I Became a Native's Golden Finger

There's a reason why your grades aren't good, author; the part about Piccolo was too self-indulgent. I skipped that part because I couldn't stand reading it. It was written quite well before, so why did it suddenly become so self-indulgent? Another flaw is the protagonist's boss; you don't have the writing skills to handle the boss character well.

After more than 30 chapters, they got into some kind of trial game and then it went completely off-topic.

The person downstairs, your statement is slightly incorrect. The protagonist needs to develop. The benefits the protagonist can obtain are contingent on the host's death. To achieve what you're saying, allowing the host to continuously develop, the protagonist would need an elimination ability; otherwise, it's impossible. You can't support someone to the point of being out of control.

I think the author is being a bit presumptuous. I read up to chapters 60 and 70 hoping to find out who the mastermind was, but then you came out with this Piccolo Demon King and all sorts of wishful thinking, which made me lose interest. It's like you filtered out a group of readers in the first 50 chapters, and then drove away another group of those readers later. Speechless.

At first, I actually thought the protagonist's idea was inappropriate. After all, giving the host to improve his strength as soon as possible would also help him quickly obtain energy, which could be considered an investment. Who knew that he would be proven wrong so quickly, and the host would die.

This world could be written like a game novel. For example, these two people return to reality, discover they can improve their gene levels, and then it slowly becomes popular again, eventually becoming a game for everyone. As for the ending, that depends on how you write it. Perhaps they help this world clear out the monsters from the other world, or maybe they clear them out halfway and then search for a new world.

The beginning was fantastic and amazing, the middle was okay, but the latest chapters were not good, and it felt like it got worse and worse as it went on. The updates were also slow, which made the plot completely disjointed. It was quite good for a while, but after following it for a while, I forgot about it. I refreshed it today and it didn't feel the same.

It started off pretty good. Then the energy source collapsed. The 1:60 timeframe wasn't explained in detail later. Then a lot of time was spent on a female supporting character. And then she died. This kind of thing—either don't write it at all, or write it and then kill her off—is very frustrating. She was used as a tool by two planets without even realizing it. I can't bear to read any more. I'm outta here.

I still suggest reducing the amount of poetry. It's really off-putting when the protagonist suddenly spouts a poem during a fight scene or plot development. This isn't some kind of literary work. A couple of lines now and then is fine, but too many get annoying. And the characters in other books... They seem really absurd.

The idea is good, and the initial draft was quite good. Then it started with the same old routine. The selection game segment, in particular, was a real trap within a trap.