The First Immortal of Destiny

The quality keeps declining, it's a pity

You were persuaded to quit by the top players at the beginning. I don't know why no one complained. Your uncle is so kind to you and treats you as his own. Your uncle's daughter is your sister and she is your childhood sweetheart. Then your sister gives you the opportunity to earn pocket money, you can even say a lot. Just to block a suitor, do you think your sister is doing something wrong? I really don't understand, is it because I am blushing? Is there any problem with this? For example, your sister has a summer job for 10,000 yuan a month, and you will be given 5k, so you can work with her. The work is not difficult and there is no danger. The only problem is that you help make light bulbs to block the suitors, and that's it. It's not about Ming Chai. You just need to reduce the number of two people to live together. What's wrong? Your protagonist can take a fancy to the pursuer's money and be bribed? If you say the reason is that you think this is a good match and a nice person, your uncle also thinks it is a match. It's okay for you to help pull the strings, but you betray your relatives just because of the swords and resources that others gave you??? What kind of top talent (I beat my cousin before) Okay, don't keep staring at this. ) (And the relationship in the article should not be that of an uncle or a sister, if I remember correctly) (But first of all, the protagonist's uncle treats the protagonist as his own son in the description, and treats his own son better than others. Secondly, the protagonist and his sister had a good relationship when they were young, but there was a gap in their talent for cultivating immortals. They did not live together and then became estranged, such as Your classmates in elementary school are definitely different from your classmates in college. The circle is different after the learning gap is widened. Alienation is normal. No one feels sorry for anyone. If you want to blame, blame yourself. And then in this situation where others have not sorry for you and the protagonist is in debt, I don't think it is appropriate to do this kind of thing. From the front, it seems reasonable, but the arrangement that feels like hitting a snake or something is not reasonable)

I don't understand why the protagonist, who has such an obvious late-game flow and has developed a golden finger to be good at it, fights against the opponent in the early stage when he doesn't know exactly how the opponent is doing? Just for that little bit of petty profit? Are you going to block yourself? It's not that I can't accept the protagonist's adventure, but you have to give me a proper reason. For example, if you don't go in this wave, you will die or be crippled, or you will save some important relatives. These reasons can convince me. But what does the author give? Coveting low-level semi-finished weapons, you believe whatever the mortal enemy you just defeated said. He said that the man behind the scenes only has the second level of Qi Gathering, so you believe the second level of Qi Gathering, right? Daishe said that one month is just one month, not giving himself any breathing space, and he also treats the opponent as a wild monster in the game, thinking that he will not grow at all, right? Are you still treating him according to the standards a month ago? You don't do intelligence work at all, do you? In addition, I don't know if the childhood sweetheart is the heroine. If so, there is something wrong with the portrayal. With such a good job in the mine, she should be able to tell that the licking dog specially found her. But what did she do? She took the advantage and refused until she clearly confessed her love. The key point is that it would be fine if she created this kind of character. Before, she had always had a cold personality and didn't seem to be cold to that licking dog. You are so cold. You have the ability to not take the benefits. After taking the benefits, what qualifications do you have to treat that licking dog like this? Oh, if it turns out later that she has the character of Green Tea and she was just pretending before, then I apologize for criticizing her.

It is recommended that the author separate physical training into skin training, bone training, marrow training, blood training, and internal organs training, and write one hundred chapters for each stage, so that you can do five hundred chapters of water, and then refine your Qi to the foundation of water for one hundred chapters, the golden elixir water for one thousand chapters, the Nascent Soul water for ten thousand chapters, and so on.

A protagonist like you is worthy of cultivating an immortal. Your uncle has been so kind to you, so why would you tell outsiders about the blood feud just for a small profit?

This book was very well written before it hit the shelves! Later, it feels like it was written by a different person. The protagonist becomes more and more innocent, more and more holy, and there is no scheming at all! Provoking strong enemies and swaggering around, the protagonist would have died long ago! The protagonist was indifferent, cautious and low-key in the first hundred chapters and was eaten by a dog? Ever since the protagonist quelled the civil strife in the Linjiang Sect, his own woman was almost raped, and he insisted on dealing with the participants according to the sect rules, even himself, I couldn't stand it anymore! How pedantic the protagonist is! There are more and more random female characters, and it feels like the supporting characters in the entire book are all female! Every subsequent chapter is either nonsense or a memory, without nutrition, meaningless, and does not advance the plot at all! There are too many flaws to count! Slip away!

