Uchiha Akaishi Tour

A good book is a good book, but it always likes to be described repeatedly in inexplicable details. It's a good thing that you like to write about details. If it's too long and you can't stand it, it's another matter. Don't be like the big rivers and lakes before, losing enthusiasm halfway through the plot and ending hastily. It's pure fraud. If you could really tell a complete story, I would be willing to pay for it, but it's a pity that you have a criminal record and you are wasting readers' enthusiasm in vain. (In addition, you can elaborate on the general plot of the short play. You have written a chapter and a half without any structure at all. You just read the dialogue) Finally, it is so boring, can't you add more? You earn more money, and I spend two more minutes to entertain myself. Isn't writing for an experienced writer like you as easy as breathing? Or does it take you a day to come up with a plot like Shen Yu Ninja Village?

But I think it's very sacred

This book has an indigenous protagonist, so if you don't like it, you can avoid it. But they are said to be natives, but they think like the Japanese devils, and they are two-faced.

The old author has a new vest. The character creation and plot are more than 90% of Naruto fanfics, especially the novels. The protagonist Goldfinger is rewarded by watching a bloody short drama and it stimulates emotions and eye-openers. The writing is still very interesting. What may dissuade some readers is that the author has some extensions and second stories, and this book is probably a single world of Naruto, not a fast-paced 200-chapter super movie-level one. The average protagonist level is 150 chapters. First rating, it uses Kaleidoscope + Five Release Combination Ninjutsu + Self-study Wood Release, and it is expected that there will be Sage Mode Blood Stain Snare and the like In addition, except for the two daily chapters, which are short and weak, the pace is actually okay, and it does not stress the combat power and water. It would be much better if there were more chapters. Overall, this is a very good source of information, suitable for those who like to read fanfiction about Naruto and have no interest in the site's indiscriminate writing.

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Author, why are all your novels written in words? It makes me so tired 😭

The earth began to rotate vertically, and our equator changed drastically!

It still feels very consistent

Brothers, I am also obsessed with the third dimension😭 The elders in the family started to play Douyin dramas outside the dinner table. The actors' dubbing is fake, the atmospheric sound effects are more oily than braised bamboo shoots, and all kinds of bosses, young ladies, parents and children's dramas make me dizzy.

This novel is full of words. How do you read it?

If you have a suitable Ishi, you can make suggestions here. If it is a female-led drama, it is best to easily change it to a gender-changing version. Otherwise, it would be too exciting for Akaishi to directly immerse himself in the female protagonist.

The author must suppress his fighting ability. If you write about Naruto without suppressing his fighting ability, what will everyone watch and eat, and there will be three or four battles in the future? You have to hold it down, don't get too excited, you're just a little too high in front of you. Who is the Third Kazekage? How could the protagonist defeat him? How could he run away? That is the strongest Kazekage in history. Even if you add Sage Mode, Kaleidoscope, two blood stains, and Susanoo, you still can't beat him. It's just a matter of time to beat the Mizukage. By the way, Akaashi won't fight with Itachi again, right? Itachi has these two artifacts, so he has to educate Akaishi hard and let Akaishi know that this is not his era.

The latest explanation is that Mizukage used to be very strong, and we don't know if he has the level of a strong shadow. Anyway, after getting old, he is now on par with Akaashi, who was designated by the author as a weak shadow. Haha 😓 Humorous Yongjidong Sage Mode, it seems that the stronger one is not Yongjidong Sage Mode, but Yakushi Kabuto

Water is just water, why is it so poisonous even though it's already 1 million words long? I've been reading it for so many days. The author spent so much time describing the training and cheating. As a result, Susan was turned on just to get whipped into a spinning top. There are also two kaleidoscopes. Guess what they do? The function is to avoid it in advance if you get whipped too hard when using Susano! Throwing a kunai is better than so many plug-ins, and the inorganic reincarnation and blood-stained swamp escape control the swamp. When the water shadow falls, he insists on not killing him and fooling him. The subsequent plot is completely unable to withstand scrutiny, and it just makes it look funny. It's really stupid. In fact, I am a mildly reasonable person who really wants to give up after seeing such a poisonous point. But the character of the main character still has a whole life and attracts me, and there are no other books to read. So, should I continue Chi? I'm not so angry at first, so I might give up the book. But when I think about the lack of books, if I don't have the guts to turn around and continue Chi, I will be even more angry!

