The Starting Point Is the Old Monster Yuanshen

The author may not have written an outline in the early stage, or may have simply divided the outline. In general, the plot is a bit messy in the first and middle stages. The front foot is still on this planet, and the back foot plot perspective has reached another place. Also, there are too few protagonist roles in the first and middle stages, and there are too many. People feel confused after reading it, maybe because the starting point is too high. The author needs to write about the layout and practice of the protagonist, but the writing style is not good enough. The writing is very confusing. I briefly summarized the plot. The early and middle stages were spent on layout and practice, and it took off in the later stage.

I sincerely advise the author to rewrite. Prepare the outline first before writing the novel. The main plot is unclear, the branch plots are mixed up, and the main branch plots all come to an end. It is obviously not supported by the outline. The character description is vague, the plot is fast-paced, there is no room for character development, the environment and background are unclear, the protagonist panel, the protagonist's power panel, all I have just explained it hastily. You didn't even write down the sect of the Xianyue Sect. Why are you so anxious to open a new map? But when you get to the new map, a demon pops up inexplicably. Inexplicably, you, a person with a big difference in cultivation, calculated everything. Then you laid out the layout. In the end, you didn't force him to death after half a chapter. Can you be more clever?

I have read part of it, and this novel is very fairy-like. There is no love between a man and a woman, and love dies before it sprouts. Even in the face of her reincarnation, he can treat her calmly, and the other party also wields a sword to cut off the love thread to pursue his own ideals. There is no other communication between the two parties. I only understand this novel after reading it. Love is just an accidental encounter. If you are unlucky and lose it, it means you have really lost it. There is no need to force it. For gods and goddesses: the desire of the body is extremely low, the desire of the soul is very strong, love is only a small part, and more thoughts are spent on ideals. They always only focus on the present and the future - self-realization.

When it comes to the role of the protagonist, why do we always write supporting roles? The sense of immersion in online novels is gone. The storyline and characterization are all a mess

It's hard to find a novel about the immortal gourd system, but it turns out that it starts from the protagonist Yuanshen. I have to spit out the old story. The immortal gourd system, the Gangsha Jindan Yuanshen, these realms are the essence. Why did the author skip it?

It's good. I finally found this kind of starting level that is very high, and the setting is also very good. It is non-toxic, the writing is sophisticated, and the plot is reasonable. The author just writes at your own pace and don't be affected by the comments.

How should I put it? There is a feeling that food is tasteless and it is a pity to throw it away.

It's really Zhi Zhangwen. In the first dozen or so plots, the devil is plotted. In the end, the protagonist is one on one. After setting up the formation and searching for a while, he retreated without any defense and was attacked by a sneak attack...

The setting is okay, the writing is average, and the plot structure is unsatisfactory. It took more than ten chapters to set up and plot a demon, but the result was no different from an encounter.

The fighting ability is quite strange. Jin Dan was chased and escaped for three thousand miles overnight, but Yuanshen was able to watch the sun explode and then use great magic to take out Xingxing Li's good things. Although it is only a level difference, the difference in combat effectiveness and strength is more than hundreds of millions of times, right?

It's too boring. Even the real Yuanshen has to keep his tail between his legs at the beginning. It's boring. It's better to start another book from the ancestor of Jindan.

I wrote twenty chapters to plot against a demon, but the result was loud thunder and little rain. I originally thought that I would sneak attack on this demon, but in the end, I just shut down the demon and let him do it. So what's the point of writing this? Are you wasting everyone's time? Speechless

I always felt that there were some shortcomings when I read it. It seemed that it was lacking in coherence. I always felt that there was a hammer here and a stick here and there. The Thousand-Year Tribulation just ran away. The story quality was always a bit lacking.

What do you mean, it's over? ? ? ?

In the previous Yuanshen stage, the sun was torn apart, but later came the earth weapon nuclear bomb. The volume of the sun is more than 1 million times that of the earth and can fit 1 million earths. The quality of the immortal cultivators is so high, how about a nuclear bomb?

The good guy Poison is waiting for me here. Is the author also blinded by the calamity? You can find a few people who can write this kind of plot where cultivation is completely lost at the starting point 😅😅😅. Do you think you have more readers? , Forget it, I originally wanted to say a few words, and slipped away.

This book is slow to gain popularity but is stable and enjoyable. Even those who can't read the farewell are not forced to keep it. For me, this book is definitely my daily bread. Fast food articles are rampant, but I can put my mind into reading this one. It's interesting. Now I'm looking forward to when the protagonist will bloom the three-flowered fruit. Most of the books that can be read are written part-time as a hobby. Once the hobby turns into a career, many authors will become unbearably vulgar.

