I’ve Made a Contract with a Spirit Beast

( ੭ ˙ᗜ˙ )੭ If you want to create a variety of vivid demon spirits, it is not enough for Fatty alone, so I opened a post to brainstorm ideas. The template is as follows: (The selected demon spirits may be drawn later) [Race Name]: The name of the initial form/final form [Attributes Nature]: metal, wood, water, fire and earth, wind, thunder, ice, fantasy, balance system (Nether system is a dark attribute, such as bone dragon, corpse dragon or some poisonous demon spirits; Fantasy system is a demon spirit with special abilities and can produce some strange materials, such as the eyes of a squid, which can be used Make Sumeru beads and accommodate demon spirits to live in them. The balance system is a demon spirit that does not show obvious attributes, but its attributes may change after evolution) [Image description]: (Shapes like xx/Shapes like a combination of xx and oo + body color, pattern + some characteristics of the body.) [Special Ability]: (It doesn't have to be, if there is, it can be like the ability of the 'Magma Tadpole' to swim in the oil pan, "Smooth Oil", or like the 'Fire-eating Bullfrog', which temporarily increases the attack power by swallowing lava.) [Evolutionary Chain]: (It is also okay to have only one form.)

There are no major shortcomings except that she is too young to watch. It would be perfect if there was no female protagonist. Jpg

It seems that Fat House is going to take the postgraduate entrance examination this year, so this book is probably in the palace. This book is well written on a daily basis. Because I have to prepare for the postgraduate entrance examination, the update from the beginning is only 2,000 yuan. Many people keep it because there are few. This may be the reason why fewer and fewer people read it. Although I think this book is a pity But I still wish Fei Zhai can pass the postgraduate entrance examination. If I want to write another book, I hope I can continue to write original daily novels about beast control. Feizhai is really good at writing daily novels. The next book will only focus on nurturing beast control novels. I think it will be very marketable.

I was working on it, but suddenly I saw the latest single chapter posted, saying that it was going to be finished because my grades were too bad. It is indeed a pity, but it is also understandable. Writing a book is not a thankless task. Coupled with poor grades and lack of money as motivation, it is difficult for many people to generate electricity purely by love. Moreover, I heard that the author is taking the postgraduate entrance examination and is still updating at this time. I really don't know what to say. In my opinion, the author has the potential to write good online articles. But you have to pay attention to reflection and summary of your article. If you still want to write, I can give you some suggestions as a reader. The first is the setting. I feel that this book obviously lacks a macro structure in the setting. Including the current world view, many things are very unclear, and there are no strong, interesting and eye-catching strong settings, resulting in a lack of attraction. The combat power system needs to be strengthened and concise. What are the possibilities for evolution, cultivation, future development direction? The so-called setting is to describe a very interesting thing, so that readers can have expectations, and hope that the protagonist will describe this thing more specifically in the future. It's really a little too unrestrained here. The second is the characters. I feel that the author hopes to write good characters, and there are few or almost no poisonous points, but I always feel that the characters are not so vivid. As a novel or a film or television, it still needs to be dramatized to highlight the characteristics and symbols. The character's own personality characteristics can be used to strengthen the distinctive part to achieve a good dramatic conflict. At present, almost all the characters, including the protagonist, including the pet beasts, have not made a particularly impressive impression on me. Except for a few features (such as the angry Japanese characters of Lord Snake, the inner volume of the brain and me), the others feel very peaceful and too dull. I feel that the author can establish a few characters as the focus of description. The current situation seems to be that I hope to write a group portrait well, but there is not much ink on each character, and the characteristics are not obvious, so it feels like it is all half-heavy and uncomfortable. Third, this is the most important issue in my opinion, which is rhythm. The pace is too slow, which is partly due to two reasons, and partly because there are too few updates. When the quality of a book is not that outstanding, it is difficult to retain many readers with very few updates. In my opinion, only a very small number of books can do this, such as The Son-in-law. It is amazing that a book like this has been followed for decades by fans, but the quality is indeed very good. Another example is Guan Wuwu. He is very unique and attractive in describing entertainment and cities, but his updates are also very slow, almost to the extent of monthly updates. There are still many readers waiting for him. So my advice to you is that if you still want to write the next book, then you must save more manuscripts before publishing the book, and make sure to increase the amount of updates you make. Another part of the reason is that I feel that the outline is not well written, the main line of the whole story is not clear, and it has been very dragging. Personally, I think the rhythm of an online novel, that is, the development and attractiveness of the story, is very important. Whether it's fast or slow, you have to have a sense of development. At the moment, it feels like the protagonist has always been stuck in a different direction, and I don't know what he wants to do. So the rhythm is the most worthy of your consideration. Finally, regarding writing style and style, I actually don't know quite what style of article the author wants to write. You have to find your own type of article that you want to write, target that part of the audience, and then write it. You can read all types of starting points and all the styles that you think you can write that have good benchmark results and see why others can succeed, and you can learn from them. For example, let me give you an example. I forgot the name of Jasmine's book, but it is about monsters. The style of this book is similar to yours, but it makes the atmosphere of the whole book warm and the characters' personalities are vividly displayed. It is very likable and directly attracts a lot of readers who like everyday style. In short, you have to find what you are good at, and then amplify the characteristics of this thing you are good at. A book can be successful. As Toad said, the key is not that it has more or less shortcomings, but that its advantages are outstanding enough. If you have a specialty and do well in one aspect, you can achieve good results. It is always better than being mediocre across the board. And almost all of the great platinum writers have reached a very high level in some abilities, but are relatively poor or average in many other aspects.

