Escape from Konoha

After reading all the way, I feel that there are several important reasons for the severe sensory decline of this book in the later period (I have been too lazy to type, so I will talk too much and list a lot of backlogged opinions. If you find it annoying, you can ignore me): (By the way, if you are a new reader reading the comments, my suggestion is that the book is worth reading. It is almost finished now. The main torture is the follow-up reading.) 1. Combat balance The author mentioned before that the combat power of all parties should be fine-tuned, but the fine-tuning itself does not seem to be a problem. After all, the author is good at or is more interested in group portraits. At the same time, this will not cause the protagonist to become a one-man show in the later stage, causing the plot to end in a flat train. These are all good. So: in the first step, the trio cannot be too strong, so the output of the two women is reduced a little bit. Susana sets the mana consumption to be greater than the battery life, and the protagonist is low-key, likes to hide his clumsiness, and has an overall view, so he does not show off his skills. The second step is to strengthen the victims a little bit due to the lapse in combat power at the end of the original comic. The third step is to extend the time required for the protagonist to accumulate strength and add the time and effort required to run the country to improve some rationality. Each of these combat power balances has indeed been adjusted a little, and it seems to make the plot more reasonable, but in fact it has produced many unreasonablenesses. The biggest unreasonableness is that after so many years after the war with Madara's team, the power of the trio does not have a big "sense" improvement that it should have. Originally, he was basically "kage level" when he defected, and if I remember correctly, although the Uchiha Madara who fought with the trio was almost dead of old age, he was still supposed to be stronger than the dragon shadow, much stronger. However, it has been set so many years ago, and the plot of the trio with fairy magic and monsters has been strengthened, and they have not yet had a sensory gap with other "shadow-level" powers. Because no matter how the combat power is balanced, the power of Uchiha Madara and Senju Hashirama must be able to hang up the Five Shadows and beat them, and they both have ranged strike power. They have absolute suppression power against anyone except the two of them, and the Six Paths are the strongest. And all these "little bits" of fine-tuning made by the author add up to a big problem: then if the trio (two women) are not close to (even slightly weaker than) Hashirama and Madara in single combat power, it does not comply with the common sense of combat power improvement, and there is no "sensory" suppression. Especially Ichiki, when she was trained by Ruri, she was said to be able to catch up with Ruri quickly. This shouldn't be the case. It has nothing to do with whether Ichiki has Kaguya's power, because Ichiki's "recent" strength is higher than Jiraiya's in the senses, but she can only compete with Kage. This only means that Ruri's own strength has not broken down with Kage after so many years. Ling Yin agrees. 2. The value of individual power Continuing from the above, there is a clear fault in the power level of Naruto. Even Madara (the infinite chakra of Urushi is meaningless to Madara) can crush the five shadows. The trio develops national combat power, but the individual combat power must be suppressive. Thousands of chuunin genin should not be killed in a short period of time, because the gap in strength should be ridiculously large. In order to describe the value of technology, the plot has lowered the personal combat power too much, so the senses are poor. After so many years, the personal combat power is not as good as the shadow. 3. Rely on the plot development of the original work I seemed to have read in a book review that the author would drop the subscription as soon as he created it, so he would not deviate from the original work. I don't quite understand. (I always spoke to the author before I chased the Demon Country for the first battle, because I believed that the previous foreshadowing should have a big explosion, and then deviated from the original work in key plots) The original wanted to attract people to rely on "coolness". The Chunin Exam focused on describing the "Konoha special abilities" such as Uzumaki, Uchiha, Hinata, etc. In the Demon Country. It directly made the Konoha contestants feel huge doubts and had doubts in their hearts. Isn't it cool? In addition, how come Konoha still treats Sasuke the same as in the original work when the presence of the Demon Country is overwhelming? This will be countered by a little contact. If it is reasonable, you should lie. Isn't it more reasonable to first distort the facts and reveal the truth to Sasuke, so that Sasuke will not trust the country of ghosts? Then it became clear that Sasuke defected later. Since he and Konoha were going to fight sooner or later, why not kill Shikamaru instead of killing his companions? This could have been a conclusion reached after calm thinking. Could it be that the person who killed Konoha must have fallen into darkness? Then Kakashi sent Sasuke to Orochimaru again. Asura left, Naruto suddenly had an idea and picked up the ANBU file to read it to find out the truth. He was in great pain and struggled in his heart. In sympathy, Sasuke directly went to the village senior management to explain to him. Wouldn't it be nice? You have to be stupid. I was fooled by Shikamaru's few words. I don't think this is a hypocritical and penetrating portrayal of the Will of Fire. This is just too timid about originality and a bit lazy.      There were many foreshadowings in the early stage but there were no major explosions or changes in the climax plot. In the end, it relied on the original plot. The dull knife abrasive consumes too much enthusiasm of the readers who are following the story. 4. The plot is too scattered and too procrastinating Because every time the plot is exciting, it is exciting but not enough, it is not completely exciting, and then it is not completely enjoyable. And because it's not satisfying, my tolerance for the foreshadowing chapters will decrease, and I feel like it's watering down. (This is really an old problem since the author's last book.) It should have completely deviated from the original work at a plot point and caused a big explosion, but it didn't, so it is nondescript until now. As a fan work, it does not take advantage of the convenience and advantages of fan works. Finally, I write this in the hope that the author can continue writing, so if the water chapter can make money, I will admit it, but I hope that in the future, water will return to water, and the foreshadowing will return to foreshadowing, and it will be more satisfying when the plot explodes. I should also be able to follow up on new ones.    ，，， If you don't agree with what I said, please don't scold me first. If you can, question me first. If I can't answer, scold me again.

