I Can Create Magical Props

To be honest, I went there just to find fault. You can call me a bully. Many book friends have given suggestions in the book. The author can refine the previous content. I only read the first chapter and before I finished it, I saw two problems: broken sentences and typos. The most serious problem was the broken sentences. The author's punctuation marks made it very difficult to break the sentences. The second thing is to remember not to be too wordy. The description of the scene in the ruined temple where the protagonist is resurrected in the first chapter is too verbose when I write about the ruined temple. It makes my brain hurt to read it. In fact, it can be written clearly in one or two sentences. It can be seen that the author's writing style is still very immature, because the description is too colloquial. The second thing is that it is neither bad nor good. The author can consider optimizing the text layout of the panel. It is a bit dazzling. I am a conscientious gangster, and I even rewarded fans with points before writing this chapter ~ The original world is very attractive to me, please come on, author.

😆Come on duck

Opinion floor. As a newbie, my writing skills can only improve gradually. I wrote this book for the love of electricity when I got interested. They are just some interesting ideas. If there are any shortcomings, please mention them directly in this chapter so that I can correct them and grow. Don't talk about the writing style, just tell me which paragraph has the problem, because most people just talk about the writing style directly. I don't know where the problem is and it is difficult to correct it.

It's because I'm not good at writing and I didn't shape it well. It was originally supposed to be one kind. Although I took good care of you when you were little. I was afraid that you would be cold and prepared a comfortable house for you. I was afraid that you would be thirsty and hungry. I would prepare enough food and water. I would buy medicine when you were sick. I would actively clean the house and clean up the feces for you. However, it did not affect the feeling of eating meat at the end of the year. (Person) You are my wife, I love you, I like you. I think whatever you do is right. In real life, I work hard and earn money to support my family. I am willing to pay and rush in because of "me". Like. You? You you? You you you? Life and love can be separated. If there is the first you, there will be the second and third you (people)

The words do not convey the meaning, the words are verbose, confusing, a running account, missing words and few words, and the description of people, objects, and scenes is incomplete. It is a good idea, but it is a pity that the writing style is like a flash student from a giant university in the universe.

I came across this book last year when the author just started it. The subject matter was good but the writing was too poor and the main line was too confusing. It doesn't matter if the main line is messy, but the writing is so poor. There are typos, missing words, sentence fragmentation, expressions, mistakes, and many other problems that make my head hurt. I read one or two paragraphs when I was bored. I only read Chapter 40 intermittently today. I really couldn't help but want to ask, is the writing better in the later chapters? ? ? ? ?

A message to the author: First of all, the imagination is wide open and the props are good😊. It can be seen that the author is very careful; but, you created a world, why don't you interact with the world? Don't always be immersed in your own imagination, interact with the world! Introduce the details of your world to everyone so that everyone can get to know your world and wander around in your world.

I want to prove that I sent the picture, it just doesn't show up.

This is the planned route that was originally planned to connect Volume 1 and Volume 2. The first one is the romance world, the direction of development is the free demon, the demon is ruthless and careless, toying with all sentient beings - demons The second fairy tale world, the innate ancient gods are replaced by the gods of belief, the protagonist gradually eats away these belief gods to become the only god, and finally swallows the whole world, and then divides into small worlds, formulates possibilities, past lives and Anime movies related to gods cultivate this small world farm into a multi-world group, just to cultivate the materials they need, harvest the mysterious materials, put in nutrients, and mysteriously revive. All living beings are lambs managed by shepherds. They are truly like gods above. The development direction of the third classical Classic of Mountains and Seas world has been revealed, but in order to maintain mystery, I won't say it. This is a classical element without the prehistoric system. It doesn't write too many messy things. It is a simple beast, a mythical beast, a disaster beast, a world of mountains and seas where the legendary ancient gods feed each other, golden crows fly in the sky, Kun Peng swims in the sea, and all things are free in the frost and sky - monsters. The kind of fairy world. Fairy Tale Century, so we are looking for a naive light, a place where there is no good or bad, and people are chaotic and evil, which does not mean they have to be violent or a pervert. They are only for the benefit of themselves and the people around them. A little bit of darkness that makes people think carefully should be the development direction of Cthulhu type darkness. There are always book friends who say that I write in Cthulhu. Volume 3 is actually a preparation to alleviate that darkness. Primitive animality and survival and hunting, devouring and being devoured. Food language is called food, only for survival, without emotions, and morality is only for survival. If we go by the opinion put forward by a certain book friend, it is to develop quickly and directly become a big boss, start unlimited travel, go on a gorgeous journey as a human being, and follow the comprehensive comic route. Anyway, the plot is probably about these two developments!

