "Water Fight", "The Flower Series", "The Fountain of Youth", "The Frozen Man Series", "Bargeman", "Bollywood Robot Love", "Funny Bugs: MapleStory Movie", "Bad Boys", "Edgewalker" ←C:→"The Great Wall", "48 Hours", "Lucy", "The Amazing Spider-Man Series", "Spider-Man Series", "Superman Series", "Superman" "The Red Flame Series", "Assassin's League", "Superstorm", "Superman", "The Punisher Series", "Tron: Legacy", "City Hunter", "Super Project", "Assassin Schoolgirl", "Transcendence", "Red Police Dragon", "The Rescuers", "Battleship", "Beyond the Edge", "Superman High School", "Equator", "Return to Earth", "Jungle Cruise", "The Incredibles Series", "Super "School Bully", "Power Rangers", "The Bomb Disposer Series", "Reboot" and "Assassination Novelist" ←D:→"The Bourne Agents", "Mission: Impossible Series", "The Bourne Supremacy Series", "Journey to the Center of the Earth Series", "Independence Day Series", "The Day the Earth Stood Still", "Dragon Wars Series", "Raiders of the Lost Ark Series", "Raiders", "Hellboy Series", "Blade" "Warrior Series", "God of Gamblers Series", "Taoist Out of the Mountain", "Grave Robbers Notes", "Gambler Series", "Taxi Express Series", "The Third Wave", "24 Hours", "Operation Broken Arrow", "First Blood", "Dave", "The Fifth Element", "Bumblebee", "Venom Series", "The Sixth Day", "Detective Dee Series", "District 9", "Detective Pikachu", "Bloodshot" and "Westward Journey": "Origin" "The Great Illusionist" "The Past of Copper Mountain" ←E:→"2012 End of the World" "24 Hours Rebirth" "E, T, Alien" ←F:→"Crazy Alien" "Anti-Corruption Storm Series" "Mad Max Series" "Avengers Series" "Legend of the Gods" "Divergent Series" "Counterattack" "Rebirth of the Dragon", "African Monk", "Lucky Star", "Eagle Project", "The Flying Dragon", "Train to Busan Series", "Van Helsing", "Spy Agent Series", "Flying Magic", "Extraordinary Family", "Faqiu Tianguan: Kunlun Ruins" ←G: → "Kung Fu Yoga", "The Expendables Series", "Iron Man Series", "Tomb Raider Series", "Kung Fu", "National Treasure Series" "The Golden Taoist", "Ghost Blasts Ghosts", "Mr. Exorcist", "Godzilla Series", "Kung Fu Panda Series", "Kung Fu Dream", "The King of Kung Fu", "Ghost Blowing the Lantern: The Ancient City", "Ghost in the Shell", "Domestic Lingling Paint", "The Day the Country went Bankrupt", "Ghost Blowing the Lantern: Wuxia Coffin Mountain", "Godzilla 2: King of the Monsters", "Ghost Strike: Fighting Violence with Violence", "Antique Bureau Middle Game" ←H:→"Chill Series", "Phantom Driver Series", "Pacific Rim Series", "The Hobbit Series", "Harry Potter Series", "Underworld Series", "Men in Black Series", "Die Hard Series", "The Day After Tomorrow", "Doom", "The Matrix Series", "The Golden Compass", "Ghost Tour", "Once Upon a Time", "The Royal Sisters Series", "Burning Island" "Red Zone", "Royal Dragon", "Golden Island Adventure", "Operation Red Sea", "Red Sparrow", "Butterfly Effect Series", "Black Panther", "Dark Minds", "One Piece Animation", "The Dark Tower", "One Piece Animation", "Aquaman", "Hanna", "Happy Canopy", "Legion of the Living Dead", "Black Widow", "Huangmiao Village·Underground Beauty", "Red Notice", "The Matrix Reboot" " Golden Spider City" ←I:→ ←J:→"Kong·Skull Island", "Escape", "Sniper: Ultimate Hunt", "Xxx Return", "Bay Driver", "The Machinist Series", "Theft", "Cold City", "Arrival", "Nine-Storey Tower", "Sniper Elite: Reloaded", "Pirates of the Caribbean Series", "King Kong" "Wolf Series", "Elysium", "Automata", "Now You See Me", "The Rescue Series", "The Hunger Games