An Epic of Salvation

The religious atmosphere is so strong that it is a true masterpiece. He does not disguise himself as a god in human skin, but becomes a god from a god's perspective. I just want to say Holy Trinity. In the first few chapters, he is becoming "me". I really don't know how to put it. It is really a masterpiece.

It has been 10 hours since I watched I Am the Savior, Composing an Epic. Now I feel uncomfortable all over, my heart is empty, and I have no interest in doing anything. I feel like there are a lot of ants crawling on my body. I feel uncomfortable all over. I feel itchy and panicked. I have already experienced a withdrawal reaction. Renew! I want to update! Renew! I don't care what you are talking about now, I am not interested at all. I don't want anything now, I just want time to fly by. All I can think about is that I am the savior and write epics. I am the savior and write epics when I walk. I am the savior and write epics when I drink water. I am the savior and write epics when I lie down. I think about it all the time. I can't stand it anymore 😫😫😫

The author is like an angel of God, charting the path of salvation and faith for us.

It has a strong sense of religious atmosphere and a pure taste of the Middle Ages. After reading the book for so long, it was the first time that I experienced the sense of religious salvation and compassion from the book. It can be seen that the author's research and writing are very attentive. Although it was a bit slow in the early stage, starting from "Chapter 31 Faith", the most attractive part of the whole book gradually emerged for me. As an old player of Kingdom Salvation, Elder Scrolls, Continental, etc., It was really the first time I felt that... Sense of faith and religion from online articles!

I really like this book, but it's a pity that it wasn't very popular. I understand that the author also needs to make money and eat, but you are still tormented by the author's indecision. If you are unwilling to read deeply and want to read a mindless and refreshing article, you will be undecided. If you like this book, you will be tormented by your undecided attitude. I hope the author understands what kind of book you are writing. There are so many critical acclaims and hits. The author's writing style is absolutely impeccable. This novel seems to have definitely not collapsed now, and there is absolutely no reason to be eunuched. The road to becoming a great god is not that easy, just like how the third young master of the Tang family can still become a great god now? It's probably unlikely given the current intensity of competition. At present, this book has no similar competitors with the same perspective. The only possibility of being eunuched is that the author's mentality has collapsed. Is it worth it to cut out the almost only book in the same category for the so-called new book that may be better? As a reader, I think that as long as the author persists in his writing style, he will definitely become famous. Compared with some authors who have no bright future, this is undoubtedly just a process of accumulation and accumulation. It is said that it is better to be a chicken head than a phoenix tail. Rather than being popular, it is better to write a short version of the evil Bible.

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In a certain sense, it is a masterpiece, and in terms of taste, it is a masterpiece in a certain sense, but it is not a good novel. It may tell a good story, but it is not a good story. The most important thing is that the author does not grasp the progress of the story well. He focuses too much on the description of divinity and humanity, which is a bit cloudy and does not speak human words. The writing is good, but the plot is not good. After reading the free chapters, I can use a few words to describe what is written in these dozens of chapters. A mortal becomes God, but is not God A God has a power similar to omniscience and omnipotence, but has the shortcomings of mortals, and is weak itself Wants to explore the truth of the world, but is afraid of the truth of the world. Just write these few sentences, you can write more later, but it is not necessary. You can understand after reading these three games. This story tells a contradictory story, which is as meaningless as the omnipotent refutation.