The book is finished. To be honest, I have read it all, and my overall rating is 4. First of all, the whole book has a very good start. Whether it is a modern person with normal outlook coming to a complete closed concentration camp, successfully hiding and developing his own power in it, and finally successfully defecting and starting over again, the story is well described. Especially the portrayal of White Fang, it was the first time I saw someone portray White Fang as an idealist. This story has a score of at least 8+. Then the whole book started to turn into group portraits. The three protagonists disappeared directly, and the perspective changed to the children of the protagonists. I admit it, times are still changing. Then the style of the group portraits changed directly to strong branches and weak trunks, the children of the protagonist group also disappeared, the perspective changed to Ming Zuo, and even Ming Zuo became the absolute protagonist in the second half. In the ending part, Ming Zuo was directly indispensable, and the strength of the protagonist group changed from unpredictable to oh, that's it. It's just a few chapters. In the end, the Six Paths came out and turned into clowns, the protagonist turned into clowns, and Naruto turned into clowns. What masterpiece are you planning to write? What did you write starting from the Chunin Exams? Except for Yi Ji, what use are the other children of the protagonist group that you have prepared? What's the use of Shikamaru Kaaya and others who have written so much about their female teammates? Naruto holding Tomamaru's power bank and the Nine-Tailed Senjutsu equals invincibility, right? So the ending is just to tell Naruto that the times are advancing so vastly that no one can stop it, right? The protagonist's position has also changed from a chakra researcher to a soul-sucking monster? It's much funnier than Naruzuo charging up the Six Paths and then coming out to save the world. You really have something to write like this. I don't plan to read your new book. You can do whatever you want.

For those who want to see the protagonist kill randomly. Seeing the wind and fire cutting off territory and losing money. That's about it. Don't read anymore, wait until it's over! As for why! The water starts to flow from behind! I can write dozens of plots and I can't even finish one thing! There are dozens of plots that can directly improve the characters! If this is selling pork! All I can say is that ten pounds of pork and nine pounds of water! Even more exaggerated than this! Here's to an unjust man who paid his way to the deacon! Also, this author doesn't even read the comment section! You read that right! Don't look at it at all! You must take three days off in a month! If you really want to watch it, save it! Judging from the plot I've seen before... Even if it's written during the New Year, it won't be finished! This is also one of the reasons why I removed it from the shelves!

