There's Something Wrong with This Immortal

Seeing the latest chapter table of contents, I feel like I'm going high but going low. Advantages: The writing is good, and the plot is not dragged out Disadvantages: The plot setting is unreasonable The beginning is refreshing. Although writing poetry is a bit awkward, it is understandable. However, there were some problems with the plot from the time when the house was taken over. When I killed Grandpa Zhang Heng, I didn't understand why it was arranged like this at the time. After reading the story, it seemed like they were going to fight each other. In order for Zhang Heng to become a disciple, that magical power could directly save him. I don't understand, and why Zhang Heng didn't ask his master to save him after he became a disciple. After that, the protagonist wins the title of the Nine Paths, and so many people come to kill the protagonist to gain luck. According to the author's description, Daqian was an unprecedented prosperous time, so why would someone kill someone so openly, in front of the officials? Do you dare to think that the top scorer in the college entrance examination will be rewarded hundreds of thousands and then be killed? How dare you slap the official in the face. In terms of usage, it should be more than food and grass.

Tian: No matter what happens, no matter what, they will rebel against me. It hurts, it hurts so much!

I think the hacker should revise it and take a look at his outline.

The most interesting behind-the-scenes ones are those who write about luck. Generally, 6 out of 10 people who write about the front desk are eunuchs.

Come on, come on, start water experience, and strive to be an operator as soon as possible.

The beginning is really amazing, come on

The beginning was okay, I used a lot of effort, I thought it was just a routine of learning swordsmanship and Daodaochaotian, but in the end it was just trying to shout about momentum. Oh, it's a pity. The idea is okay, the writing is not strong enough, and the plot is not interesting. The emotions are too superficial. I always shout that I am the best in the world, but I will not become the best in the world. It is okay to read it as a short story. If it is a little longer, all the problems will come out.

Come on, it's pretty good, but it's boring, uninteresting, and unattractive. I wish you good luck and say goodbye.

I saw the invincible flow tag coming in It looks very similar in the front, but in the back I feel like I can't get along with the protagonist That's it

The plot feels like it has collapsed to the end. The imperial edict is taking the exam in advance. Either you are a strong man who can break the rules, or you are a low-level thug struggling. Your writing is like a cat or a dog. For such an act of contempt for the imperial court, everyone involved would be declared a rebel, and the county magistrate and even the state and county supervisors would have their homes raided.

Drive high, drive high, go low, it's a pity, it's a pity

It looked good before! But it's hard to say what's behind

The sun and moon are created in the pot, and the universe is opened in the cave. In just over ten chapters, a legend was written. Okay, okay, okay.

Ghosts are not like ghosts, and humans are not like people.

The author might as well write a love story, so he would write "The Overbearing Hacker Falls in Love with the Street Fighting Little Author"

Judging from the worldview introduced in these chapters, the world of Daqian is supported by saints. You can imagine the world when the saints died. I wonder if such a paragraph will be written in the future.

Oh no, we can't write like this

Yysy, the author's writing is really good, why is there no one here?

Sigh... I hope there will be new books in the future.