The external manifestation of chaos is that there are many plot lines and a large amount of information; each plot is short, and the transitions are frequent and abrupt; the plot is obviously fragmented and the plot context is unclear. Overall, the look and feel is as shown in the picture. I drew them in random order to give a rough idea. There are frequent transitions between various plots, and switching to another line of plot cuts off the narrative of the previous line. The transitions are sometimes very abrupt and difficult to follow. It is difficult to remember the many plot lines, and each plot line only progresses for a short period before transitioning. It cannot give a complete story at one time, and I will have forgotten the same line next time. It is recommended that the same big scene and the same plot should be written longer, and a complete story should be completed in stages before transitioning. The transition should be as smooth as possible. Let's try to analyze the root cause. For example, the first fifteen chapters are relatively clear in terms of the whole book. By the end of the first crisis, it stands to reason that there are only two lines in the small town of God's Kingdom. Protagonist in prison, at home, Kingdom of God, supporting role, / (end of day) Making money, magic class, at home, selling books, Kingdom of God,/ At home, supporting role, at home, Kingdom of God, supporting role/ Supporting role, baking bread, collecting leather, drinking medicine, Kingdom of God, supporting role, Kingdom of God, crisis, supporting role, crisis resolution. Looking from the plot of Kingdom of God. Each time, a future deduction is basically given, without repetition. Blessing/punishing one person, the same does not repeat the selection, and is accompanied by one or two central paragraphs of supporting characters and supplementary explanations. As for the interaction between the Kingdom of God line and mortals, many character branches are introduced. Each character branch is independent of each other, has a large amount of information, and the plot is incoherent. Each person needs to lay down the real line and recover it once, and the pace is fast and difficult. The setting of once a day during a specific period makes the Kingdom of God line appear frequently, which can easily interfere with the rhythm of the plot. Looking at the plot of the supporting characters. In addition to the bonus paragraphs of Kingdom of God, descriptions of supporting characters also appear very frequently, and there are many supporting characters. The above example only counts longer paragraphs. Contributed a lot of transitions. This is a matter of plot perspective. The author of this book overlooks the overall situation from a God's perspective and advances the plot completely in chronological order. When it's time for a character to act, write the plot for that character and frequently change the central role. From a God's perspective, it's natural to focus on specific characters based on the time of events. But it is difficult to convey God's perspective to readers. To get a bird's eye view of the book, you need to know enough about the book and keep up with the author's frequently changing narrative. Now the author's narrative effect is like a football commentator, but the people listening to the commentary can barely see the numbers clearly, don't know the players, don't know the rules, their eyes can't keep up with the ball, and their brains can't keep up with the commentary. After listening, they only know that the ball is being passed around. Readers usually follow the character's perspective when reading a book, watching or immersing themselves in a person's experience, and using the character's experience as a context to understand the plot and the world. So most novels either take the protagonist's present continuous experience as the main body, and occasionally insert chapters from the perspective of supporting characters to form the central structure of the protagonist. Either multiple protagonists are parallel to each other, with almost no intersecting lines of experience, forming a group portrait structure. A daily view from a small town. The small town plot is fragmented, not only because the rhythm is cut off by the first two. Every "daily plot" that appears has a significant purpose. Magic lessons, leather collection lead to crises, and the punishment goals of the Kingdom of God. At home, it's all about interacting with my sister. Selling books and baking bread are all about interacting with my crush, important supporting characters, and the blessing targets of God's Kingdom. As for the plots that are ineffective in advancing the main line, there is almost no description at all, and only the plots that are effective in advancing the main line are extracted with great purpose. Cutting out only these parts also resulted in unusually frequent and sometimes abrupt transitions. In this way, the plot will inevitably be inconsistent - the "useful" plot is only a small part of the overall experience. It's normal to make reasonable choices, but just choosing these fragments is a bit missing. As for these "useful" plot fragments, sometimes the "cost-effectiveness" is low, and there are some daily disposable plots. For example, the magic class was only taken once, and it was useless after the crisis was caused. So after the crisis is resolved, the setting magic class is gone. The plot of Magic Class adds new scenes, new characters and plots, and the amount of information is large, but it is a disposable consumable in advancing the plot - the amount of information used to advance the unit plot is too large. In addition, the author often inserts settings and philosophical speculations. In the same way, the large amount of information makes it easy to cut off the narrative. This aspect is a personal characteristic. It is recommended not to try to cut off the strengths and make up for the weaknesses. There are many authors who focus on settings and ideas, but none are as messy as this book. The problem lies in the structure itself. In the later period, after the branch lines such as occultism, ancient sayings, the Sect of Misery, and priests were added, it felt more and more confusing, so I will not go through the analysis again. Currently, the root causes of structural confusion are: There are too many things to write about in the plot, the plot is advanced from God's perspective, and the purpose of choosing the plot is too strong. The author can make up his own mind on the first two points. The suggestion is to appropriately reduce the branch plots and use the normal protagonist's perspective or the group portrait perspective. The third point is difficult to change. I can only suggest a sense of awareness. In addition to promoting the main plot, other "irrelevant" and "superfluous" plots are also necessary. The third point has other negative effects besides structure. Character creation. Every action of the character is written by the author to advance/trigger the subsequent plot. It is commonly known that the characters are treated as plot tools, leaving no room for character development. I watched him do one thing and trigger a plot, just like a game character doing a task, without any individual character traits. If the kingdom of God requires suffering, then suffer. If your interests are violated, fight back. If good people are harmed, help them. If the town is destroyed, just save it. I believe it if you say this is the Kingdom of God's own AI. Currently, it seems that character creation is the flaw of this book second only to the plot structure. Even the protagonist has no character traits, and many characters only have identity traits that advance the plot. The sister has clues about the light spot and is responsible for the interactions at home. Serena provides secret transactions. The unknown creature is the insider and is responsible for the horror, but no obvious character traits of any character can be seen. The author also needs to write about the harem. The harem is one of the categories that most require character creation. There must be at least several female characters with different personalities and different personality charms, not just female characters with different identities. Other impacts include poorer realism of the plot, but this shouldn't be something that can be corrected. Of course, the author has many advantages. The writing, setting, imagination, and anti-routine plot are all very good. The overall level is above the average, but the main reason is that the structure and characters are lacking. I will talk about the problems I feel, and give some suggestions by the way. It depends on the author himself whether to change it or not. I don't want to interfere. After all, it is not bad now. Best wishes for progress.

