My 1985

This is not a novel, but a commentary

These words are not novels at all, but messy memories written by the author. The novel needs to have a main line, foreshadowing, ups and downs in the plot, male and female protagonists, supporting roles, and extras, and the space cannot be evenly distributed. The author probably doesn't read novels very much. I have no idea about the novel at all.

I've read so much, but I don't know what you want to say. Can you write more content and less Baidu posts? The writing is good, but I can't find the key point.

I just looked at a dozen of them and they were all confusing.

There is a reason why it is not popular It is close to the facts of that era, but it recalls and explains too much, is too detailed, and is too concentrated. Intersperse some stories appropriately, and use stories to drive explanations and memories that are easier for readers to accept. Show the pictures of that era piecemeal, don't list them all at once. Personally, I don't think writing like this will achieve much, so it's better to start a new pit. The recommendation has been submitted and is for reference only.

I found out from the recommendation that I just read a few chapters and it was pretty good😊. I just have something to complain about and don't be unhappy about it. Please forgive me if I'm wrong 🙏! You, a deputy director, with a high income, a loving father and a filial son, have to consume the rebirth quota of billions of people waiting in line just because you died of illness on the 53rd. Don't you think it's a bit too much? How do you want the broad masses of the people to live? Just kidding. I wish you better and better as you write!

I thought I could wait until chapter 30 before posting this, but ended up writing chapter 29 before I finished it. The author put the only three rainbow fart comments at the top of the list. It's really a piece of shit. It's so fucked up. This is the first time I have seen this kind of Shui Fa in almost fifteen years. Every character, thing, and building that appears is accompanied by at least three chapters of biography and information on average. There is no plot in Shui Fa, and it is all a report. What is commendable is that there are so many critical voices. The author's Taoist heart is so solid that it can be said to be perfect and flawless, and the Supreme Water Dao is easily accessible. There will be no time limit if the Tao is not the same.

There are too many explanations, and it would be enough if I don't say that I have explained them once and twice. It's boring to explain too much. There is suspicion of flooding.

Stop writing about the football team, okay?

A mess with no main thread? Am I here to read Baidu Encyclopedia?

In the first chapter, the description before rebirth is abrupt and inexplicable, and the content is not quite right. First, I write about rebirth, and then I write a long paragraph about my wife and daughter without any foreshadowing.

There are too many memories, so hurry up and write a story.

Okay, your memories have not been explained so much. You can start your pursuit of life and add small goals. It's not that you're just arrogant with numbers, because if you keep writing like this, readers will get tired of it. Really😒😒😒

Lasted for more than 10 chapters! Slipping away

The writing is really scattered. Since it is rebirth, it should mainly be about life after rebirth, right? No matter what you encounter, you have to compare it with what it was before you were reborn. When you meet someone, you have to introduce what they did after that. I wrote dozens of chapters, but barely wrote about life after rebirth.

I have never read such a rubbish book, it's a mess

It's too verbose. I should write clearly how much rice the protagonist eats and how much water he drinks for every meal every day.

This book makes people's heads hurt after reading it. It doesn't distinguish between priority and priority. The author has spared more than half of the words in each chapter. There are a lot of details written in each chapter, but these details are actually not needed at all, so readers are left skipping to read each chapter. There are only a few sentences that are the real plot text. I wish I could write down how many bowls of rice the protagonist has eaten and how many grains of rice are in a bowl of rice.

Brother, are you writing a novel or a memoir? Isn't that too exaggerated? I wrote 17 chapters in eight hours after being reborn.

The writing is messy and unclear. I don't know the main plot. Do you want to get rich or continue to be a doctor? As a profession, doctors are destined to do business. You can only quit or buy shares. It is impossible to invest in it.

It's piecemeal, it's a mess, the logic is flawed, and there's no sense of immersion at all. For the sake of the starting point's recommendation, I read a few chapters. It was like eating a bowl of rice with sand. When I took the first bite of sand, I thought that the rest should be better, so I forced myself to continue, but there were still a lot of them. I couldn't hold on anymore, so I gave up.

I don't understand, sometimes it's modern and sometimes it's from 1985.

The memoirs written by the author are very messy. Because of my rebirth, I feel very good about myself. No one can compare with me. I want to be a doctor, and I will easily become a famous doctor. I want to be a businessman, and I will definitely become a rich man. I want to find my wife from my previous life. Is there any common language? If you want to change the fate of various people, if you think others are not doing well, if you don't have a clear goal, and you don't know what to do, if you plan to retire, why should you be reborn? Retirement?

Let me tell you something after reading Chapter 17. Many people read it and feel confused. This is a literary work about rebirth. Those who want to read a novel written by a novice may be disappointed.

This book is suitable for those who are patient. The author should have designed the outline of the entire book well, but the core problem is that the pace is too slow. Saying inappropriate words is like running down a running account. The more you read, the more uncomfortable it becomes. I hope the next book can be optimized. See you again if this book is destined. Please vote for a few months before leaving to express your feelings. Come on, author.

This article by the author is very solid. The source must be from real life.

It's very well written and detailed, keep it up.

This book is not finished yet🙂

It's a good book. Although I've only read a few chapters, luckily I didn't bias the comments. It's wonderfully written. Good luck to the author💪

Just read this book. I've only read a dozen chapters and it's great. The past years unfold slowly and eloquently, and it feels very consistent with the situation at that time - if it is not a good memory, then it is the author's care! Of course... It may not be friendly to those who like to read Bai Shuang's articles.