Although it is not known why a snake with metal scales hatched from an egg, nor is it known why metal substances do not destroy protein components. But the world is so wonderful. Lord Snake was born into this world from an egg as if by a miracle. But it is obvious that neither the researcher nor Master She are interested in this issue. Maybe it is because they are accustomed to it, or maybe it is what Buddhism calls a barrier to understanding. The demon spirits born generally grow very quickly. In less than a month, Master Snake has grown from ten centimeters to the length of his current forearm, and his food has also changed from copper powder to granules. Lord Snake is indeed different from other snakes. Ordinary snakes are very quiet, but Lord Snake is very active. Relying on his steel body, whipping a black dolphin with his tail, and biting a bird and wind vulture, he became the well-deserved overlord of that area. On this day, Master Snake took his snake brothers to bask in the sun on the rockery. At this time, two two-legged beasts wearing strange clothes came. The other little snakes swam away hurriedly when they saw him, but who was Master Snake? He was the boss of this area. He immediately curled up and prepared to attack. Give you three seconds, get out. I'll go, do you still dare to touch me? I'll bite you. Let go of my neck quickly, or I will wring your hands off. Oh, now you know how powerful you are, and you know how to please me. Forget it, I will forget all the unreasonable things you did to me before. Haha, yes, you will be my favorite from now on. I'm going to climb on top of your head and say goodbye to my snake brothers. Listen up, snakes down there. From now on, these two horned beasts will be my first favorites. No matter who dares to bully him, don't blame me for being rude.

It's up to you to choose whatever you want, and I'll just do whatever it takes.

Master Snake's final form! Golden-winged Heavenly Dragon Python! Make your debut!

​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​​: Next are some points and personal suggestions that I personally don't like very much. The first is that the interaction between the protagonist and the pet is a bit too "human". From the beginning, the description of the bronze snake and the description of psychological activities are very clear and direct, or it is completely like a person in the shape of an elf. It is not that elves should not be able to express their own thoughts like animals, but this kind of description method of directly writing out the inner thoughts of the elf sentence by sentence makes people feel (If you are writing a chapter with an elf as the main point of view, of course it is another matter), but with the protagonist as the main point of view, I prefer to observe the elf's reaction from the protagonist's perspective, such as the disobedience at the beginning and the protagonist's depression after seeing the pet and realizing that it is weak. It is not good to directly describe the pet's inner thoughts. Communication and interaction, and becoming a tacit understanding are originally one of the highlights of pet development articles. The second is that there are many emoticons in the text, which makes it feel more dramatic. Although the appropriate use of emoticons is a good way to shape the character's image, frequent use of emoticons will make people look awkward. When reading text, you are building an image in your mind. Sudden emoticons will destroy the sense of coherence in text reading. Third, some of the protagonist's actions seemed too ill-considered, such as asking a classmate to forward a suspect's wanted order. Considering the possibility of revenge by the suspect and the protagonist's lack of motivation to catch the suspect, it was a little thoughtless. If the protagonist accidentally encountered the suspect and recognized it, it would not be an unreasonable plot. However, since it is a necessary task line to promote the development of the plot, this small problem is not a problem. Although there are a few minor problems, this article does show the author's level and is a promising seedling.

The setting is great, but the characters are average. The male protagonist is a typical handsome genius with a mean personality. The female protagonist can't even be considered a tool, just a rimmed vase, and her personality is not very likable. I hope that the chapters with the female protagonist can be marked so that it can be skipped easily.

Crow Tengu