Folk Customs: Beginning with the Blood God of Western Hunan

It has been chaotic since the Nanyang chapter, and the Soul Conjuring chapter is even more chaotic. The author obviously got too excited by writing it himself. Moreover, the game skill system settings of Shengxian Village in the early stage were almost completely discarded. He also made his weird strength too high, making it seem like humans are always trying to survive on the edge. They are obviously a bunch of things that have been hammered into the garbage dump of history by humans. They didn't make any achievements when they were alive. How can they become more powerful after death? The plot is both fate and a closed loop of time, which is particularly baffling. The protagonist entered the past dungeon through the game console. Does the dungeon know? Even if you turn the copy inside out, it will have no impact on the outside. Especially the appearance of the Guanqi Historian was a particular failure. The protagonist is a low-level cultivator, and it's just a piece of history. It's so awesome, but it's nothing in the real world. No one knows the protagonist, and he's separated from the real society. Now you can say that the protagonist is a psychopath, and everything in the book is his imagination.

What career did the protagonist end up in? Now I feel like a wild man with strange stitches. He is obviously a swordsman on the surface, but there are also miscellaneous wild foxes, shamans, spiritual mediums, Jin Yiwei, dragon tiger energy, and mountain god power. They all seem to conflict with each other, which is a bit low. It is better to inherit the high-skilled Taoist template in scene one and learn to master various ritual skills and knowledge upgrade bit by bit. It is powerful and cool. Now I want everything but am not specialized. It is too uncomfortable.

Abandon the book, I really don't understand what you are going to write. I saw Chapter 140. You, Xiangxi, have been writing endlessly. It's as complete as destroying the world and destroying the world. The key is still not clear. There are more than a hundred chapters about a ninth-level shaman, stirring up trouble and rain, high-level Taoist priests, and eminent monks dying one by one. You are a Xiangxi, what do you want to write, and where do you want the faces of the founding emperors of the past dynasties to put their faces. I was lonely after reading "Key Points". I got into it because of the game and the system, and I stopped writing when I reached more than 100! The mall, skills, and final novice rewards mentioned above are all taken away in one go! It sucks anyway

The book is a good book, the subject matter is very good, and the content is fresh, but the plot is too confusing. Not only the plot, but also the dialogues and characters are shrouded in mist, especially jumping, and the climax is always unfinished. Every word feels fragmented, without any sense of substitution, and only curiosity is left. However, there are too many side plots and insignificant new knowledge points, which dilute the main plot and take over the main role.

The writing is indeed messy, but the writing style is okay and I don't feel embarrassed or out of touch. However, there is one thing I don't like about the protagonist who is too loser. The so-called Internet hot words and so on are really vulgar. What's wrong with me, I'm so young, I feel like the protagonist is too immoral.

The setting is very good, the imagination is very strong, and the writing is terrible. The biggest problem is that the writing is too bad, punctuation is used indiscriminately, the words are reversed, there are many language errors, the sentences are not fluent, and many setting details are not handled properly. It feels like the author wrote the book from a God's perspective. The author knows many things, but he did not write them out. I don't understand that it's other people's own understanding of the problem, which often makes other readers incomprehensible. Go to the white text. To be honest, the writing style of many white articles is better than the author's writing style. At least the sentences are smooth and there are no grammatical errors, which will not make people confused. Those who want to refute me take a look at my homepage. I have been reading books for 11 years. Is it because the author's poor writing style makes people incomprehensible or there is a problem with the readers' understanding? Can I not tell the difference?

It feels like the author is on the verge of death repeatedly, and the setting collapses at any time!

The writing is so messy, I don't know who I am imitating. My suggestion is to go over the main plot again, increase the proportion of the main characters in the story, and try to compress the information into dialogues for effective output, rather than writing expositions.

I specifically subscribed to a chapter to scold the author. What did you write about? The preface does not match the postscript, and there are so many typos that I can tolerate it. The plot is all torn apart. No wonder everyone says the writing is poor. I think the author lacks the ability to think linearly and logically. He is too active when thinking about the plot and often jumps from one scene to another. It is time to see a doctor.

Thoughts after watching the completion of the Blood God Chapter Although the whole chapter has a few settings, the overall rhythm is still there. Mainly talk about the following issues: 1. Messy writing Messy writing is mainly caused by two aspects. The first is that you switch perspectives too frequently. In the early stage, sometimes it will cause people to feel that the priorities are inappropriate. It does not mean that this writing method is not good. It's because you didn't grasp the point of proportion. Another aspect of the messy writing is that the information given in many places is very "deus ex machina". It should be the answer that the protagonist deduces while discovering clues. You directly give the result. In the end, the reader feels that the sense of participation is much worse. The most obvious place is that at the end of the volume, the protagonist wakes up and explains a lot. My face is full of questions. You said that the Ming Dynasty suppressed Shengxian Village, the Qing Dynasty allowed it, and what Teacher Xun did later was directly told to the reader. There are no clues in it, and the result is very abrupt. 2 is that the realm expansion is too high I don't want to say too much, let's talk about a few keywords: novice missions from 1 to 9 levels. At the end of the mission, the protagonist is at level 6 in the game, fighting level 5 monsters, the old man at level 3, and there is a headless guy who doesn't know which level. If you pull it too high, the contrast between your game and reality will be too great. No, it's not a contrast anymore, it's a gap. 3 is the issue of time and space Don't write about time and space. It's difficult to give readers a satisfactory answer. Many authors have been killed by this. Originally, I was quite happy that the game would not affect history. Then I was backhanded with a time and space confusion and a closed time loop. How did he get out of the closed time loop? Why did he enter? It made me look bald. .