Series", "King Kong Series", "Homefront", "Bad Boys Series", "Battle for the Planet of the Apes", "Rush Hour Series", "Police Story Series", "Mr. "Zombies Are Afraid", "Blooded", "The Meg", "John Wick", "Escape Series", "Zombie Detective", "Escape Series", "Zombie Detective", "Evolution", "Jack the Giant", "Evolution", "Captain Marvel", "Robot 9", "Beautiful Weapons", "Dog", "Xx", "Escape", "Escape", "Zombie Reincarnation", "Memory Reappearance", "Empire of the Robots", "Escape" "Sky Rescue", "Vanguard", "Giant Loophole" ←K:→"Accounting Assassin", "Anaconda Series", "Happy Ghost Series", "Fast Food Truck", "Rampage Behemoth", "Clone", "Science Fiction Master: Guardian Bird", "Kunlun Taoist Scripture", "Courier" ←L:→"The Wandering Earth", "Predators", "London Has Fallen", "The Incredible Hulk Series", "Thunder" "God Series", "Soul Tank Series", "Green Lantern", "Battle of Los Angeles", "Dragon Knight", "Flying Swords of Dragon", "The Agent Next Door", "Austin Powers Next Door", "Mr. Phantom", "Brothers of the Dragon", "Fang", "Heart of the Dragon", "Dragons in Shaolin", "Monday Hunt", "Another Earth", "Army", "Kiss of the Dragon", "Meteor Man", "Integrity", "Pray on the City", "Shazam!" "Dragon Coffin Tomb: The Wolf King of Western Xia" "Longyun Town Strange Tales" "The Mysterious Incident in Lop Nur" ←M:→"Operation Mekong" "Doomsday Collapse" "Edge of Tomorrow" "Warcraft" "U. S. "Captain Series", "The Mummy Series", "Tomorrowland", "Adventures in Devil's Mountain", "Magic Warriors", "Catwoman", "Ghost Academy", "Ghost Club", "Mini Agent", "Witch", "Skyscraper Rescue" " "Magic Teacher", "Tom and Jerry Series", "Adventurer", "Moscow Has Fallen Series", "The Sorcerer's Apprentice", "Jupiter Ascending", "Tom and Jerry 2021", "The Disciple", "Confident" ←N:→"Angry in Xiangxi", "Rescue in Time and Space", "Wrath·Serious Case" ←O:→"European Strategy" ←P:→"Break" "Ruffian Hero Series" "Prometheus", "Charlie's Angels", "Human Torch", "The Climber" ←Q:→"Global Storm", "Superman: Hancock", "Doctor Strange", "Total Recall" "The Green Hornet" "The Exorcist" "The Exorcist" "The Fighter Series" "The Bird Series" "A Chinese Ghost Story Series" "Qi Men Dun Jia" "Dear, I Shrunk the Child" "Qi Men Dun Jia 2020" "Green Faced Shura" ←R:→"Teenage Mutant Ninja Turtles Series", "Human Purge Plan Series", "Human Office", "Artificial Intelligence", "People on the Road Series", "The Crowd", "Human Wrath", "Daily Fantasy Guide" ←S:→"Detective Pu Songling", "Wonder Woman", "Slaying Wolf: Greedy Wolf", "Fast and Furious Series", "Bounty Hunter", "Zodiac", "Slayer" "Wolf 2", "Resident Evil Series", "Famous Four Series", "Watchmen: Age of War", "Fantastic Beasts Series", "Despicable Me Series", "Mysterious Code", "Sharknado Series", "10,000 Years Before History", "Death Race Series", "The Host", "Holy Grail: City of Bones", "Fantastic Four Series", "Minority Report", "Time Bureau", "Mr. And Mrs. Smith", "Piranha Series", "Myth", "Two Dragons" "The Club", "The Brave Cannon", "Ten Brothers", "The Inquisitor", "Death Comes Series", "Deadpool Series", "Upgrade 2018", "Time Trap", "Deep Sea Prison Break", "Life and Death Sniper", "Slay Men" " "Skinny Tiger, Fat Dragon", "War of the Worlds", "Triple Threat: Cross-border Rescue", "Mysterious Wonderland", "Tearing Apocalypse", "Ghosts of Life and Death", "The Abyss", "Dead Ghosts Prying the Wall", "Three-Pointed Tree Era Series", "Brothers Collide with Ghosts" "Death Radius" "Stupid Brain Science City" "Shrunk Life" "Lightning Rebirth" "Amateur Agent" "Walker Series" "Gemini