Can you consider the feelings of players who listen to books Always Akaashi Akaashi😒😒😒

I was really scared when I saw Kato Dan come out. I think the author had to have a plot to save Kato Dan in this way. Do you respect the original CP so much? If the protagonist saves Kato and lives happily with Tsunade, I will really run away 😐

In order to fall in love (introducing light), without any regard for logic, a million-strong army general was hastily committed suicide (being chased by three maggots)

Now he looks neither strong nor handsome. With his swampy dung soup and immortal mode with a long snake behind his butt, he looks like a maggot in a fight.

I hope it doesn't have a heroine. If you write it purely as a piece of entertainment, I think it would be best if you don't have a heroine. It would be difficult to write if the heroine has emotional sustenance, and it would make some places less immersive. Just like that kind of funny and nonsensical skit that suddenly becomes sensational, the most important thing is that the important female characters in this time period of the original work seem to have feelings for Guan Du. If you spend a lot of time to re-establish the relationship, your main plot will be wrong. The original female protagonist is even more poisonous in fan fiction.

1. Sage Mode I actually don't have any objections to the appearance of Sage Mode at the beginning. After all, the author likes to use the trick of changing words with homonyms. At first, he looks ugly, but he can get back to it with practice. Another thing is that people in the ninja world are all weird-looking. After all, reading novels is not animation, so it's okay. But the Immortal Mode is about being reckless and hastily passed the test of life and death in the Immortal Mode. It doesn't have the feeling of learning the Immortal Mode seriously. Normally, you will have to fight in the future. Take ten days and a half to come over and learn the Immortal Mode. Why are you so awesome? Is your surname Otsutsuki? Do you know you are the protagonist? I feel like this plot design is careless. The protagonist can miss the war because he is learning the Sage Mode, but I feel that he cannot end the Sage Mode hastily just to start the war. The Sage Mode is so easy to learn, so what is Jiraiya Sage? Moreover, the compatibility between Orochimaru and the Sage mode was very poor. Orochimaru also learned the celestial arts so quickly and gave up his cautious character because the war was approaching. In fact, the original character was a bit broken at the beginning of this episode. As for the follow-up of Longdi Cave, including the fight between Xin Ya and Akaishi, it was also criticized by many book friends. In fact, it is completely understandable. It is because the author did not use his brain and did not write the Longdi Cave clearly and perfectly. It felt like it was rushed. You can describe it in detail in the book, saying that time in the book passes very slowly, explain things clearly, you are so realistic that one day passes in the book for 10 fucking days, why are you writing a book, you can't finish the outline 2. Mizukage Chapter This paragraph is the beginning of a complete collapse of combat power, and it is also the breaking point where book friends have endured it for so long and finally can't hold it anymore A third-generation Mizukage is old and frail, and the protagonist is Susana in the second stage. I have double kaleidoscopes in hand again, and I have fairy mode plus inorganic reincarnation plus marsh escape. The result is barely a tie, and I was scolded Personally, I think it is because the author was too anxious and too eager to write a plot thoroughly, so that everyone can recognize the protagonist and improve the protagonist's combat power 3. Loulan chapter After the previous two chapters, I was scolded. The author really made a big plan It was said to be a big suspense and a foreshadowing, but in the end, it ended in chapter 19. What did we get besides the turds of Chapter 19? The most uncomfortable classic, two groups of people guessing charades without any plot logic and reason, and a very disappointing future plot direction, as well as the hasty death of Minato, Akaashi's blindness, etc. It is true that the author is very awkward when writing battles, but the importance of this paragraph is a key node for you to prove yourself. The writing is so crotch-stretching. . Especially the fight between Hikaru and Akaashi, it feels like it's completely turn-based like Yu-Gi-Oh!, And it doesn't reflect any of Hikari's strength. Akaashi's future strength is also pretty good, and it doesn't make sense from the plot: Why can Akaashi, who doesn't have an immersion system, have the Samsara Eye and the Kaleidoscope, and get to know Hikaru? You can explain it if it doesn't make sense, but you can't just say nothing and just acquiesce. Who can agree with you 🙂 4. Summary To put it simply, in the early stage of this book, it was characterized by fairy grass-level literary drama, high emotional intelligence Akaashi's speech, and tournament-level Uchiha speech, which attracted me very much. , I think it's very beautiful But I don't know why the author is so anxious in the middle of the book. Whether it's the plot or the characters' behavior and words and deeds in the book, there is a very urgent feeling. The polishing is not in place and the mid-term update is too slow. For a long time, it is 12:11, and then 1, 2 or 3 o'clock. Clicking on a chapter, the reader's reading experience is very poor. While the author didn't take it seriously, the reader's resentment became more and more intense until it exploded and became a big problem. Now he is afraid Now the author is restrained in writing. He is afraid of being criticized for anything he writes. I think it's not too late to revise the last few chapters to get back from the lost path. There are many things to write about in the parallel space, including the protagonist's emotional intelligence speech and making up for the regrets in the Naruto world. These are the points that readers love to read. If the Loulan chapter ends so hastily, it really feels like the book will basically be ruined.