In terms of setting: Part of it is not particularly reasonable. Let's assume that the protagonist has used a plug-in. Judging from the time span, the protagonist has spent several years to figure out the natural energy to this extent (such as clones, human immortal mode), the efficiency is a bit high, but it is also reasonable. First of all, we need a control group - Uncle Snake. First of all, what Uncle Snake studies is different from the direction of the protagonist's research. Uncle Snake studies natural energy. What has he come up with after so many years of research? Just a curse seal? But is curse seal garbage? If the main story is a bunch of monsters with beautiful lenses, then Boruto is a bunch of monsters with tattoos. It can be said that the curse seal is a road to the sky officially given by Naruto. In Boruto, the black tattoo is called a wedge, which can be considered a kind of curse seal. In my eyes, it is an enhanced version of the curse seal developed by Uncle Snake. Even the wedge can absorb chakra (look at what a waste Naruto is in Boruto). And with the help of the curse seal, Uncle Snake also developed the forbidden technique of immortality and reincarnation. Is this against heaven? Of course, it is against the sky, and the reincarnation eye is a natural skill of infinite reincarnation (personal imagination), so looking at the protagonist, I think it is okay, not too outrageous. It is more reasonable to be able to do this when there is no shortage of funds (Uncle Snake does not have a rich woman), so the protagonist's ability setting is reasonable. Let's talk about the caged bird. Judging from many details of the original Naruto work (for example, who is reincarnated from the dirty soil in the plot, there is still a caged bird on the forehead). Therefore, death cannot eliminate the caged bird. This thing is too vicious and should be engraved on the soul. Yes, the method given in the original text is to replace chakra with natural energy and escape by feigning death. It feels quite unreasonable. After all, the caged bird itself is not clear, but the author at least gave his own explanation, which is reasonable in the setting created by the author. To summarize, the basic logic of the two settings is self-consistent. There are not many conflicts with the original settings, but there are some, so I won't be picky here. Characters and plot: The protagonist and the two heroines seem to be original characters. Liuli's identity and background are reasonable. The label of rich woman is acceptable. After all, she is a businessman and not an official. It is reasonable to have money. As for the original work, whether all the Uchihas were killed in the night of genocide, I really don't understand. Are there no Uchihas outside? Is it all in the village? Aren't there a few living Uchihas in Boruto? So this is a blind spot in the original setting. There will always be people outside Uchiha, which is reasonable. As for the others, first of all, the top management of Konoha is indeed like that in my eyes. There is no difference between them. The pot king and the third generation all fit the personality and are okay. The relationship between the protagonist and other characters was handled well, and Liuli's success in taking over also made me frustrated. It was handled well, and the emotional line went smoothly without too much twists and turns. I like it after all. I personally hate the bloody plots of female videos, and I also reject the frustrating plots. If it is the parting between dragon and tiger, I still like it very much. The handling of the youthful pig-headed boy is also okay. If the emotional line is like the latest season of Big Teacher, forget it. All in all, if the author can't write the addictive emotional line as shown in the best servant, it is appropriate to write it smoothly, just keep it like this, and don't do anything about life, separation, or death. It's hard to resist. After all, this is not a sad story about hair swords. As we all know, the old Jiangnan criminal's old age is what he looked like after his hair swords were too outrageous. Finally, I want to mention Kakashi. I originally thought that Kakashi would grow a lot, and there would be many differences from the original work. After all, the author handled the Death of White Fang the best I have ever seen. However, after spending so much ink, the feeling is just like that, and it is not satisfactory at the moment. And the plot feels a bit delayed. As far as the latest chapter is concerned, the relationship between Liuli and her family always has a sense of constant frustration. Even Ling Yin has to make a choice. I don't want Liuli to choose the former between her family (excluding the father and daughter in the Kingdom of Ghosts) and the protagonist, and I don't want Liuli to be forced to make a choice by her family. She will rebel when she should, and withdraw when she should. Because of that, I think Obito should still turn black. Why doesn't he turn black and become Ruri? What is the relationship between the Uchiha in Konoha and the Uchiha in the Demon Kingdom? Right, it will be troublesome if Liuli doesn't get out of it, and I have a feeling that the plot will be very bad after that, because Liuli is an original character, and has had an in-depth relationship with the protagonist, so there is no need to get stuck in it. I really hope that Liuli will follow the protagonist. To be clear, if Liuli doesn't leave, the protagonist has rebelled, wouldn't Tuan Zang use this as an excuse to disgust people? Anyway, not many people in the family know the whereabouts of Liuli's parents, and there are no Liuli's father-in-law and mother-in-law in the family (they must be dead). They have nothing to worry about, so why don't you leave (ಥ㉨ಥ) . As for whether Madara will attack Ruri, don't be ridiculous. He is an old man who wants to die. He is capable of doing anything. Ruri is fully developed and he has a husband. When his husband rebels, he will definitely show his strength. You can say that Bai Jue can beat the protagonist and blackmail Ruri. Madara Many plans were prepared to blackmail Obito, and he took advantage of Lin's concern for the village and died in front of Obito. Let's see if the protagonist dies in front of Ruri. Without this grief, how could there be the Eye of the Moon plan? I saw a lot of readers in the comments saying that Madara chose Ruri. Why did he choose Ruri? Is Ruri easy to fool? Don't mess with me like this: Liuli knew the secret of Kaleidoscope, alienated the protagonist, chose his family, and then was blackmailed by No Ban for various reasons. Balabala, are you willing to read it like this? Anyway, I don't want to. The above chapters end with the kaleidoscope chapter. I wrote for more than half an hour in the end. I hope the management will be more refined, and I also hope that readers and friends can interact more. After all, they are written for everyone to read. You can criticize or agree with me.