Man/Gemini Man" "Sand Sea Candle Dragon" "Young Hackers: Alien Group" "Victory" "Water Monster" "Water Monster 2: Blackwood" "Out of Control Player" "Dune" "Shang-Chi and the Legend of the Ten Rings" "Young Class" "Uncharted" "The Instant Universe" ←T:→ "Eye in the Sky", "Special Forces Series", "Special Identity", "Predator Series", "Skyrim", "Agent Sauter", "Guinea Pig Agents", "Transparent Man Series", "Heroes", "Secret Agents", "Tai Chi Zhang Sanfeng", "Ready Player One", "Escape from Clone Island", "Truant Dragon Series", "Librarian Series", "Angel Has Fallen", "They Call Me Jike", "Sweetheart Girl", "Special Delivery", "The" 355 ←U:→ ←V:→ ←W:→"13 Hours" "My Grandpa the Agent" "Kingsman: The Secret Service Academy" " "Death-defying Express", "I·Robot", "My Superman Ex-Girlfriend", "Infernal Affairs Series", "Who Am I", "Five Lucky Stars Series", "Dragon Detective", "Invincible Stars", "Death-defying Poison Master Series", "Ace" Bodyguard", "Future Warriors", "Unknown Planet", "I am Legend", "Operation King", "We are all with superpowers", "I am Legend", "I am not the God of Medicine", "Alien Hunting Order", "Alien Love", "Wu Zhuangyuan Su Qier", "Wesley Series", "Who Am I: There is no absolutely safe system", "Alien Report", "Infinite 2021", "How I Became a Superhero", "Manslaughter" ← X: → "Suicide Squad", "Charlotte Trouble", "Pleasant Goat and Big Big Wolf Series", "Interstellar", "Rise of the Planet of the Apes Series", "X-Men Series", "Evil Squad", "Journey to the West: Demons", "Starship Troopers Series", "Star Trek Series", "Pixel Wars", "Star Legend Series", "The Scorpion King Series", "Mr. Zombie", "Shinjuku Incident", "Summer Fortune", "Laughing Forest Series", "Tornado Kid" "The Richest Man in Xihong City", "The Leaker", "Valerian: The City of a Thousand Planets", "Star Wars Series", "Elf", "Psychic", "The Little Life", "X-Men: Dark Phoenix", "Shaft", "Joker 2019", "Stargate", "Lucky Day", "Creed", "Little People", "Juggler", "Elf", "The Haunted Bear Animated Movie Series" ←Y:→"Yunnan Worm Valley" Blade Runner 2049", "Nightclub", "British Showdown", "Ip Man Series", "One Man's Martial Arts", "Maze Runner Series", "Ant-Man Series", "Guardians of the Galaxy Series", "On Trigger", "Hawkeye", "Athena: No Spy Bureau", "Tuxedo", "Oblivion", "Alien vs. Predator Series", "Jumanji Series", "The Twilight Zone", "Music Zombies", "Asian Eagle", "A Better Tomorrow" Series", "A Good Show", "Annihilation 2018", "Another Dimension Series", "Superpower", "Solo: A Star Wars Story", "Giant", "On the Move", "A Better Tomorrow Series", "Oblivion" "Planet", "Alien Series", "Invisible Man Series", "Eternal Guard", "The Grandmaster", "The Legend of Dragon Immortal Series", "Yin Yang Suppression of Monsters", "The Eternals", "Yin Yang Watchman", "The Legend of Heaven and Dragon Slayer: Nine Yang Magic" "The Holy Fire Hero" "The Adam Project" "The Medicine King's Coffin·Restart" "Moonfall" ←Z:→"Wolf Warrior Series" "Bomb Disposal Expert" "Fatal Command" "Jurassic World Series" "Jurassic Park Series" "Terminator Series" "Justice League" "Best Partner Series" "Best Partner" "Chinese Dragon" "Deadly Violet" "Jurassic Game" "Deadly Black" "Lan", "Suicide Squad", "Monster Hunt", "Vapor Order", "Spider-Man: Far From Home", "Chasing the Dragon Series", "Mortal Kombat Legends: Scorpion's Revenge", "Zack Snyder's Justice League", "Mortal Kombat 2021", "Dynasty Warriors", "Chasing the Tiger and the Dragon", "Reminiscence", "Sam Fung Chang", "Spider-Man: No Home", "The Last Day", "The Intercept"

