Flaws in Another World

The logic is rigorous, the writing is delicate, the writing is relaxed and moderate, and the plot is refreshing and not poisonous. It is a rare good work among new writers.

After reading more than 200 chapters, I can't stand it anymore. I hate novels with timeline settings. Every time I finish a book, I have a headache for a day or two. But the writing style and characters are acceptable, which is a pity

If you see the vortex of time and space, tell me what you think. Advantage 1: The beginning is quite attractive, so I have the idea of ​​​​continuing to read. As the plot copy continues to connect, it presses my nerves, that is, the reader's nerves, in an extremely tight rhythm. This is very good. In online articles with millions of words, it is extremely advantageous to improve the reader's reading interest and coherence. Advantage 2: Extremely novel settings. The text gives new settings and new concepts to abilities, and the map background closely related to them also has a foundation. Yes, the foundation, in my opinion, the entire map is based on the essence given to abilities in the text: negative entropy. Involving the opposing concept of entropy to form the world. There is also the concept of God that I have come into contact with so far. This concept is also very interesting, but it is also very vague. Maybe the author just wants to write this feeling. Disadvantage 1: The too compact connecting copy connects major events, which makes me (not necessarily representative of all readers) more and more tired as I read. The daily plot in the middle cannot be said to be no, I can only say that it is less. Even when writing daily life, the big plot suddenly connects in. All in all, it comes down to one point: rhythm. Disadvantage 2: Due to the too tight plot connection, the characterization is not full. Except for the characters in the plot, they are slightly rounded and even plump, but they did not leave a deep impression on me. Personal opinion, please don't comment

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First, the heroine mark in this book's characters is only to prevent spoilers and has nothing to do with the content. Second, this book is a brain-burning book. The protagonist wins through a battle of wits. It is not a systematic recommendation. Fans of the light and refreshing invincible genre should be careful. Thirdly, I have a normal moral bottom line, and please be careful with those who are willing to live in obscurity and those who are willing to kill anyone in sight. Fourth, spoilers are strictly prohibited in comments, and violators will be permanently banned.

This book has been signed, please feel free to read it. Please recommend, please collect, please comment... I don't ask for many readers in the early stage, but if you point out the problem for me early, I can correct it early. Also, it would be great if anyone could help me come up with a shocking title...

To be honest, I almost didn't click in after reading the introduction!

When I saw your book, I was reminded of "Jean in the 13th Section of the Brilliant City". It was also not favored by Qidian, and the early data were mediocre. It is now a high-quality book, with an out-of-market index of tens of thousands, and nearly 10 million words. Come on! Persistence is victory!

I read it yesterday afternoon and finished reading it early this morning. This is a book with a great world view and storyline: As a coder who suddenly dies while working overtime every day and travels to a different world, he discovers through the debug system that this world is full of loopholes. Meng Fei (the male protagonist) is involved in one case after another. In the process of discovering loopholes in the case, he comes into contact with superpowers, executioners and even gods and gods. Although the gods are silent, time travel, systems, and cases They are all secretly manipulated... (Avoid spoilers) As the book's introduction says: The plot of this book is complete, bizarre, and the world view is grand, with almost no poisonous points (the biggest poisonous point is probably the title and introduction). This book does not have the ability levels of general supernatural novels, but only emphasizes the characteristics of abilities. Of course, this book also has some flaws: 1. The character creation is not rich enough. So far (nearly 300 chapters), the characters of the male protagonist and several female protagonists (to prevent spoilers) are very flat, let alone X, the goddess, Luo An and others. The author has worked hard to complete the case but neglected that talent is the main factor that drives the plot. The author might as well add more roles to the characters in the play to perfect these people. 2. It is precisely because the characters are too flat and the emotional line is moving too fast for me. Although psychology says that the friendship between life and death will heat up the relationship, it still baffles me. I feel that this may also be because they are a couple themselves and the progress is rapid. It depends on how it will be completed in the future. 3. The conflicts in the story are not diverse enough. It seems too easy for the male protagonist to solve the case. Although the consistent straightforward narrative is comfortable to read, there is no motivation to follow it. This means that the author's chapter breaking technique is not good enough. 4. There are rare places in the book that I can talk about in this chapter. There are no jokes or complaints. This may require more lively words when writing to make people smile. 5. The title and introduction of the book are too poisonous. "Matching the Sky Coders" gave me a feeling of being neither high nor low. Many of the short stories are "I really don't want xx" and "xx is too/too xx". The more traditional ones such as "The Lord of Secrets" and so on are more ambitious. The introduction is just the author crazily praising himself. I know it's well written, but shouldn't the introduction introduce the plot of the book? If you praise your writing well, let the readers do it. If you let the author praise you for what you have written, it will appear useless to the readers. 6. Maybe the professional part is a bit too much. Although I don't have any IT foundation, it still doesn't hinder reading after skipping the professional terms. So in the future, you can try to reduce the professional content as much as possible (it seems to be decreasing). 8. Too short! This is actually a battle of wits article rather than a systematic article. I hope that those who think systematic articles are toxic can read it. To sum up, I like this book very much. I hope it will get better and better. I recommend it.

