Cultivation: I Am Talking to My Descendants a Thousand Years from Now

My following opinions have limitations "I have only seen 40 chapters so far" 1. The setting is relatively flat and the follow-up is unclear For example, the time difference between the protagonist and the descendants is directly placed here, but since there is such a time difference, why not talk about it Will the timeline of the descendants affect the present If 15 days have passed since the descendants, then check whether the timeline is the same as the Gregorian calendar It is generally better to add 15 days of memory Don't keep it until the middle or late stages to solve it 2. The passerby character has too much psychology The father of the two drug-selling brothers suddenly gave a psychological description before his death. After the psychological description, he said "I was really wrong." This character just killed a person before, and the reason was because he thought others were too noisy, right? At the same time, based on what you wrote, you want to highlight the mentality of parents with naughty children, right? If you want to write about his arrogance, then please don't add a desire to repent in the last sentence. 3. Too little preparation for the transition Chapter 34 is just the chapter after the old man in the front. What do you want me to think? In the front, I wrote about a sect, and in the back, I suddenly wrote about love. In the back, it turns out that the president of the Chamber of Commerce is going to die, but at the same time, this president has a partner to die with him, and a lot of young people are envious \(≧▽≦\). This chapter also writes about a river and then about a passerby. Then there was a man named Xia who wanted to recruit someone to join the Chamber of Commerce. Who are you? I flipped through and saw Chapter 32 Oh, you faked your death. It turns out you are the president of the Chamber of Commerce with the surname Xia! Then I continued reading, and then this character was arrested. At this time, I didn't know who turned out to be the protagonist! No, how did you know the news? I was reading a passage in Chapter 29 - [President Xia is missing] Oh, the protagonist already knows! Is it okay to actually notice that President Xia is going? No, a bunch of people in front believe that guy is dead. How does the protagonist know that he is not faking his death and is missing? Oh ⊙∀⊙! I understand The protagonist was revealed only by the official personnel TM has a bunch of unexplained psychological descriptions of passerby characters, and there are even such misleading Of course there is also the most important problem, the layout problem Let's use the chapter of the cannon fodder old man to explain it! I know how to change this layout Just put the dialogue on the next side and integrate it into large paragraphs!

No matter how bad your life is, you still have a wife and children.

I'm trying to steal it, but your pursuit is true ('▿')

Author, please read, I think if it is written like this, it can be extended to the middle period. One day Zhou Xuan woke up, and someone called the young master next to him, saying that the punishment time has come, and we should return to the spirit world or the earthly immortal world. At this time, Zhou Xuan discovered that his thirty-sixth ancestor had become an earthly immortal and ascended to the earthly immortal world. His family was also a small and medium-sized family in the earthly immortal world. Since the death of his ancestor, his family had The family is getting worse day by day, from a high-class family to a middle-class family. In the eyes of the envy of the classmates, when I return to the spirit world, the folding realm has also become a spiritual weapon. Here I explain that the map has been changed, so it cannot be opened as low as in the mortal world. Otherwise, the plot will be the same and there will be nothing interesting. Then I have been writing from the earthly fairy world, how did the ancestor disappear? It turns out that the ancestor flew to the earthly fairyland to join a sect, and finally disappeared, and then Zhou At this time, Xuan contacted the Thirty-sixth Ancestor who had just ascended to the Earthly Immortal World, (referred to as the Ancestor) and then learned what cultivation level the ancestor could achieve. The spiritual weapon promoted to the Fate Fate Realm could actually exchange things in time and space. Zhou Xuan and the ancestors continued to exchange materials. The exchange of material energy levels required different cultivation levels. The more precious the materials, the higher the cultivation level. Then, with the support of his descendant Zhou Xuan, the protagonist continued to become a great master in the Earthly Immortal World. Dude, ascend to the fairy world, and finally the fairy world opens high, low and middle, depending on the author's mood. The final ending is that Zhou Xuan was knocked unconscious by someone. When he turned around, it was his father, angrily saying that the ancestor is coming to preach soon, and you are still snoozing. At this time, Zhou Xuan checked his memory and found that he was already a heavenly immortal, his ancestor was already a Taoist ancestor, and his family was still a famous immortal clan. The protagonist arrived at this time, and then looked at Zhou Xuan with a face of teasing. Complete book. The author has already thought up the plot for you, and this kind of book usually only needs one or two million words. Don't make it too long, because the stickiness is not strong. It was interesting at first, but there are too many things and too many changes, and everyone is tired of reading, because no matter how you change, it is the same routine, so you don't have to write this kind of book for too long. It is destined not to write too many words, so I will write about the mortal world, the earthly and immortal world (the spiritual world is also acceptable) and then the fairy world at the end. The ending can also be echoed from beginning to end. It turns out that everything is an experience. Zhou Xuan thought about it at this time, and the thirty-sixth ancestor who looked at him with a formal smile (Taozu) then discovered that he had one in his hand that had become an immortal artifact.