Are pig's feet eunuchs? In those days in America, even in Hollywood, there was no chance of touching a woman. Of the few female characters that appeared, there was only one who was slightly ambiguous, or maybe it was said that his ancestral skill was to practice the eunuch way! ?

The second part of some suggestions and tips, including the protagonist's character card The character card is as close to the plot in the book as possible, just for the convenience of everyone's understanding, not strictly in accordance with Dnd rules Character card, to the end of the first volume Xie Zihao, male, side sect warlock, level 2 (2 times of divine general feedback) Attributes, based on the standard of 9 to 10 for an ordinary 25-year-old man, each point increases in equal proportion Strength 10+3 (superhuman feedback, considered to be the strongest among ordinary people) Can fight three or four hooligans) Physique 10+2 (superhuman feedback) Agility 10 Perception 10+3 (weasel feedback) Intelligence 12 (enhanced graduation intelligence is considered good among ordinary people) Spirit 10 +2 (Weasel Feedback) Spirituality/Mana Pool: 20 points (the cost of a small trick such as the Cooling Curse is 1, and the consumption of a single creature of elementary hypnosis is 2, as a standard calculation) Ability: Weasel Feedback LⅤ1 (perception of mental improvement, LⅤ1 reminder Sleep spell, open the mana pool) Superman feedback (strength and constitution are improved, the upper limit of the mana pool is increased) Elementary side spells: cooling spell, soul-summoning spell, etc. Item: God's Ball (convert supernatural creatures into domain power seeds, which can consume incense and wish to cast corresponding domain spells). The existing extraordinary seed LV1 illusion can be cast, and the energy level is below 2 illusions (the incubus is just a low-level demon, according to the book, it has the most performance Give him a challenge level of six or seven, the power seeds collected from it will be lower than his own strength) Supporting character, Elise, female, psychic, level 4 Strength 10-2 (Older -2) Physique 10-2 (Older -2) Dexterity 10-2 (Older -2) Perception 10+4+1 (Psychic talent LV2 plus 4, perennial abnormal perception) Domain plus 1) Intelligence 10 Spirit 10+3+2 (Psychic talent LV2 plus 3, perennial perception of foreign lands plus 2) Spiritual value 40, (no mana pool is opened, psychics are not good at frontal combat, but in special situations such as facing spirits, they can display some spiritual abilities by consuming spirituality) Ability: Psychic talent Lv2 (enhance perception and spirit, open yin and yang eyes) Astral projection L Ⅴ1 (the soul leaves the body in a short period of time and travels to a foreign land) Exorcism and spirit ritual LⅤ1 (know some methods of exorcising evil objects) Some tips and suggestions are all obtained from the old authors I watched on Longkong How to control the power level of the work without losing control 1. The author privately opened a document to convert the abilities and items that appeared, especially the resources obtained by the protagonist, into dnd Among the 9-level spell energy levels, look at how many levels it is roughly equivalent to, and then estimate whether this level exceeds the existing plot. For example, Itachi is going to upgrade for the second time, and the protagonist obtains primary flame control, which is very reasonable. This facilitates the author to have an intuitive understanding For example, the resources and strength obtained by the protagonist have reached the level of a certain magic circle. So what level does he stand in the worldview and society of your book? If his strength changes, then the attitude of other people and organizations towards him will also change according to the worldview setting in the book. 2. Make your own character cards and monster cards in private. You don't need to be too strict and detailed. It's mainly to sort out your own thoughts and memories. (At the end of the last book, how many abilities, spells and magic weapons does the protagonist have?) Furthermore, this allows the author to have a convenient and intuitive way to control the progress of the plot. For example, if you look at the character card I made for the protagonist at this stage, you will feel that it is too strong for an extraordinary apprentice. Resources, or encountering too strong enemies, at this stage, are extremely abrupt and can easily ruin the plot 3. At least the beginning of this book is still somewhat improved compared to the previous one, in terms of the control of the plot and the restrictions of Goldfinger. It's better than before. After the protagonist suppressed the Dream Demon from the God's Ball, he dared to directly harvest the godhead. Now he only harvests a power fragment, which is used as a staff. He also knows that pressing it is good I also made a guardian for you. Some small settings of God's upgrade abilities can be used as reference if they feel reasonable, and don't disrupt your own thinking: Itachi (fire, water, wind control, fighting instinct, creating illusions, substitute form) Clark (iron bones, quick recovery, Levitating flight, clairvoyant eye, super hearing, solar halo/evil-proofing) These abilities are given separately according to each upgrade you make, from low to high. For example, this time you upgrade, you get the ability to float and divine power, which can be five or six meters above the ground. If you can move at a jogging speed and can lift a Harley Davidson, then after the next feedback, these two abilities can be strengthened and become tens of meters above the ground, flying at the speed of a sprinter, and able to lift a car This is the second article about some shortcomings in your writing and suggestions to make up for it. I also wrote an article in the discussion area a few days ago, you can look up and find it Finally, if you can write seriously and listen to the opinions of readers, you are a good author if you are not a supervisor. Keep up the good work!