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If you think your writing is not good, why don't you just write more straightforwardly? I feel that my writing is not good and I like to foreshadow my writing, and if you don't say it in this chapter, I won't even know it's a foreshadowing. Once a story is told clearly and wonderfully, I feel pretty good. A bunch of drama queens are operating, and people are addicted to food. 🙂🙂🙂🙂🙂

I persisted for a while and wondered whether the author did it on purpose. Reading these words made my head hurt. There were too many places where the sentences didn't make sense and I couldn't bear it anymore.

It's rather dizzy to see. 1. Why are you talking to yourself? The first 3 chapters explain the golden finger clearly. 2. Then save yourself and experiment with golden fingers. 3. Be prepared to dive into the sea. The perfect beginning, I was so dizzy when I read it. Talking to himself like a running account, without character communication. It feels like watching Mr. Hello Tree is a self-autobiography. The sports lottery is very good, but the writing is poor and the sentences are broken. I hope the author can organize it well. I'm not complaining, I just hope that the author will adopt it, otherwise there is a high chance of being thrown into the street.

There are problems with sentence segmentation, problems with punctuation, missing words and sentences, and lots of typos. Although the idea is good, it is too strenuous to read. In other novels, it takes several chapters to read, but here you can only read one stop, and you have to make up for the sentences you are missing. It is too tiring.

Fried rice mixed with sand. It tastes good, but I can't eat it. Chewing hard can knock out teeth. Strong imagination and good creativity. But the writing is so poor! ... So bad! Too bad to complain.

Sorry, I read 40 chapters in one breath, and I was actually more tired than reading a brain-burning novel... The subject matter, imagination, and plot are all interesting, but the brain-filling➕reading is too uncomfortable... There is no sense of smoothness, and it gave me a headache while reading.

After reading Chapter 37, I accepted a little girl. I really hate this kind of plot. The main reason is that there was a period in the past 20 years when the trend was to accept a little girl by my side no matter what kind of plot it was. It disgusted me. Now that I see it, I feel disgusted. If it were 19 years ago, I would still be able to watch it.

Couldn't the author write less about his inner activities? What's the use of this embarrassing group besides the word count? If you don't write well in the early stage to retain readers, how can you still expect to get good subscriptions after it is published?

This book is really poisonous. First of all, the subject matter is quite interesting. The protagonist can use the system to explore this weird and bizarre world, and synthesize magical items through various special materials. People can't help but want to watch the next development of the plot. However, your article is too confusing. I skipped through other novels and read one page per second without any problem. But in your novel, I had to stop and read every detail carefully and organize the main plot by myself, otherwise I would not be able to understand the actions of the protagonist at all. Really, it was so uncomfortable to watch, I had a headache and wanted to watch it again.

The idea is very good, the writing is average, it's a bit hard to read, but the author still works very hard, I give you a vote

The setting is okay, the writing is decent, but I can't stand it at all. Personally, I can only think that the author has no intention at all. If you look at it a little, it won't be such a mess. I really can't bear it. This kind of fast food novel is meant for relaxation, not for guessing what the author wants to say.

(No derogatory meaning, purely for the author's sake) I suggest the author see a psychiatrist. From the confusing word order and illogical content, it can be seen that the author may have some mental problems, some mental disorders, and some confused thinking. Could it be a sign of depression or other mental problems?

I have read this little shabby book before, and then it was taken off the shelf. I didn't expect that it is still being updated. I can only say that the author is awesome! I remember that this book had a pretty good start, but the author only wanted to practice writing. All the messy and irrelevant thoughts were stuffed into it. This was destined to be the author's self-cultivation work!

Stick to 33 photos. The subject matter is very good and the creativity is also very good. It's just too confusing. There is no logic. The thoughts are confusing. The expression is too wordy. It was difficult to read the paragraphs The protagonist's expressions and the protagonist's psychological thoughts are all mixed together If I finish reading this book, I will have to see a psychiatrist.

This is a new author, don't be too harsh, the creativity is good. I am waiting for the new book, and reading this one made my blood pressure go up 😭

The creativity is good and the imagination is quite big, but the writing style makes me want to complain too much.

This name reminds me of: Magic Prop Master

This book is really good, the subject matter is very creative, and the writing style is hard to describe... It's so painful to read😖 The author didn't care, it's a pity

Interesting, but the writing is a bit messy.

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