I just feel that it is unclear, but unfortunately it does not meet my definition of a novel. I am God. There are not so many messy and incomprehensible renderings. I just create an epic feeling one by one. Reading this book is like a monk chanting sutras. It is too tiring.

，，(，)， This style makes this article stand out when telling local stories, because the environment and atmosphere are well rendered. But there are also shortcomings. From my personal point of view, 1) there are too many characters, too many plot lines, complicated descriptions, branches and vines covering the main line, and the rhythm is a bit slow. 2) The protagonist's personal characteristics are not very prominent, the sense of substitution is insufficient, and the refreshing points are not very prominent. For example, the burning torture is a big plot, and it has been laid out for a long time. The interaction between the protagonist, the prisoner, and the priest makes the readers develop a good impression of them. From the reader's point of view, they definitely do not want them to suffer. The final ending is that the priest becomes a saint and everyone is saved. The protagonist also plays a role in it, which is a good ending. This big plot is interspersed with the protagonist's exploration of the mysterious line and the Bishop Isa (mysterious creature) line. The intersection of the two lines is the suffering cultist line. The author seems to intentionally weave a small town relationship network when constructing the plot, without perfunctory every supporting character. Both Joker and Mannu have a lot of writing, and they both killed off the plot without hesitation. This is very courageous, and I also like to read it, but in the early stage of the article, it is easy to drag out the pace and lose readers. The Joker who paved the way for a lot of writing died, and only contributed a single battle for the protagonist, which felt a bit anticlimactic. Maybe we can sort out the permanent supporting characters in the town and analyze how many words and inks they play. Whether the reader's impression is positive or negative. Needless to say, the sister is very good, but she is just a phantom. Looking at it this way, the resident supporting characters are not very good, which is not good. If you want a group portrait, you need one or two permanent supporting characters who can promote the plot and have obvious characteristics that make readers like it. The reader's pleasure is closely bound to the protagonist. First, he must be substituted, and then he must feel pleasure. In the foreshadowing of the entire plot, the protagonist seems to have no subjective expression and is too cold. He just does the work assigned to him step by step. If there is some sympathy but is powerless out of reason, or the psychological activity of trying to make the prisoner live a better life, it will make me feel that this protagonist is more approachable and has a sense of empathy. The path for the protagonist to become stronger must also be clear. There are now two lines, one is the path of mysticism, and the other is the authority of the Kingdom of God. The most refreshing thing now is the authority of the Kingdom of God, but it requires accumulating energy to use it, and it can only be used for a few days a month. And how to accumulate energy specifically? There are three towers, one is to suffer, one is to do good deeds, and the other is to perform some kind of miracle. The first one is definitely not a refreshing point, who likes to suffer, and doing good deeds is weakened. The protagonist seems not to think much about accumulating energy through this tower, and the next exciting point is basically exploring the third tower. The cool thing about the path to becoming stronger has only been clarified in the last few chapters. This is too slow to develop. In the early stage, I felt that the protagonist was a little undisciplined. In a world that was obviously treacherous and careless about human life, there seemed to be no sense of crisis. The golden finger could only be used around the full moon. The protagonist seemed to have no other skills except knowledge, but his mental activity seemed a bit calm, and he even wanted to fall in love. This made me a little anxious for him. This anxiety reduced the sense of immersion. First of all, let me praise you. This love scene is not embarrassing, which is very rare, but it feels a little out of place. First of all, we know that the protagonist is not resting easy, and Resurrection Town will be ravaged and destroyed in a few years. And we all know that this girl is actually a monster who has lived for an unknown number of years. She is a staunch enemy cultist, and she has a purpose in finding the protagonist to fall in love with. However, this relationship is written as if the two of them are really in love, which does not provide a sense of empathy and satisfaction. In addition, there are some scenes in the article where other characters (Bishop Isa) defend and curse the protagonist. Defense/self-intimidation/self-strengthening are all good, but cursing and conspiracy attacks are not so good. The protagonist is maliciously targeted, and it seems like nothing is wrong. From a God's perspective, I feel anxious and it makes the protagonist look stupid. Bishop Isa can be described as "evil, powerful and terrifying", but not "dirty". I would feel insulted if I were to assume the role of the protagonist. I don't like it myself, I'm constantly being scolded, and I'm also disgusted with girls, but the girl is still in love with the protagonist who knows nothing about it. You can see this faint sense of abuse coming out... Finally, just a personal suggestion, the part of the daily lectures and debates should be more refined. For most readers, the protagonist is a god and interacts with believers. It is just a fun point, rather than a real discussion of faith. If there are too many, it will also affect the rhythm and sense of substitution... The above are just my own feelings as a reader and are provided for the author's reference. I think the author's attitude is very serious, and his writing skills are also in place. Right now, he still has a poor grasp of readers' preferences and the rhythm of online writing. If this aspect is improved, becoming a god will be just around the corner, and it is not impossible to write the next bestie master. Come on.