After reading the previous chapters, I can only say that there is a reason for the poor performance. The subject matter is well chosen, and the author's views are in line with my taste, but it is too wordy. If you keep repeating one thing over and over again, it will give people a headache, and the plot will not progress at all in one chapter. How can it retain readers? Most readers are not here for abuse.

It's too verbose 80% of one chapter is background explanation And this kind of faith power system uses the most strenuous method of black and white to improve It's too old There was Ultraman before, and he became a big star Although tj

The writing style is really a problem. . The subject matter is obviously very good, but the writing feels like a running account. I was confused when I read it! Find a helper quickly, otherwise it will be a pity that your book will be ruined. .

Although it is an American variety series, Marvel and DC are really bad, and the world view is too complicated. I am more looking forward to the Hellboy series, Spawn series, Ancient Artifact series, independent world view of the Constantine movies, the world of Buffy the Vampire Slayer, American Horror Story series, etc. That conform to the mainstream mysterious world view of Dark Horse Comics.

Although the writing is good, it still uses a familiar technique. To be honest, I was a little afraid to read it. It was too confusing. Moreover, the previous books always had hundreds of chapters, and I finally broke through. According to the setting, it should be very awesome. I read it with high expectations every time, but the result gave me the feeling, "This is it." Now the setting of this book is good, but it has two old problems. One is that there are too many explanations about the setting, and the other is that it is very clever. The new problem is the female protagonist.

Absolutely, in a society like the United States, the protagonist didn't carry a pistol or something with him in the early stage. I'm speechless. Is he so brainless? Have you become stupid by practicing Qigong? And if you went to rob gang members before, shouldn't you have a gun handy?

Why don't you get a double time traveler? It's extremely poisonous and the book will die very quickly.

