Bring the System to Low Martial Arts

I feel it's okay, but the plot is a bit confusing, and I feel like if I write it like this, I won't be able to write many words without changing the map...

He looked very confused, was Huo Bingqing really his mother? Gu Wei seems to be Huo Bingqing's biological child, but why does the protagonist say half-brother? There are many places in this book that are not explained clearly at all, making it very uncomfortable to read.

Things like ping-duo-duo and rebounds are really weird. The first dungeon was well written, and once I became the owner of the village, I let myself go. You've only reached 100,000 words now, and you've already made this progress. Will you finish it in 180,000 words?

I was confused by the plot, I didn't understand it clearly, I had no idea what it was about.

I can't read such a funny novel

Very interesting and pretty, come on

Judging from the author's request for leave, it must have been an accident. The loess on the grave has started to grow grass.

Do you still remember what the author said in the leave request note? It's been so long since there has been an update, so it's very possible that the author is gone.

After becoming the head of the family, the author began to enjoy himself, and the plot line was completely released. The audience for a style that is obviously self-entertaining will be relatively small, unless you constantly renovate funny jokes to continue your life, which is too difficult.

The author's ideas are good and creative, but it's a pity that the writing style is still a little lacking. The first few chapters of the story failed to describe the interpersonal relationships in the first copy well. Some regrets! I hope those who say poison will continue to read, and the characters and reasons for doing things of the protagonist's mother and the adopted son who were swapped can basically be reconciled. The protagonist's mother is a vicious-minded woman who doesn't take her biological son seriously at all and wants to use her adopted son to take revenge on her adopted son's biological father. The adopted son is a relatively loyal and upright protagonist of the original storyline. I hope the author can surprise me with his next book.

Authors always talk about suspected spoilers, but you have to let readers understand, right? I don't understand anything. This is not a suspenseful mystery novel. What do we think about it? What we want is not a moment of enlightenment. What we want is to feel refreshed.

After reading Chapter 9, I'm still confused and no longer in love.

The writing is actually quite good, but the 12-year-old N-angle love made me... Imagine a group of sixth grade students playing house 😅

How old is the protagonist? Shouldn't he be the same age as the person who replaced him? Why do you feel there is something wrong with this age?

Seriously, author, you don't want to reveal the mystery. I think there's no problem. You can hide your perspective and write about this secret. But I'm wondering about the protagonist's perspective and you didn't tell the readers? When you write a romance novel, you have to write it well, not as a suspense writer. The readers have to share the perspective with the protagonist. At least they have to know why the protagonist talks about the old half-father and half-daughter.

If you want to write, write well. I fell down after the second chapter.

Show, show, show off with a confused face~ Main line? What main line? Just play! It seemed like I saw something, but it seemed like I didn't see anything at all...