Already read, Pure Poisonous Weed, no matter how good it is in the front, it will be bad in the back. From the early to mid-term, it suppresses the protagonist's combat power and opens up the halo of wisdom. In the final battle, Kai was first beaten three times, and then Naruto was beaten three times. The protagonist is written as a supporting character, and Naruto is written as the protagonist. By the end of the fight, Naruto is almost full of health and status, and the three protagonists are half dead. If you want to see the main character, don't go in. It's going to be suffocating. Naruto cooks casually.

I patiently saw the road to rise and gave up on the businessman in Chapter 107. Some of the author's ideas are quite good, and many of the plots are well rounded. But the biggest feature of writing this kind of revolutionary flow in the ninja world is the pattern. The author has grasped the general direction, but many details feel like superfluous and artificial. Just like a tree, the trunk is very strong, but the branches and leaves are diseased. There are too many little bits and pieces in it, such as the younger son's transvestism (this is an insult to young children, right?), The improvement of the kunai launcher (why write it in so much detail? It would be much better if the readers don't write it in so much detail), and the eldest daughter's fighting in the underground ring (come on, after the ring, isn't she just a plaything in the eyes of others? It's outrageous to lower one's status to this level). When writing this review, I thought of these three most impressive places. I watched it for three days and found this place. I thought it was a little treasure, but the more I looked at it, the more disappointed I became. The author has great ambitions, but unfortunately he is limited by his writing skills. The writing is neither good nor bad, so let's go high and low.

I have never seen such a watery Naruto fanfic. And the protagonist basically doesn't appear as a backdrop. The plot is also mediocre, and there is no motivation to stay up late reading. There are also some places where the writing is inexplicable. I spent so much time writing about Asami's sincerity, writing about the country of waves, and describing the supporting roles. They are really good at it. How does it help the plot? Didn't Namikaze Minato enter the stomach of the god of death, and what was left was only a little chakra, so he directly turned on the battle against the sky mode. Minato taught his son step by step. In the beginning, there was no grandfather, but there was a father. . . Uzumaki Xiao Yan is awesome!

How would you rate this book? Probably. Let me read it again, a degraded version of the original work.