Some Suggestions and Tips Part 3 First of all, congratulations. It has done well on the new book list recently, but some new readers attracted by the comment area have given bad reviews. They complained that apart from the power setting, the rest is boring, and there is also a controversial plot of recruiting disciples, which involves your two major problems. I will talk about it separately 1. It is consistent with the character. The performance of the character must be consistent with the world view and character background setting! What is consistency? To put it simply, the words and deeds of the characters should not exceed their own personalities, unless you plan to leave baggage and bury hidden clues. To be specific, let's take a positive example first, The King of Squid, Meng Qi's first dungeon adventure with his companions, from everyone's pretending to be calm and mechanically copying the Jianghu experience, to the frantic fighting, and finally when they saw the redemption list, they were equally shocked, but the protagonist and his companions had different hearts. The logical performance, these are fully consistent with everyone's identity, background and character settings, and the battle shows that everyone is just a group of rookies, each with their own cooking methods according to their personal settings. As a time traveler, when the protagonist sees the familiar magic weapon and magical power from the previous life myth on the redemption list, he is even more inexplicable than the inexplicable horror of his indigenous companions. Written in this way, readers feel very smooth, natural, exciting and vivid. Also in this book, the protagonist's behavior when appraising the cursed ring is very consistent with his character: a cultural relics and archeology student from the University of California, San Francisco, who knows basic knowledge about appreciating jewelry. So everyone is more comfortable watching that section, which is a successful description Okay, now to give a negative example, the most typical one is the part of recruiting apprentices that everyone has criticized. First of all, as the author, you must understand, what is the character of the protagonist? Let me briefly describe it. In his previous life, he was from a family of magic sticks, and his ancestors were from a large side sect. He was unable to practice due to the end of the Dharma era. He had a lot of theories that were not true or false, and had no practical experience. He had a relatively good understanding of side sects and folk dharma. He also had a certain understanding of the authentic Taoist sect due to family accumulation and the explosion of knowledge in the Internet age. In this life, he is taking the college entrance examination. If you graduate from the ancient department, you should be involved in the fields of religion, artwork, ancient culture and other fields. Although the aura of this world has declined, it has not been cut off. The extraordinary power is still tenaciously surviving, and there are faint signs of revival. The protagonist is using the ancestral magic weapon to slowly explore the practice Okay, after reading the brief description, do you find the problem? Why do people think that the part about recruiting a disciple is poorly written? Because the protagonist's words and deeds go against his character! You only have a past life theory, and you have only been practicing Taoism for a few months in this life. You don't know whether the extraordinary knowledge in the past life is true or false, and can it be used in this life? A novice in the side sect who relies on plug-in magic weapons to slowly explore the practice, a country bumpkin who knows nothing about the situation in the extraordinary realm of the world A novice exorcist who has no stable income and was still robbing people the night before yesterday Want to accept a kid who has just met and doesn't know his basic character as a disciple? Just because of his sympathy, you want to prevent him from being harassed by evil things in the future? Everyone thinks it's weird if it doesn't violate harmony! It's not your turn to help others. There is a senior psychic next to you. He has done this before. This kind of behavior is an out-of-character character break in novels and anime. Readers may not be able to come up with many theories, but they will instinctively feel that this plot is very interesting. Violation is very tangled For example, when you are a newbie in the side sect and you are facing an enemy, it is normal for you to throw a headache curse from Lu Ban's book, but it is abnormal for a divine thunder from the Purple Mansion to strike at you, because it does not match the character and you don't have the ability! Similarly, when appraising a ring, it is normal to roughly distinguish the cutting process and weight of the gemstones. Your person has a relevant background. However, in the treasure hunting section, you find an ancient amulet engraved with alchemical mantras. This is abnormal. You have no relevant personality You made this mistake in the previous book The problem is that the beginning was okay. I slowly studied the classics with my companions and explored the practice, which was consistent with the high school identity of the protagonist at that time. In the middle period, I quickly developed the character and lost it. I wish I could master the four arts in the immortal family, master the alchemy and talismans, the five arts outside Xuanmen, and the mountain doctor's fortune-telling. Brother, he is just an ordinary college freshman! Readers only feel that it is extremely dull and alienated. This book cannot make such mistakes again. The protagonist learns it instantly and becomes good at it. He crushes enemies like slaughtering pigs and dogs, and Gao Daquan is like a fairy coming to the world. There is no rationality in growth. As for the growth and battle of the characters, I will leave it to the next article and write it to you later 2. Another big problem is the lack of sense of camera when describing, and the sense of script is serious. Simply put, the novel is like a TV series. Your description is plain and straightforward, as if the actor is reading the script, and the camera is a black screen, not to mention any storyboard transitions. In other words, there is a lack of normal description of the environment, characters, appearance, tone, props, etc., Which results in no sense of picture, only simple language and actions of the characters, as if they are reading dialogue in a script. Of course, readers will find it boring For a good work, the author is the director, and the psychology of language and action is the dialogue and subtext of the script. The description of sound, environment, appearance, props, etc. Is the lens, and changing the perspective is the storyboard. Connect the above, and add reasonable rhetorical modifications to create a sense of picture Cut an example: "The sky is getting late, Xiaosheng, I just want a place five feet away to rest for a night, why should I make it so difficult for Xiaosheng?" The Confucian scholar is quite tall, and his green shirt and sash are neat and neat yet capable, and he looks very pleasing to the eye. It's just that this Confucian scholar, who looked like he was only in his twenties, had a short beard on his chin. When he looked at the book, he became angry and became angry. Chief Sima Pavilion, who was already in charge of arresting thieves, looked at the young Confucian scholar in front of him, then touched his increasingly plump belly, and finally decided to forget about the rusty guns in the pavilion. He sneered angrily and said: "The customs here are simple and the laws are strict. People of unknown origin are never allowed to be admitted. Although your road guide, scholar, was issued by Yangcheng County, Yingchuan County, it is not like mine in Hanoi." Of course, the signature of the county government office cannot be counted, so how can I dare to stay with you, an unknown foreigner?" (Wei Ye Xianzong) In just a short period of time, the time, place, and characters are clearly explained. The characters are vivid and vivid on the page, and the text is concise and almost no nonsense. The reader feels like he is sitting in front of the TV and saw this scene Another example is the mystery. The resurrection of Klein at the beginning of The Lord is also an excellent example. A good description of the work can make the reader feel as if he is actually there This book also has a description of the protagonist's living environment and a scene of identifying the ring. These are relatively reasonable and vivid plots, indicating that you have subconsciously felt this problem, but have not yet systematically understood it Also, the same number of words by a first-class author contains more information than yours, that is, the description is rich and concise, and the words are connected smoothly. This point still requires you to read more good works and polish the words more, and you don't have to force updates A little tip, I remember it was said by Wandering Toad in an interview at that time, more than ten years ago, right? Just write inspiration notes Whenever you have inspiration, just jot it down and file it back. The inspiration can be the appearance of the characters, skills, dialogue baggage, places and scenery, items and props, battle scenes, etc. As long as you think it is wonderful, you can just write it down. Write it down by hand. We all have smart phones now, so you don't need to write more than a hundred words. Just write down the outline first. When you have time later, go to the computer and slowly build a framework to expand the content to form wonderful paragraphs. Then create folders according to categories and put them Archive, and when you write, this will be your database, which can save a lot of energy. When using it, you can also mark in the document when it was used in which work. You can change it next time you use it in other works without repeating it. Finally, I hope you will get better and better as you write. In the past few days, I hope you can make it into the top ten. I wish you can make it into the top five. After all, these days, as long as you are an eunuch, do not find a studio to write for you, and can accept opinions and find your own problems to correct and improve, you are a good author worthy of support.

