Incense Taoist

1. Regarding the heroine issue, Ning Taohua is no longer the heroine. 2. The clan leader issue, the protagonist will no longer seize the clan leader. 3. For calculation problems, reduce calculations as much as possible. 4. The main text starts from Chapter 19, and all subsequent chapters will be deleted.

The heroine appeared on the scene after just a few words. It was too early, and she was immediately persuaded to leave. Some readers who don't like having a female protagonist are not very good at accumulating popularity in the early stage.

This book has been approved by internal voting, and the 6,000 words will be submitted for signature. Feedback is welcome 😊

The plot has been adjusted, starting from Chapter 9 with minor changes, and then Chapters 10 to 15 including an unreleased Chapter 16. A total of seven chapters are invalidated and the plot will be changed. Let me think about it, the number of updates will decrease in the future.

When writing online articles, remember not to fall into self-pleasure mode. It doesn't matter whether the heroine is poisonous or not. Readers will like her no matter how poisonous her character is. Less description of the environment, less adjectives, less adverbs, and less logical words (although, but, but, still, be, are used sparingly.) Speak clearly in one sentence, never in two sentences. The writers who comment and praise you should understand these things, right? There are not many people who can say it.

It is basically certain that this book is a hit. The heroine is written in a disgusting way. She makes calculations first and then takes the blame. It is of no use. The impression is already established that she is destined to be unlovable. You can write a female protagonist, but you have to choose a good one. Is the Peach Tree Demon a female? It is neither male nor female, it is self-pollination, look at the grandmother in A Chinese Ghost Story, it looks scary, it is enough to be the heroine with such an unknown gender. Not against the author, but the fact is, there is no way to make money

A tribe of 100 people has so much shit.

Maybe too careful. But doing evil things in the name of God. . I can't see the divine side, but the demonic side is particularly prominent.

There are too many calculations, and the heroine is too unlikable. She takes it upon herself to occupy a place in the virtual world and directly digs into the protagonist's foundation. Generally speaking, a character with this kind of personality will be plotted to death by the protagonist. In the end, she has become something like an ally.

Let's go and read the book Liu Yu from a long time ago. It could be regarded as the best Shinto book, but it's a pity that the eunuch

The posts are full of praises and how good the writing is, but no one points out the author's weaknesses. How can the author improve? First: The writing is good, but it is too watery. There are so many watery words and the plot has no progress. Second: Is this prose? There are so many color descriptions in a peach blossom. I don't know if the author wants to write prose, or if there is really no content and he wants nothing to do with it? Third: There are too many adverbs, logical words, and adjectives. Web writing should be simple, direct, and straightforward. This is the best writing style. With so many descriptions, not only does it fail to show that the writing is good, but it also annoys readers. Who is willing to spend money to read a bunch of landscape descriptions in the future? Open a new book. This book cannot be saved.

That peach tree demon, the author wrote it in such a disgusting way, and also marked the heroine. With such a heroine, it's better to forget about it.

I don't understand what everyone is complaining about. I think it is very well written, and this is the first book I would recommend this week. The opening chapter is very stunning. Heaven and earth are perfect. Why is one hundred people so many? One person's network can only have 300 people at most, and a tribe of one hundred people must not be small. It's just that some of the supporting characters are not stupid. The author deduced it. There are politics in the 4-person dormitory and the 5-person office. The supporting characters are written as normal people or even wise men, and the writing is not ruined. This level exceeds that of a lot of online writers. The author is very talented, I look forward to the next plot

The heroine? ? Forget it😭

Well, I was attracted by Divine Body, Dream Lord, Ninth Grade, and Emperor, but so far I am still introducing the background of the world. I personally think it would be better to put it in the middle and late stages. The core highlight of this book should be that the protagonist goes from a ninth-grade minor god to an emperor and creates a Shinto civilization.

The protagonist's gangster character is not very likable, and he does some petty theft at the beginning. There is also a weird heroine, and this book can easily be...