It is recommended that the author stop updating for a few days and rewrite the updates of these two days. Do you want to take a look at what you are writing? If you want to draw out the light, you have to turn Akaishi into a clown, right? The super shadow configuration is chased and killed by several weak shadows and elite jounin, which is comparable to Nagato being directly killed by Jiraiya in the Land of Rain.

RT: Let me stop subscribing for a month.

You must suppress your combat power. Although some people think that your combat power is low, you can rest assured that if you really increase your combat power to the sixth level, then this book will be finished, unless you start traveling through the heavens.

Report to the headquarters: You can watch it! The protagonist has a normal IQ and is a human being. He is not a robot or a simple label. The heroine doesn't like it very much, but there are changes later on. She's not pretentious, and she doesn't feel like she has to be given over because she's a woman. The author should have written the heroine as if she were a man. I like female characters like this. The protagonist's growth curve is not exaggerated, and his combat power will not suddenly soar to the point where he punches Madara Uchiha and kicks Hashirama Senju. Step-by-step, growth-oriented, but not exaggerated. I haven't seen any signs of collapse so far. Of course, I still have more than forty chapters to read.

In the early and mid-term, I could barely make enough food, in the mid-term, I started to suppress the combat power, by the Vulpix capture mission, my combat power collapsed, near perfect sage mode, three magatama muscle Susanas with no side effects, always equipped with two future-seeing Sharingan eyes, and The Yinba Gate is opened to the third gate, it comes with the Water and Earth Marsh Escape Blood Successor, and combined with the Inorganic Reincarnation, this configuration is not said to be more expressive than the next door Avatar Earth Sect, but it has no problem in fighting Madara in the fourth battle, it can actually be chased by Ebizo and Chiyo. . . . . It's really outrageous.