Writing multiple female protagonists is basically a failure because you can't handle the emotional line well. Look at how many multiple female protagonists are in the top ten of the rankings. If you don't have that ability, don't write.

Police + female, it doesn't mean anything else, it's just that this is a poisonous spot with a long history.

I have been reading your other free novel for a long time, and now I have signed a contract to give you a reward.

I solemnly promise: If there are any poisonous points or bugs in the book, and readers reply in this post stating the specific chapter location, reasons why they feel poisonous or unhappy, I will take one of the following measures (1) Modify the original text until it is non-toxic (visible to qd readers after refreshing). (2) Reply and explain why modification is not necessary or cannot be made. Please note that I do not accept general accusations for the purpose of venting emotions. If I encounter such negative comments, I will delete them directly.

It's pretty good, but the setting is realistic and I always feel awkward because I don't like the urban supernatural type. It would be even better if it were replaced by the Lord of Mysteries. It feels like a horror paradise.

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Who classified Suzaku, who just appeared, as a heroine? At present, it seems that Suzaku may be the main attendant Xuannv among the four great gods. She is older than a hundred years old. It would not be a problem if such an "over-age" heroine is a fantasy book. The problem is that this is an urban supernatural novel...

The female characters portrayed by the author really made me cry.        😭😭😭😭         ，😭🤗

It makes no sense for the author not to rush into the street.

I haven't read much of this book, but I feel like the male protagonist has a really big heart. In such a dangerous world with supernatural powers and gods. Moreover, even if there are constant dangers around him, he can still pick up girls safely without thinking about how to use the system to strengthen himself. If it is a normal world, even a wasteland world, I think it is normal. After all, such a system is invincible.

1. The appearance of X is so crazy that rich woman Ai Ting 3. Xuannv rebelled? Debut of Demons, Finding Negentropy, Hunting Demons, Mail Storm, The Great Theft After seeing this, I am about to change the map, so I specially organized the main storyline of this book. It is really well written. I haven't read many books, but this book ranks among the top five. There are a lot of excellent ones, and the protagonist's IQ is always online. Non-system push and slap in the face flow. The world structure is clear and grand, and time flows turbulently. There are so many holes to dig... Almost every plot drives the next plot. Several small plots are merged into one big story, with relatively strict logic. It's great, the author is very careful 🤭 Come on, I hope you can control it. I hope some of the little characters have more distinct roles. Even if he only appears a few times, everyone will understand the character better. For example, Obsession with Luo An, Maid Suzaku, and Crazy X are all very well written. There is a lack of some witty and humorous characters, and a lack of a mysophobic character surrounding the protagonist. Therefore, the article lacks a bit of life. The protagonist is always being pushed around, and there is no taste of life at all.

Let me write a new book review. I am reading it on my own computer. This book has nothing to do with coders. There is no such thing as dyslexia. It currently has multiple female protagonists. It is very interesting and non-toxic. It is probably among my top five books since I have read novels. As for why it is not popular, the main reason must be poor publicity. I came from Hun Chaos Ji, and even I haven't read that book for a long time. I don't know this book, and there is nothing I can do about it. After recommending it to others, the feedback was that the main character was too weak and not pretentious enough. This answer made me speechless and I didn't want to talk to him. In my opinion, this book is very good, but a lot of pretentiousness slaps you in the face (I don't like it). It is probably the first choice for most online readers at this level. It depends on personal preference.

Stop updating. I saw that you couldn't reward your previous book, so I ordered this one first. For no other reason than because I once had the dream of writing a book for free. Thank you for letting me see that someone has done this for me 😂😂😂

After reading the first part, generally speaking, I feel good and can watch it, but it is a bit not to my taste. The protagonist's character is a bit jumpy and not cautious enough. For example: The protagonist is in the national communication system and he casually teases the "goddess" who has the highest authority without thinking about whether his behavior is correct or not. There is danger, Later, I learned from the enemy that there really is a goddess, and she is about to wake up. The "goddess" in the communication system also said that she has not been online for a long time, and she should be online frequently in the future. I didn't connect the two together, and I never thought that the "goddess" in the communication system might be She is a goddess who is about to wake up, and she still looks familiar Goldfinger is well written, but the beginning is a bit abusive. The protagonist has no fighting power at the beginning, but he is targeted by an old Yinbi who acts fiercely, meticulously and powerfully, and basically has no checks and balances on him. No I took on the role of the protagonist and felt that the protagonist was out of breath and desperate. Without the author to open up big cheats and big opportunities, I couldn't think of a way to survive, and it would also harm the people around me

Ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhinging, why not update it? Can you give me a reason? You said before that you must not be in prison, otherwise I wouldn't have fallen into the trap.

What's going on?😭

Where have the previous books gone? ? ?

This is one of the few novels that I can keep reading. Generally, I have read more than 100 novels, and I don't want to read them after two days. This one can be read every day and I never get tired of it. The last one I liked so much was The Strange Fairy Tale.

Why does it feel like the confrontation is all about the computer? Although the author spent a lot of words explaining it, I can understand it, but it is really strenuous and tiring to read. Is it written around the computer and the Internet all the time? It is really tiring to read.

Recently, I started to read about security architecture design, and I feel that there are many details in it. If I used it to write a novel, it would be a very beautiful offensive and defensive battle.