My opinion is that you can bite the lighter if you are not alive. You are too lazy to ask for leave and I will put up with it. I can understand that you are lazy and you really have no creative inspiration recently, so I will put up with it. What kind of bullshit is this latest chapter about? You don't have to write if you don't want to, and don't torture each other here. I can't hold it in, well, what I hold in smells like 💩, looks like 💩, he is just a piece of 💩

I think the book is very good, not to mention the many bugs that have been fixed. Many characters are much better than the original work in terms of shaping. Whether it is the third generation, Danzo, or the Uchiha quartet, they are all very three-dimensional. It supplements some of the brainless parts of the original work as a hot-blooded comic, making the entire Naruto world more hard-core. After all, this is a real world, and those in high positions cannot make choices based solely on loyalty or personal identity like in the comics. I think the author has done a very good job in perfecting the world of Naruto. When I first started reading, this was not reflected because of the single perspective. As the plot progressed, I did feel the vastness of the Naruto world. However, the current perspective changes too frequently, which although does not affect the development of the plot, has a certain impact on the reader's reading experience. At the beginning of the book, there was only one perspective of the protagonist, which was inevitably a bit monotonous. Later, as the number of characters increased, the perspectives became richer and the plot became more exciting. In particular, the section that impressed me was "The Uchiha Quartet crazily forced Ruri to kill the protagonist at first, and used the Awakening Kaleidoscope to lead the tribe to glory. After being violently discovered by the protagonist group, they secretly helped Ruri. Finally, the perspective changed, and it was revealed that the old man had seen everything through the scriptures for many years, so Put aside your paranoia and hedge your bets, seemingly forcing Ruri, but actually preserving the fire for the Uchiha clan." It really fits the image of a radical old man who sees the truth about Konoha, has no choice but to compromise with Konoha, and secretly tries his best to preserve hope for the clan. The image of a respected and thoughtful elder. Cunning but not cunning, unscrupulous but very focused on the bottom line. But although the plot development is not a big problem now, the perspective changes are too frequent. Many times, when the plot development of a protagonist group is about to reach its climax, it comes to a halt. Generally speaking, it should stop after the climax. I hope this problem will be improved in future content. Another one is that although the author has made bold innovations in many places, I feel that it is not bold enough, and there are more or less traces of deliberately trying to resemble the plot of the original work. This is a fanfic, so there is nothing you can do to keep it close to the original work, otherwise the subsequent plot development and combat settings will be very troublesome. After all, most people are relatively familiar with the original plot and characters. If there were drastic magic changes, many people would probably have objections. But I think that is when there are loopholes in the plot, that is, the writing is not strong enough, and it is easy for chaos and magic to cause problems. Now it seems that the author's writing power is completely sufficient, and he can be bolder in this regard. After all, everyone still hopes to see a different Naruto world. In general, the book is very good, the world view is also very complete, and the reasonable party is ecstatic. There are also shortcomings, but even a top author will have problems, let alone the author of this book? Moreover, I personally think that if it were not for the restriction of the subject matter (there are too many fan restrictions, and there are few readers who are interested in Naruto), the author's writing skills would be considered one of the top authors of Qidian.

It is rare to find new ideas in Naruto fan fiction. The writing and plot are all good-looking. It is a bit private, but it is within the normal category. The discussion on the system is a bit superficial, and it is more of a cool novel. Overall, it is worth reading.