Why is everyone now saying that the protagonist Akaashi has many cheats and seems to have high values, but he just can't achieve results and feels like a loser? I think I have something to say. The author likes to write about settings when he is writing articles. As a result, more than 2,000 of the 6,000 words a day are filled in to make up for settings. At the same time, he also likes to talk repeatedly about Che Lulu, which leads to a lot of necessary things that he has not written out. Such as laying out mats. I suddenly discovered that when writing a novel about combat, laying the groundwork is really an important step. You have to lay the groundwork for the opponent that the protagonist wants to defeat, in order to highlight the strength of the protagonist. Just like an excellent example in the original work, the third generation of Rai was exposed during the Fourth Ninja War. At that time, the popular ninjas were already laying the groundwork for him. He was killed by 10,000 ninjas. In addition, he had beaten the 8-tailed one and broke one of the 8-tailed legs. Successfully brought out a powerful ninja, and then such a powerful ninja was taken away by Naruto, allowing Naruto to fight with great value in the first chapter of the Fourth Ninja World. Compared with other villains, Orochimaru was created by the third generation of the strongest Hokage. At the same time, he can control the first generation of Hokage and the second generation of Hokage to help him fight, showing his strength. Itachi was created by massacring the entire clan when he was young and creating a cushion with the Akatsuki organization, followed by Senkado and Nagato who were half a step into the Six Paths (so he is Kishimoto's biological son) Scorpion was created by assassinating the Kazekage and making the Kazekage into a puppet Kakuzu was created by assassinating Hashirama, but failed, but successfully escaped Pain was created by using Jiraiya and all Konoha. On the contrary, what about the one who has no cushion? The third generation of fire is the most famous. Everyone generally thinks that he is very good because he is just a cushion. Now to shout out the achievements of the third generation, they only used the golden cudgel to control the Nine-Tails, and used the golden cudgel to hit the sacred tree in the final battle, making him, the strongest Hokage, look like a joke (and it is indeed a joke) So it is the same as about killing Huaxiong. If you want to highlight the strength of the protagonist, then you must first highlight the strength of the opponent! So what are the enemies you fought in the last few chapters and even at the beginning? There has never been an opponent up to the standard, and then there is this, the opponent can still beat our Akaashi around. Kabutaru, who is this? To be honest, I don't use Baidu, I really forgot about this thing. (His strength can only be highlighted by the fact that he and Zabuza are both Ninja Sword 7 members) The Chuunin Examination is also a bunch of crooked melons and cracked dates, a bunch of new generations, who have no reputation at all, and those who have achieved fame are not very strong. But Akaashi was in a position of suppressing or even crushing him throughout the whole process, so everyone felt good. Finally, Danzo was given a tea ceremony. Then came the Second Ninja War, which everyone talked about the most. Because there were few descriptions in his original work, you can say that you can be a lot more original, and there are a lot of reasons why you can write about it. But to be honest, the original work in the Second Ninja War describes the three ninjas plus Hanzo. Apart from this, we don't know any of the remaining ninjas who were active in World War II. As a result, we have no idea of ​​their intensity. Then you picked the ninjas who were active during this period in the original work, but they were not described at all in the original work. And Ebizo? Luo Yan? They were never given mats in the original work, so we had no idea of ​​their strength. Even Chiyo, an old guy described in the original book, was completely crushed by the scorpions during the scorpion fight. Moreover, the scorpion fight was used to provide support to Sister Sakura. Chiyo, this old guy, played an overall supporting role. The third generation of water can't even find out his name in the public notice. And then you say that theoretically he is as famous as the second generation of water, so his strength should not be much worse than the second generation of water. Awesome, it all depends on our imagination. Then there are these unknown people who suppress and beat our protagonist who has just entered the immortal mode. What about the battlefields that you wrote well about? The encounter angle in the Immortal Village was suppressed because the original sentence of the angle was disgusting. The mirror clone plays the third generation of the wind, which is very good, because the intensity of the wind shadow in the original drama is fine. A single player brings a pendant to counterattack the Iwagakure Village raiding team, because there is a Jingshang in the team, plus a four-tailed person to help, the tailed beast has been used in the original drama, and the methane explosion is really interesting. Inorganic reincarnation, the first show of power and single-control Sanshouyu, Hanzo, the demigod, has been passed over. So we felt that Akaashi's intensity was rising. Then you gave us an immersion in the next chapter I know that this kind of fan fiction has original works. If you want to create a powerful villain or add strength to those who are in the original works, it will be very conflicting. Then don't use these passers-by who have no head or face in the original novel to suppress the protagonist! Why don't they have any movement at all in the original work? They must be too good at it. They are so good at chasing the protagonist. The protagonist is also good at it! Yes, I finally understand why everyone thinks his record is poor. Because so far, he has never beaten anyone with a decent character in the original works. The best solution now is just like what I commented on in my previous paragraphs. Directly look for villains who have already been featured in the original work. Tailed beasts, shadows from major villages, people of this level can be used directly. Stop talking about these passers-by who I have to go to Baidu to get to know. We can't figure out how strong he should be. We can only think that he can't get along in the original work, and he will only be very good. It also lowers our perception of Akaashi's combat power. We feel that he has so many tricks, but he can't even understand these idiots, even more idiots!

It is recommended that you consider it finished after reading Chapter 71 of the Great Ninja War. The following content is simply for readers. Even though the characters in the original novel didn't dare to die, the improvement in combat power was completely lost in the subsequent chapters. The exciting point of this novel is to use all aspects of the system to improve the on-paper combat power, including blood, ninjutsu, blood stains, eye power, etc. But the core of all the cool points to improve combat power is to achieve a record. The part after chapter 71 is 25,000 combat power on paper, and the record is 0-0. If the author's on-paper combat power is suppressed and cannot be turned into achievements, then the novel will be super twisted and no longer enjoyable.

The monthly ticket is in the top 100 again. This book is so well-written, especially the battle with the Third Mizukage and the subsequent Dragon Vein Chapter. It is so well written that it reflects the author's writing skills. He has carefully read all the Naruto comics and concluded that Jugo's senjutsu is very strong, at least stronger than Naruto's senjutsu. The author's emotional scenes are very beautiful, especially the one with Uchiha Hikaru, which is very delicate. No, the more I write, the more disgusting I feel. I just want to know who voted for this book. Can you show me?

I jumped and read a bit, the ugly sage mode, the three magatama Susanoo, isn't this already invincible? But after looking at the comment area, I was forced to do a spinning top by a bunch of people. No wonder the Uchiha clan has three kaleidoscopes. The emotional kaleidoscopes are a pile of rubbish.