From the Start: Becoming a Negotiation Expert

The first five chapters are extremely toxic, written by a simple-minded, idiotic author, and are very awkward.

The author can't cut any more, or there won't be anything left. I really hope the author writes another book with the theme of "I'm a Detective in the Movie World."

He himself said earlier that it was in Hong Kong and that he knew what movie it was, but he still tried to act like an idiot and pretended to be stupid. He talked about the movie title and characters, but his behavior showed that he had no idea about the plot. He was so stupid that he was going to vomit blood if he didn't write it.

Stop writing and get back to work. Your novel has too low a level of excitement. If you don't plan to develop the relationships with the girls in the story, don't spend too much time on them. Otherwise, it'll look like you're just padding the word count.

What I hate most when reading books these days is seeing things like "increases attraction to the opposite sex" or "increases charm"! These things feel more sci-fi than magic, more fantastical than science fiction, and more dreamlike than fantasy.

What exactly is this story about? The Hong Kong film is a mess, a hodgepodge of elements. Those who haven't seen the movie before basically can't understand it. What is the protagonist's goal? To become a top gangster? To get rich? Power? Money? A beautiful woman? To cultivate immortality? To become stronger? None of these. It's all a jumbled mess, just a way to get by.

What the hell? You can't even write a normal novel?

Onlookers: Hey bro, don't jump! Think about your wife. Jumper: She ran off with someone. Onlookers: Think about your kids. Jumper: They're not mine. Onlookers: Just die, there's no point in living anyway! Is the author a negotiation expert?

I couldn't continue after reading two chapters. The dialogue was utterly nonsensical, even at the crime scene. Author, this isn't a movie, and you're not Stephen Chow; this is a novel. A nonsensical dialogue or plot point is enough in a novel. Using it so extensively just makes the characters seem like a bunch of idiots.

I even suspect that the author bought their Level 3 writer account from someone else!