After reading it, the creativity is very good, but ideas are not enough. I have read many books with amazing beginnings, but without a certain level of writing skills and writing style, in the end I can't even maintain my status as a second-rate author. Keep working hard.

Guys, I know the typography problem is a bit big, mine. I guess I can't change it before. If I change this chapter, the positions will be all messed up. I can only pay attention to it later QAQ

One-sentence summary: The story of the immortal version of Nobita and his thirty-sixth great-great-grandson, changing the world through the immortal version of a telephone booth. 😂

I really didn't expect that in a book about cultivating immortals, the material grades of talisman pens are: black iron, bronze, silver 😂😂

The idea is good, but the writing is terrible.

You're a eunuch, you're a loser when it comes to investing.

I feel like someone else changed the writing at the end, and even a bookworm of more than ten years can't understand it.

If I can't do it myself, then I'll take what's from others, just like Charlotte, who's worried about taking what's from Jay Chou. I think it's really boring. I have no ability, I am just a thief, I still steal all the time, I will never have my ability

The subject matter is amazing, and the writing feels like this, with ups and downs. The first part made me look forward to the next chapter, but the second part felt so bland. Most of the interest was lost.

It feels like I can clearly communicate with the future but why am I so reckless? Why don't you save your bloodline first? Otherwise, if you die accidentally, it won't be the end of the game. Or should we say that the protagonist relies on the inevitability of two points in time and space. As long as you don't give birth to offspring and you will never die, can you just wander around?

How do I put this? In the world of cultivation, the introduction says that spiritual energy will be cut off after a thousand years. What else are you looking at? ! The time span is too small. You must know that in most novel settings, the foundation building is 2-3 hundred golden elixirs, 4-5 hundred, and the Nascent Soul is 1-3,000. The span is too small.

The story is interesting but the writing is sparse

Theoretically speaking, a little change in the past will affect the future. If you got married a second later a thousand years ago, the connected grandson would be gone.

I don't know what to say except that it doesn't look good and I don't know what the theme is. Now that he has resources, he doesn't practice cultivation. He can see through time and space, but he doesn't make more money and improve his cultivation level. Instead, he just causes trouble. It's too poisonous.

After reading about half of it, I would like to briefly discuss my opinions: 1. The issue of the cultivation system, although it is Qi training and foundation building, its combat power is vague. 2. The issue of combat power. In addition to having the title of cultivating immortals, it is the same as those with low combat power. Perhaps those with higher combat power are behind 3. The issue of spells. In more than 30 chapters, it was mentioned that the protagonist used a magic spell to change his appearance. Is it layer by layer? (Cross this out) 4. It's still an issue with the cultivation system. It gives me the feeling that all people are cultivating immortals, and they are only a little stronger than ordinary people. Take away the cultivation system, and you will find that all behaviors are basically the behaviors of ordinary people. 5. The protagonist's personal cultivation, since it is useless to cultivate immortality in the next life, then the top skills can also be used. The first time the permission is not enough, the next two times should be enough! As a result, the protagonist is still obsessed with the talisman. 6. In fact, I found that it is a variant of a simulator novel. The main plot advances too slowly. In other words, it is too watery. 7. The author's world view is too small, so small that there is only the protagonist's city. Although he depicts a large world, he only writes a world view of an isolated city. 8. Indeed, although there are many problems, you can actually continue reading it. Although the above are shortcomings, they are hidden. There is no poison in crude reading. 9. This is what I felt after reading more than thirty chapters, but I didn't read the follow-up.