From Village Team to Football Powerhouse

Congratulations on your new book! But if you're going to write about club history, you shouldn't set it in Germany… Are you planning to develop them only to have them snatched up by Bayern Munich? 😅😅

The premise is good—a rural team rising to a European powerhouse—but it has too many flaws. First, the protagonist is the coach, which makes it hard to connect with the player, essentially ruining the book. Second, the constant collection of future players followed by their sale means the players' trajectories change, but they don't necessarily become better, and there's not enough exciting…

Or, could you add a "highlight" 😏?

Shouldn't this be marked as a featured post? 😁

You can't create a fictional world without a solid foundation. The names you've come up with are just jarring.

This is a ridiculous parallel world, a ridiculous alternate history novel, with all sorts of drastically altered team names and player names. The author is just being capricious; that's how they want to write it. The author's mentality is: he writes what he wants, readers can read it or not, it's up to them. So… goodbye!!

Little Gold-Eating Beast

A team cannot become a powerhouse without operating in a major city. They might become legendary, but they can never become a true powerhouse. Small towns lack the appeal to star players and cannot retain them.

I don't quite understand. The author spent so much time describing this Japanese goalkeeper in the earlier chapters, but then introduced a new goalkeeper in these next few chapters. I don't really get it.

I read forty chapters and was ultimately discouraged; without real names, there was absolutely no sense of immersion. So many football novels use real names, but this one doesn't.