When I saw it, I felt like it was "tasteless"

Protagonist's wisdom panel: He is born dull, and then improves his appearance first. He is really smart.

After reading more than 20 chapters, I feel that it is quite ordinary. Except for cheats, isn't this how it was written ten years ago? If you don't improve your strength at the beginning, you still have to fight monsters, and then you write dozens of ink sheets. With this kind of proficiency writing method, plus some extra points, do you need to fight monsters? Just kill the realm directly. Unless your realm setting is very ordinary and mortals can kill immortals, then I have nothing to say.

Average, okay! But I didn't expect that this kind of writing is still popular now [The protagonists or supporting characters are fighting in the ring, and passers-by are criticizing in the audience (Although so-and-so won the previous game, he will definitely not be able to beat Brother So-and-so in this round,) (Although So-and-so has the upper hand now, he should lose, because Brother So-and-so still has trump cards that are useless)...] I really don't understand why these passers-by always talk about Yin and Yang.

Ten years later, Shen Nong died of a poisonous attack. You can obviously improve your strength with cheats, but you are only at the 7th level of physical training, and you just go out and talk about seeking a breakthrough between life and death! You only have one life!

Ten minutes after Shennong tested the poison, if I didn't come back, it means Shennong is dead.

What is the purple red fruit? Zhu Guo is a red fruit, why is it purple again?

What is the character of this protagonist? Others trust you to tell you their secrets, but you turn around and tell others? Aren't you a pure villain?

To be honest, the qualifications of the women around the protagonist can reach level 5, level 6 or even become immortals. In the fairy world, level 5 is not as good as a dog, and level 6 is all over the place. The protagonist's qualifications should be tens of thousands of times that of the people around him, which is a level higher than them.

Traveler + System! He still lives like Li Xunhuan, a useless martial arts scholar who sells his childhood sweethearts out of kindness. It's a shame that your parents made sacrifices at the beginning, otherwise your legs would have been broken. What's the use of these templates? It's almost enough to write this way at the local start

It's very poisonous. If cheating is compared to billions of wealth that is slowly inherited, then the protagonist is using billions of wealth to win a huge sum of 5 yuan. The destiny is also poisonous. He is stupid but can make one level of alchemy talisman in a month. Because of the proficiency system? So what is the theme of this book?

It started well, and what I wrote above is pretty good, but once you enter the inner gate, it's either a competition or a competition. You have a board and a destiny. Shouldn't you just earn money through sub-careers, or kill monsters by yourself? What's the point of repeating the same plot every time you participate in this competition or that competition? You have lived peacefully in the outer gate for 28 years. Once you go to the inner gate, you can't wait to have something to do every day. Can you not write a running account?

No wonder no one watches it. It's strange that some people watch this three views.

After reading hundreds of chapters, I discovered a situation. The disciples under my sect are extremely talented and contribute to the sect. Even if the sect does not protect the outstanding disciples, they will also be suppressed by the sect's own high realm. Then what is the use of the sect? Can the sect last long like this? Will he be sucked dry by the family sooner or later? The background setting is really crappy!

The novel is actually okay, but the biggest problem is that the basic destiny doesn't work. If you have dull aptitudes, you can have an epiphany, and if you have outstanding talents, you can open the top three Dantians. If the basic destiny is useful, it won't affect anything.

The writing is pretty good, I voted for it, I hope it will be better!

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I don't know what to write recently

How can I put it... A fighting scene, various psychological descriptions of the characters, as if watching a group of aunts chatting, the rhythm is not good.

Finally I got first place.

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Borrowing precious treasures to push the book, "Cleaning the Sutra Pavilion at the beginning, I will complete the incomplete skills", mortal flow, Gou Dao flow, IQ online will not reduce the intelligence, the protagonist's magical power refers to ancient magic: a wonderful pen creates a dragon, scattering beans to form an army, dividing the ground to form a river, etc. Interested Taoist friends can take a look. If you are bothering me, please contact me. [Asking mortals to recommend each other's authors]

Why haven't you reached immortality yet? You are still at the peak of the phaseless realm!

Is the protagonist's surname Chen?