Superpower Unrest

After reading it, let me talk about the pros and cons of this book. This is also the reason why the author talks about why many people say bad things about it in the last chapter. Premise: Novel is different from reality. In reality, as long as it conforms to physics, anything can happen; while novels must conform to logic, conform to logic, conform to logic. As long as it conforms to logic, no matter how you write it, there is no problem. Advantages: The author has great ideas and develops the protagonist's telekinesis abilities in various ways. I estimate that the author must have thought of dozens or hundreds of ways to use it, and he must have thought of more than a dozen in-depth ways of using it. Disadvantages: The first point: The most important point is that the shaping of the protagonist's character is a big problem. It is so big that no matter how good the book is later, it will be abandoned in the early stage and will not be seen. It goes without saying what the protagonist's character is at the beginning. Various novels have it all, but the protagonist's character is his characteristic, or a tone. If it is written from the protagonist's perspective, the tone of the entire novel is related to the protagonist's character and behavior. This is the case with this book. And in the early stage of this book, the protagonist was purely thinking about Gou's character, and was just trying to survive. Suddenly, someone came and attacked, and the protagonist wanted to fight back. He didn't use the most energy-saving sneak attack, but he also wanted to fight back with great fanfare? Isn't Gou's method of not allowing people to discover it and minimizing the impact as much as possible? Are you afraid that others are blind and won't notice such a big movement? Okay, once discovered, let's just say that for the sake of plot promotion and follow-up development, we always have to join the organization. Then when you go in for testing, you use a big move, just to show off? Show that the protagonist is awesome? What about your Gou's character? The protagonist has become a leader, and needs to be forced to do various things that are part of his position. Hey, he doesn't want to do this, he doesn't want to do that, he wants to be stubborn, he wants to be a salted fish, why do he suddenly want to be a salted fish? Why are you so stubborn all of a sudden? Isn't this the protagonist's choice? I did some things later and became a high-level executive, and then I discovered that there was a conspiracy behind the superpower. Why! The protagonist has begun to change. He has to work hard and make progress. It is almost on the shelves now, so he has to start working hard. Does the author have any misunderstanding about Gou? Do you want to write that the protagonist is forced to be pushed around at first, but then becomes a person who works hard on his own? However, the way this character is written itself does not conform to the character design. A person's behavior is the evaluation of his character by outsiders, and the source of this evaluation is also a person's behavior reflected by his own character. If you want to write, you should write that the protagonist is a person who always has a competitive mentality in his heart but is full of a sense of justice. A person who always takes things easy will not say that this is a strength test. I have to try my best and only do it just right, or even perform a little weakly. A person who wants to be stubborn will not be the first to do anything. As an egoist in most situations, he will only be less likely to go overboard. Don't think that society is complicated and ultimately forces the protagonist to do things. The novel written by the author is a society that is either black or white. Since you haven't thought about the development of society, don't write too much. Second point: Has the author thought about other powers? To be precise, are they advanced applications of other powers? A novel should not be about the protagonist showing off his power alone, without the support of supporting characters and villains. That is Long Ao Tianwen. When the enemy comes, it will be next in seconds. This is probably not what I wanted to write when reading this novel. If a novel about supernatural powers is to be written well, it must have various developed powers. It cannot be just one person, otherwise it will be Long Aotian who went to ancient times with unlimited ammunition. According to the full score of 10, various development and application methods need to be in-depth: The protagonist's superpowers must eventually reach 10 points, no need to say The male lead, heroine and other important figures around the protagonist, 6~9 points, used to reflect how strong the protagonist is, particularly important partners (accompanying them from beginning to end) 9 points Big boss: 9.5~10 Points. Only with this level of development can you go back and forth and be exciting Small boss: 8.0~9.5 Points, a high-level stepping stone on the road to growth Various other enemies and teammates in the mid-term: 6.0~8.0 Points. After all, you have to fight the protagonist. As a general stepping stone, it can't be too small. Various personnel in the early stage: It depends on the seriousness of the author. According to this calculation, the author needs to design at least 1 protagonist, 1 big boss, 1 important person who may be sacrificed, and 1 possible mini-boss. In other words, the author must have at least 3 ways to develop abilities that are basically thought of to the extreme. Has the author thought about it? I never thought that I would rather stop updating and figure it out first. Otherwise, someone will suddenly come out and say that he is a big boss. How to show that his abilities are well developed is best to start the layout in advance. The third point: The power development I have seen so far is too simple. I can only give 5 points to the protagonist's power, which is just average. I am talking about a power that I hope the author will think about. In a few days, I will post the usage below this comment. Anyone who has read it knows that this ability is very powerful and can even be the protagonist of a novel. Power: Melting Effect: The user can secrete a liquid, causing other solid substances that touch the liquid to turn into a special liquid state that can be controlled by the user without changing the physical and chemical properties. The shape is fixed when the power is removed. The time it takes for other objects to enter a molten state depends on the user's understanding of the substance. Substances that are not understood will take a long time, and substances that are understood can even melt instantly. Example: 1 Let this person fight. During the battle, the opponent's weapon is assumed to be steel. After the opponent's steel weapon is instantly melted, it becomes an iron chain and binds the opponent (melt deformation), and this is how he fights. 2 Let this person serve as a logistics person, secrete the molten liquid in advance, and throw it to the opponent when needed to use it, making all the opponent's external objects useless 3 As a forger, help others forge weapons. Any solid can be forged into the desired shape, so it is a fitter level 10, which is higher than level 8 because any solid can be shaped.