Supplementary background of the three holy places: They were originally the greatest mystery in the ninja world, because they exclusively enjoyed the secret of the natural energy of the ninja world, which is the basis of immortality. Unexpectedly, the arrival of Otsutsuki broke their silence. Otsutsuki will rob the planet of its vitality (natural energy), which they cannot tolerate, because nature has given them wisdom and immortality, and losing nature will undoubtedly turn them into beasts again. But their understanding of nature all lies in the direction of immortality, resurrection, and prediction, because in the past, the ninja world only needed the characteristics of senjutsu, but Kaguya's power made them despair. Coincidentally, for some reason, Kaguya suddenly started to create White Zetsu crazily. The Holy Land did not know the reason, but it was enough, because the source of White Zetsu's materials alone was enough to cause antagonism between his son and Kaguya. The three holy places want to defeat Kaguya all the time, so it is inevitable to know yourself and the enemy. The births of Hamura and Hagoromo could not be hidden from the perception of the three holy places. Through the perception and prediction of the immortals, they realized that the children of destiny had arrived. Hagoromo and Hamura are as kind, just, and gentle as they expected, and their opposition to their mother Kaguya is natural. Although Hagoromo and Hamura have possessed tremendous power since birth, it is not enough to compete with Kaguya, so the three holy places sent Gamamaru to guide them and teach them the foundation of the holy places, senjutsu. Just like destiny, Hagoromo awakened the reincarnation eye, and Hamura awakened the reincarnation eye (explanation at the end). The two brothers worked together to seal Kaguya, and peace was restored to the ninja world. Later, Hagoromo founded the Ninja Sect and spread chakra, but the Holy Land did not care. It was enough as long as nature was not plundered and was still in their hands. Until a thousand years later, a new natural crisis came, and a new child of prophecy was born... Explanation of Hamura's reincarnation eye: I personally believe that the births, bloodlines and power levels of Hagoromo and Hamura are equal, and they are the unity of the immortal body and eyes. Kaguya should not be as partial as the Six Paths to the Kyuubi. Liu Dao's own sons are also equal in terms of power and nature. They only have one body and one eye, but they are all at the level of immortals, but they are partial to the inheritance of the ninja sect. So I'll just assume it's here, it's just not depicted in the anime and manga. After all, the plot is about two brothers working together for a few months to seal their mother. Two against one, it's hard to explain why Hamura doesn't have fairy eyes. Moreover, the plot of Izanagi and Izanami has so many kaleidoscopes, which is funny. In fact, the basis for the activation of these two techniques is not kaleidoscope. Three magatama is enough, but the animation draws so many kaleidoscopes

Indra is right. The Ninja sect's method of maintaining world order through love and bonding simply won't work. Even if peace is achieved, it will be destroyed by Otsutsuki due to lack of strength.

As a reader of 15 years, I don't understand why people are so impetuous nowadays. I really want to read this novel. Maybe the fans are all young people, just for the sake of being cool and brainless. Everyone who has read Naruto knows that Naruto levels up so fast? The entire worldview is based on bloodline theory, and many things cannot be changed by one person. Of course, the author was a little sloppy in the later period. His biggest problem is that no one reads the book to be obscene, and the ending is satisfying for some people, and it is realistic. In fact, you can find out what kind of ending the protagonist wants to write when the Sage of Six Paths intervenes in the later stage. To be honest, this novel is really suitable for those who know the plot of Naruto and rarely read fan fiction. An old bookworm who hasn't finished watching the anime. You're right. . I recommend it to many friends who are not good at reading, and they all say that the writing style is much better than many writing styles of the same type. It's a pity that he is not popular among fans, a young group of fans, and writing realistic endings is not popular, and he has committed a taboo. Alas, I hope the author is writing a new book. Don't care what others say, time will tell.

Overall, this book is really well written. This book about Naruto is really well written. The author made it clear from the beginning that he was not going to travel through time after watching Naruto, except for the Chunin Exam who felt that the length was too long. Other things that need to be explained and written are all things that should be explained at the level of an ordinary time traveler. The places that need to be explained are also written with very clear ideas. I think the dialogues that should be included are all for the purpose of fleshing out the story, and are not written for the sake of word count at all. The feeling of Tai Shui is completely due to the feeling of superiority that I feel after watching Naruto. These necessary conversations are for readers who have not watched Naruto to better experience the world view created by the author for them. For those of you who have read Naruto, please don't put your own sense of superiority on this book. You will think that this book is really great.

I have read some of them now, but after reading them for more than 20 chapters, I feel like I am watching the memories of Naruto animation. There is no change at all. There is obviously a protagonist in the front, but the plot of Naruto still develops like that. Is it because the author dare not change the plot? There is no progress in the plot. I would rather see how to build the Kingdom of Ghosts and how to change the world than to watch the plot that Naruto has seen at the starting point. Let's take a break and check out the update to the next volume.

The protagonist takes a scientific research direction, and there are no cheats or spoilers. This angle is still very good. The first and most admirable thing about this book is that the three views are very correct. The other point is that there is no spoiler-free scientific research. I am very curious about how he will go on. There are also scientific research articles on Naruto, but they all involve spoilers to proceed smoothly. There are no spoilers to explore directly. I am very curious about the direction of the plot next.