The seventy-two techniques of earth evil come from "Tongjian of the Immortals of the Past Dynasties", and together with the thirty-six laws of Tiangang, they are collectively called "Book of Heaven". They are different from the seventy-two transformations in Journey to the West. They are a collection of seventy-two magical powers Original text of Journey to the West: "Master Wanwang showed mercy and taught me the method of avoiding the three disasters. I dare not be ungrateful after all." "Forget it. What kind of magic do you want to learn? There are ordinary Tiangang numbers, which can be changed in thirty-six ways; there are ordinary earthly evil numbers, which can be changed in seventy-two ways. " It can be seen that the transformation technique in Journey to the West is used to avoid three disasters, and it is a great magical power that is completely different from the seventy-two earthly evil tricks and the thirty-six ways of Tiangang. Chinese name Seventy-two Earthly Evil Techniques Source "Tongjian of the Immortals of the Past Dynasties" Main content The description in "The Legend of Sansui Pingyao": You can climb the ladder to the clouds, and descend to shrink the ground. At your fingertips, the mountains and walls will crack; when you are angry, the rocks will move and the sand will fly. Hiding one's form and changing one's appearance will make one appear confused; capturing ghosts and summoning souls will serve the void at will. Bean people and grass horses add majesty from all directions in the battle formation. A paper tiger brings a snake, and a strange thing appears in times of trouble. Wind, cloud, thunder and rain can be used at any time, water, fire, swords and guns dare not hurt. The immortal grandma who founded the mountain has great supernatural powers, and the devil incarnation has high magic skills. Specific magical powers 1. Access to the secluded world: it means meeting the gods, it means being deeply immersed in the gods, being able to see into the underworld and hell, and being able to see through illusions. 2. Exorcism: It can capture and mobilize mountain gods, and it can also command all kinds of spirits, ghosts and yellow turban warriors. 3. Carrying mountains: It can bear the weight of mountains and is also the art of moving mountains. 4. Forbidden water: As the name suggests, it refers to an impassable or poisonous river, which can flow unobstructed and come and go freely in the forbidden water. 5. Borrow the wind: Can drive the wind and control it freely. 6. Fog: means that fog can be placed at any place or time. 7. Pray for sunshine: It can make the rainy day clear up and stop the rain. 8. Praying for rain: the art of rain, making it rain in a certain area. 9. Sitting on fire: It is called the Golden Lotus, the seed of fire, which does not burn when it enters the fire. 10. Entering the water: In the sea, it is also called diving into the abyss without drowning. 11. Covering the sun: This is a technique to cover up the secrets of heaven. 12. Controlling the wind: Riding on the wind is the power of flying. 13. Boiled stones: All those who have five kinds of metals and eight stones can refine the medicine by refining the metals and stones and then take them. This is the art of practicing elixir. 14. Flame breathing: It can breathe out flames and burn evil spirits. 15. Swallow the knife: Eat the knife into the stomach without any damage. 16. Hutian: You can open up a space or a cave and receive the mustard seeds. Even the universe is vast in your sleeves, and the heaven and earth exist in your palms. 17. Divine Movement: The spirit transcends the body, and the soul leaves the body. 18. Walking on water: Can walk on water as if walking on flat ground. 19. Rod Explanation: Practicing something to carry people and perform empty walking, combined with corpse exposition can make something take form, and in a short time, it has become a real person. 20. Clone: ​​It can divide into multiple clones, and it can also divide other things. When it is advanced, it can divide into hundreds of millions. 21. Invisibility: This allows oneself, others, or even all objects to hide their body shape and cover their breath. 22. Renewing the head: Even if the head is cut off, it can remain intact and a new head can grow back. 23. Immobilization: Fixing the body, soul, and even mythical animals or all objects so that they cannot move. 24. Demon Slaying: Can be blessed with magic on weapons, can exorcise ghosts and demons, and destroy incorporeal monsters. 25. Inviting Immortals: The Tao in the sect with the word "shu" refers to the art of praying for immortals by supporting the shackles and divination for forgiveness, which refers to the art of summoning spirits. 26. Soul Chasing: The art of seizing a person's soul and causing death. 27. Soul-taking: The method of taking in the soul. The person who takes the picture also collects it. 28. Zhao Yun: It is to control the auspicious clouds and be able to soar into the clouds and ride the mist. 29. Taking the moon: This method is to take the moon and reveal it on the wall, which is the mysterious light technique. 30. Transport: Drive the five ghosts to bring wealth, also known as the five ghosts transport. 31. Marriage dream: It is a dream that can make people dream. It can weave dreams or come and go freely, and even affect reality. 32. Fragmentation: Various parts of the body are separated and intact, and can be restored instantly without any scars. 33. Send staff: Place the damage caused by the attack on other objects to replace it, so that the damage can be transferred. 34. Cut off the flow: It means to cut off the flow of the river. This is a method of dividing water. You can enter the Dragon Palace Water Mansion through this method. 