This book can only read a dozen chapters from the year before last. In order to post a comment, I even ordered all the products on the shelves. After more than ten chapters, everything will basically collapse! Fully exposes the author's white and geeky nature.

Come on! Beautifully written. In addition, I don't know if the protagonist is planning the plot. The protagonist's younger brother is just like the original Long Aotian. It feels like he is the trigger for many plots in the future. Moreover, the geographical countries seem to be written very vaguely. I feel that I will try to be more detailed in the follow-up, such as changing all the country names on the map.

First of all, I would like to congratulate the author on the new book. I hope it can be completed. Secondly, I would like to give you some suggestions: I don't know whether it is because the manuscript has not been saved or the pace of the first two books is too fast, so the pace of the first three chapters of this book is very slow. It is recommended that the pace be faster in the early stage to attract readers, and slow down later. I still like the first two books, even though they are eunuchs🤭

Let's talk about the poisonous points. There are basically no poisonous points in the first dozen chapters. After meeting the pervert who can become invisible, the character of the protagonist collapses and there are poisonous points. . . . After joining that so-called state-owned enterprise, his strength collapsed. The protagonist was able to reconnect his muscles and nerves, but he thought he couldn't beat a muscle-enhanced person. Even his nerves were connected. I don't believe that the protagonist couldn't directly destroy the muscles in the human body.

Open a post for recruiting abilities, including super powers or related applications.

I had a very high impression of the book at the beginning. After the protagonist gained abilities, he quickly calmed down and made plans to develop his abilities. In more than ten chapters, the interaction between the protagonist and gangsters and murderers also revealed the protagonist's outlook on things that is very different from ordinary people. It greatly satisfied my expectations for the protagonist - the confidence that everything is under control, the firm goal and will, and the reader feels a sense of security. Then the author began to "pressure" the protagonist. From the moment he entered the company, the protagonist's calm temperament was gone, and the world view had not yet been spread. The protagonist suddenly turned into a salty fish, which directly disabled the protagonist on the first task (what was the author thinking???)! And then a villain organization pops up to recruit the protagonist? Nowadays, I have to fuck the protagonist every time I get a role, and I beat the protagonist violently during a meeting. I feel suffocated watching it. I can't feel the charm of the protagonist's personality at the beginning.

The Japanese comic style is completely unsuitable for China. To be honest, if it were changed to a European or domestic style, many people would still be able to read it. The Japanese comic style is really unbearable. The Japanese comic style makes people feel childish.

At the beginning, I came here for "development to the extreme". But after watching most of the movie, I found that the protagonist's ability development was so gaudy that I felt uncomfortable. To put it simply, isn't telekinesis just using thoughts to influence matter? What's the use of writing all the bells and whistles? What kind of fixed-point explosion or something. To be honest, these are only useful in certain situations. At first, I saw that the protagonist was a medical student, and I thought he was going to use surgical knowledge to find key organs of organisms and destroy them. I don't think you have to go around in circles to achieve your goal. Just find the brain and tinker with it a few times with your mind. The whole thing has to explode. What to do? Too busy? In addition, there are too many loopholes in the internal compression process. It is unrealistic to really want to create an air explosion in the human body. There simply wasn't enough gas to go around. It's still 8000°C before the bubble bursts. I didn't see anyone being scalded to death. To be honest, I recommend the author to watch Swallowing Starry Sky. Although that book also has many loopholes.

I saw at Tiangong Company that the basic salary for a superpower is 5,000? ? ? Are superheroes worse than migrant workers? Is this joining the beggar gang? Although there may be subsidies or something later. But I always feel that this little money is not very harmful, but very insulting. In case you meet an acquaintance: Brother, I am moving bricks on a construction site and my basic salary is RMB 5,011 a month. Brother, how much is your basic salary as a superhero? 😁