After reading more than ten chapters, the sky is flooded

It was okay at first, but after about two hundred chapters I couldn't stand it anymore. I have been writing about the protagonist's ability settings in a long way, but also creating a dream game world. It's completely self-indulgent. No one will like to read such lengthy settings, and then there is no point in creating a time traveler! If the plot is not well written, it will just be a mess!

It's actually a summoning style, so why should you accept a disciple? Wuyu, I thought you wanted to train a confidant, but I was too naive.

I read more than a dozen chapters, which were all about inner drama and popular science. There was no plot at all. Then I found the author's previous book, which had 2 million words. Other readers' comments also included various popular science settings and inner drama. I guess the author's writing style is fantasy popular science. I wanted to read it in the United States, but it was really too moist.

Small suggestion: Don't explain too much common sense. This is too clumsy. After reading more than ten chapters, the protagonist only did two things, robbing and visiting flea markets. Is it necessary to be so clumsy?

Alas, in various fantasy stories, well-known and decent people set up rigid commandments. There are also various taboos in the supernatural schools that have been passed down for a long time in the West. That makes sense. In the setting where the secular world is the mainstream and the foundation of the other world, those who use extraordinary abilities to disrupt the order of secular society will inevitably be counterattacked by the order. The protagonist of this book thinks about those people who are protected by the order. Those who are no longer protected by the order. Under what circumstances can you use Taoist magic to retaliate? Under what circumstances can you not use it? I don't know how to use Taoist magic to retaliate. As expected of a leftist

What the author needs to improve is the old problem of being long-winded. He writes like talking and lacks organization. He needs to speed up the progress of the plot and insert settings in between, instead of writing like an explanatory text.

It feels very exciting. Can it be added to the plot of the American Horror Story series, as well as the plot of the witch Auntie Lan and Sister Banana? I haven't watched other horror movies so the sense of immersion is not that strong.

It's extremely toxic, very watery, and it's all about the author complaining about some common American memes, black people, free America, etc. There are only complaints about it. Half of one chapter is about the author complaining about it, rather than depicting it through the plot. In the middle, there is another time traveler, which is very poisonous.

Has the author arrived in Myanmar? Why has he lost contact?

Does anyone know what happened to the author?

Has the author quit? Or open a small account?