35. Disaster relief: Also known as relief, it refers to the use of magic to relieve disasters: including driving away locusts, dispelling diseases, plague, etc. 36. JieE: refers to rescuing people from danger, also known as "Jie Yu". It refers to reciting sutras to pray for blessings, to eliminate disasters, and to pay homage to the true God. 37. Huang Bai: Enlighten gold or silver through alchemy. 38. Swordsmanship: Understand the mystery of the integration of sword and Qi, which is the method of Yuan Shen to control the sword. The white light will kill people and become invisible. 39. Shefu: The principle of the Eight Trigrams in the Book of Changes, that is, the names and objects are based on the number of images, and the number of images is based on the meaning and principle, which is a divination and hexagram. 40. Earth Movement: If you retreat into the earth, you can travel thousands of miles in a day. 41. Number of stars: You can observe the sky at night and know your destiny. 42. Formation: various boundaries, formations, and restrictions. 43. False form: The body can change, whether it is male or female, big or small, or a mythical bird or beast, it is ever-changing. 44. Spray: It is a spell that changes objects by blowing your breath. 45. Finger transformation: It means pointing with your hand to make something change. 46. Corpse explanation: Abandon the body and go to immortality, or pretend to be an object, leave the world and ascend to heaven, and become an immortal with only the soul. 47. Scene shifting: You can use spells to change the surrounding environment. 48. ​​Summon: This technique can summon an item using remote control. 49. Drive away: Can make items return and return to their original positions. 50. Gathering Beasts: Can summon various beasts or ferocious birds. 51. Tune birds: Use magic to make birds or beasts listen to them. 52. Qi restraint: A spell characterized by luck. It can restrain golden sores with Qi and stop the bleeding. It can also restrain fire, ghosts, and even white blades, so that they can be cut without being hurt or stabbed without being penetrated. 53. Powerful: Infinite divine power, this is the art of raising the sky's huge power. 54. Through stone: It can penetrate gold and stone without any hindrance, it can be said to be unimpeded. 55. Shengguang: It can emit divine light that protects the body. It can be said that it is invulnerable to all laws, all evils are not close, the light is all over the body, and its wonderful uses are endless. 56. Barrier clothing: means to block, it can prevent flames, rain, and dust from touching the body. Clothing can be used to protect the body. 57. Guidance: It is deeply beneficial to people and prolongs their life. It is necessary to regulate Qi, make the blood vessels smooth and eliminate all kinds of diseases. This is the technique of practicing Qi exhalation and inhalation. 58. Ingestion: Collect the essence of Yimu to refine the elixir and swallow it to seek immortality, cure all diseases or detoxify. 59. Kaibi: Where the finger points, the mountain will crack. 60. Jumping Rock: The art of lightening the body and lifting it vertically, good at bodywork. 61. Meng Tou: Sense in advance when something is about to happen. 62. Dengchao: To speed up things or expand their influence on the original basis, such as making a fire burn more vigorously or more violently. 63. Drink water: You can drink water from rivers, no matter how much you drink. 64. Lying in the snow: It is called eating wind and sleeping in water, lying in the moon and sleeping in the frost. 65. Sunburst: Makes the sun more intense and makes summer hot. 66. Nongwan: This is the golden elixir avenue, the elixir of the Earth Immortal. 67. Fu Shui: It is the magic of Fu Shui, which can summon gods and impeach ghosts, subjugate demons and suppress demons, cure diseases and eliminate disasters, and its wonderful uses are endless. 68. Medicine: The ability to live and die human flesh and white bones is a practice method that uses medicine to enter the Tao, including various medical and immortal methods. 69. Knowing the time: Knowing the laws of the movement of heaven, and being able to discern the secrets of heaven by counting with your fingers, is the art of foretelling the unknown. 70. Knowing the ground: refers to the study of Kanyu. In ancient times, geography was also called Feng Shui. 71. Bigu: Not drinking or eating, eating wind and drinking dew, not eating whole grains or human fireworks, the gods are born by eating breath. 72. Nightmare Prayer: You can use spells to confuse people with illusions, referred to as illusions. The person who falls under the spell is like a nightmare.

The protagonist's fight scenes are just like Gao Wu's fights, not impressive at all. In addition, I spent more than a dozen pages setting the stage, and then I went straight to A, but I haven't passed A yet. 666

I finally understand that even if the protagonist only walks a part of the way, the author has to spend half a chapter to explain it.

My favorite book in recent years, and I can't read the author's other two books. The progress of this one is too fast, and it feels like it's unfinished. It would be nice to rewrite it. The few people who were robbed in the early stage, Guan and A Luo, have no role in the later part, so they should be written more. The others are Yuanshen, Pure Yang, Tao Fruit, Immortality, Creation, and Transcendence. There are too many levels. You can completely remove Immortality, reduce some miscellaneous fish, and set the Tao Fruit to pure Yang. Only the Jade Emperor, the East Emperor, and the Queen Mother are the Tao Fruit. From now on, all of them will be pure Yang.