It completely breaks away from the Naruto fan fiction of "unifying the ninja world and becoming Hokage". Chiba Shiraishi's idea from the beginning was not to fight for a village or a country, but to go directly to "ruling the world" - with modern scientific thinking, he wanted to fundamentally end the never-ending divisions and wars in the ninja world. There is also talk. Naruto's talk of "for the village, for his companions" looks passionate, but it is actually fake because it cannot solve the real structural problems. But Chiba Shiraishi's words are true and politician-like - for the people of the world and the revolution. Just like no Chinese would refuse to call you "little comrade" when Grandpa Mao calls you, because behind it is a sense of equality and the pursuit of common ideals. Those who can read this meaning are definitely not children obsessed with personal heroism, but adults and people who really think about history.

When I first read this book, the author's ideas were quite good. Finally, someone did not just copy the plot of the original book and complete the tasks, which is worthy of recognition. The protagonist's idea is also very good and he has become stronger. It is worth approving to leave this hellish place of Konoha👍

To say that the writing is not good does not mean that there is a problem with your expansion of the system. You said that your expansion is slow, but I am still following it now. The problem is that you write three chapters for a battle that can be covered in one chapter, and take two days off by the way. When you talk about writing about other people, you should also intersperse it with what new discoveries and developments the protagonist has made recently, instead of just describing other people. If we don't write about the protagonist's development, how he becomes stronger, and then suddenly commits a cheat at the end, then there's no difference from the cheat in the original work. The system expansion is very good. The description of the miko system is quite good, but it seems to be only good and not amazing. And shouldn't the old perverts be more excited when they see the seduction? The monster behaves like an innocent little virgin. The protagonist actually got a nosebleed after watching it like the third generation. There are people from the protagonist group next to him. Have you never seen the protagonist? All in all, it still needs to reflect what the protagonist is doing recently and what the strategic plan is. It can be less but it must be there. Otherwise, if the protagonist has not been seen for a long time and just sits on the stage and watches, it is better not to show up. In addition, the author said that warriors and monks can be written, but please don't write too weirdly. You can't be like this witch system, where you look awesome and end up going high and going low. I hope the author can work hard and not mess it up. Is it true that you asked for leave because you didn't have enough time for gaming activities, and then you went to do some activities, but after finishing it, you found that it was too late and you didn't write anything? You didn't know how to write a leave request, so you just wrote it half-heartedly?

First of all, it is a good book to set the tone. The controversial author is not failing to do a good job in quality control, but failing to do a good job in product positioning, resulting in structural imbalance. Online literary works have now generally fallen into the trap of chasing memes and re-reading them, and this is especially true for fan fiction. It is nothing more than changing the golden finger, just like a meat pigeon game with a different start. The homogenization is serious. When the popularity of the memes is over, it will naturally fade away like morning dew, without any sound. Any settings of "writing", "dark and dark" and "cute" can only delay this process, but their fate has been decided long ago and will not change. Every era has its own art form that responds to that era. I think the author is belittling himself and worrying about gains and losses. Why is this novel so popular? The author did not realize that the core charm of the work comes from the deconstruction and retelling of the naive political views and worldview of the original work. The fundamental difference between the protagonist's way of looking at things and the characters in the original work is his biggest "golden finger" and the most attractive part of the work, rather than dazzling art, formulaic girls, and inexplicable new CPs, which have been appreciated enough in other works. But this is still a good work. The imbalance is temporary and can be adjusted through techniques. For example, the problem at the end of the much-criticized volume is that it completely deviates from the main plot, so why can't this issue be narrated entirely from the perspective of a spy? Don't let him get too far away from the protagonist, even if the protagonist is not involved. Like the princess guards in this volume, they are too deliberate. Author, you are building a big era, and they are destined to be just small characters. Have you confirmed that these two characters can be used after the Bear Kingdom? This is not unlimited streaming. Or maybe let the princess have "character growth", like in the movie. All conflicts originate from the conflict of world views. Even if the Ninja World War is fought four times, it is just like one battle. It is an unfinished war. It will start a great war to transform the world. Let the awakened people transform the world!

The plot direction and writing style are very good, and the pacing is well controlled. It is at the forefront of fan fiction. If you really want to read, you can still read it. Unfortunately, there are as many disadvantages as there are advantages. The fragmentation of the protagonist's character in the middle and later stages, the lack of clarity in establishing a new order, the forced balance due to the collapse of combat power in the later stages, and the author's excessive inflating all caused a large number of readers to run away in the later stages. Of course, it doesn't matter if you read without thinking. Why did the author write this? I never understood it. This book could have been released safely, but now it has made everyone above the deacon complain. In this way, the author not only lost a third-level novel, but also lost a group of real money-spending readers brought by this novel. Why bother?

This is the first time I have seen that a fan of Naruto can write more than 5 million words, which is amazing, and it only covers the four battles of the original work, which is a bit outrageous.

Write a review. This book is just like the Naruto work itself. It is very interesting and attractive in the early stage, but becomes boring after the second generation appears. At the end, the final chapter, which is obviously the climax, is extremely outrageous. Not to mention the complete collapse of combat power, what first attracted me was the protagonist's doubts about the spirit of Konoha in the introduction. However, there was no good description of the protagonist's thoughts or the recognition of his thoughts by others. So now Shiraishi is a terrorist, treacherous and insidious image in the eyes of everyone except the first generation. It is obvious that the focus is on industrial points, and there are obviously some stories about the uprising of the Kingdom of Waves that will be written in the front, but at the end, they are all discarded. Only a few descriptions of the power of modern weapons remain. These have been updated intermittently until now. As for Shiraishi's description, if you don't look at it separately from the previous chapters, he is really a proper villain. I also don't know what kind of emotional reversal the author had towards the protagonist after writing a book with millions of words. The combat power of the younger generation began to collapse in the middle period. Actually, there's not much else to say. It seemed that it was supposed to end in April? During the period, it almost disappeared and ended. Now it is updated once a week, and each update is destroying the psychological limits of the remaining readers. I'm still renewing my subscription, and I just want to know what big job you can do in the end? Don't tell me that you want the whole Lelouch-like reversal, the current one is disgusting.

. . Is it over? . . Where is the water? .

The biggest highlight of this book is that there are many repeated chapter names, well, A book has 900 chapters, and Asking for Leave has 100 chapters, a total of exactly 1,000 chapters 🙂

It's well written. I really like this fan fiction. The subject matter is relatively new and not cliché. Why hasn't it been updated in the past two days? Don't you say anything?

This is my first time to stay in the book club I have read more than ten Naruto fan books over the years, and this one should be ranked in the top 3 in my mind! The logic in the early and mid-term is rigorous, opening up the world of Naruto with a different world view, but it is a little weak in the later period. I feel that the author is not very good at describing battle scenes, as well as controlling the progress and the strength of the struggle between the good and the bad. The writing method of opening the multi-line battlefield It should be the reality of the war in the ninja world. Shiraishi who likes science and self-realization Likes Ruri Lingyin who follows life and death Likes the clones who are born based on steel chains Likes the sobriety and wisdom after the revenge of the great revenge Kakashi Like the naturally extraordinary Ichiki and the honest Aya who wears women's clothes Like the inexplicable contract of Pure Land (?) Naruto is still a work that can awaken the blood in the heart, a world with infinite possibilities. I hope the author will have better books next. Thank you 😊 {"TopicId":"588846986766188544","TopicName":"Naruto"}

After reading the first hundred chapters, to be honest, there are a lot of poisonous points. I only saw the author introducing the ninja world and saying that Kirigakure Village is the land of blood mist. But Obito hasn't turned black yet. Just give it up. To briefly describe the setting here, the harem is pornographic, and the setting is a fusion of the movie version and Boruto into Shippuden. It's a mess anyway. You can watch it before the Third Ninja War, but I'm too lazy to watch it afterward because there are too many poisonous points and I can't stand it.

I strongly recommend the author to learn from the second generation of Yuren. As long as you write, I will order everything.