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I originally wanted to give my monthly vote to Su Yuan (both of you are sweet writers, but the writing style is more H), but her recent updates are not good, and the Shen Xiaomo and Wang Xiaoke you wrote in several consecutive chapters are so cute to me (you tricked me into giving rewards several times, huh) and the updates are awesome, so I decided to give you my monthly vote at the end of the month. Come on, keep updating! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! !

I have been reading this book for more than a month. I read the author's high school summary today and I want to talk about what the author didn't mention: The author should think about his target audience before writing a book. (It's spelled out word by word, I hope the author can read it) If the target is harem readers, you have to understand the requirements of harem readers, such as no NTR, no flirting without marrying (such as Zhang Wuji), and no missing girls (about this, it does not mean that as long as they are women, they must be accepted. There is a subtle degree here. I wonder if the author knows Bian Shishi? This female supporting role is well portrayed, she is mainly through the heroine (her girlfriend) Honey) and the male partner (her boyfriend) come to communicate with the male protagonist, which largely avoids the harem readers' request to accept her. As for the author's story about Song Tang being saved by the male protagonist, the male protagonist is already a light in her heart. I think it should be accepted, but if you rarely write about her later, it becomes very embarrassing). In fact, harem readers are quite picky. You can refer to Ji Cha for details. If the goal is to have a single heroine who loves readers purely, the corresponding needs must be met, such as not speculating in stocks, not having an affair with the female protagonist, and not forcing sex. In this regard, the author can refer to the book that Hua has not yet written. Speaking of which, I also remembered that Sister Hua's book a thousand years ago also had a female partner, and she dealt with it in a similar way to Bian Shishi above. She also mainly communicated with the male protagonist through the female protagonist. This way of handling the female partner is really good. Actually speaking, readers with a single female protagonist are not so picky, so there is no controversy. If the target reader is the kind of person who likes to speculate in stocks, I have nothing to say. I hate this kind of article. Author, your target audience for this book is a little confusing. You seem to mean to write mainly four female characters (I guess they are all probably written around the male protagonist, right?) But you also said to include at least two. So who are your target readers? That's all I want to say. The author still has some writing skills. It's rare to have this foundation. I hope the author can write better and better.

I signed a contract for the novel I invested in today. I earned 2,000 points. I will reward you with 500 points. Isn't it true love enough to steal other people's money to support you? So can there be more?

The author's specialty is obviously emotional drama, so he should focus on describing it. Instead of spending a lot of pen and ink writing about business, it can be used as a passing incident to the emotional line with Shen Mo and Wang Ke, focusing on emotional drama. I think everyone is reading this article to read the emotional drama, not the business article. If you want to read the business article, there are completely better choices. Rather than writing now, it generally loses its own characteristics.

Personally, I feel that there is really no need to write more about the character Song Mei from the beginning, because the tragedy of Song Mei is that the protagonist is reborn but still has no time to change. The general joy of this kind of rebirth novel is that the protagonist changes the past to save the tragedy, but the tragedy that cannot be changed and the characters that cannot be saved, especially the beautiful female characters, are poisonous points for many people. As an old bookworm and a colleague, I still suggest that the author revise the plots of these chapters. After all, there is no doubt that "enjoyment" in urban rebirth novels is what most readers pursue. Deliberately describing tragedies and shortcomings in order to arouse readers' emotions is undoubtedly not worth the gain. Of course, I'm not a great person, the above are just my personal suggestions.

Did you build a building together? 😏 I will build a cheaper one Ten floors on the first floor, one hundred floors, one thousand roofs o not ok😜 By the way, let me have a wife to control the building [fn=31 ] The 100th floor has been closed The 200th floor has been closed The 300th floor has been closed The 400th floor has been closed The 500th floor has been closed The 600th floor has been closed

If it joins the alliance, how many chapters would the author be willing to add?

Shen Mo is so awesome

The end is over. If the grades are good, the story of the four people in college is still very long. It is very easy to write. After all, it is still difficult to reconcile. However, the pigeon is ready to release a new book. Please support me. If you subscribe, you can join the v group and read the beginning of the new book first. Dog food article 😁

It's very interesting. I started writing it in junior high school and it didn't make people feel that the plot is too childish. Instead, it triggered my own memories. I also had several crushes in junior high school. I didn't understand anything at the time. Maybe I liked it, but most likely it was because of sex. 😄 To be honest, this book is no worse than the ones on the ranking list. Among the urban novels I have read, this book is on the same level as I Really Want to Be Reborn and Common People, T0 level. Come on, author, write as much as you want. As long as it's not deliberately cliché, I'll order as much as you want.

I hope that the next book will be a book with multiple female protagonists. Why can't Dog Food be a book with multiple female protagonists?

It is positioned as a cool article and will not issue knives again

The emotional description is too delicate, and it is a realistic subject. It is really difficult to write a reasonable story about starting a harem, and I felt uncomfortable watching it. I prefer the story of Lin Xuan and Jiang Qianyu.

Song Mei is the most uncomfortable part of this plot. It's hard to imagine how much she has endured in the past seven years. How did she convince her father that night? What was the process... It always gives people the feeling that she has been broken.

It's a pity that such a good book has no results and can only end like this.

For the sake of his best friend, Song Tang can put aside his personal favorable impression of Fang Changan to analyze Fang Changan's character. It's rational! 👍🏻 However, there are also random thoughts that are common in teenagers. If you learn without thinking, you will be useless, and if you think without learning, you will be ruined! Fang Changan needs to use advanced thinking to guide her to become better! Fang Changan has a long way to go🤪

I deleted all the comments, but I still can't bear to leave them 😫. I just want to make a small suggestion: when the author writes Chapter 240, even if you write about Song Yuan threatening her, scolding her, or beating her, I don't want you to use ellipses to remind me of it!

This is how Mo Mo's tenderness should be

In public, Fang Changan believed that Song Yuan would not do anything drastic, but with the "lessons learned from his past life" and his father's identity, Song Yuan had too many ways to cause harm to Song Tang. After all, a person had lost his face and conscience, so there were too few ways to hurt him. So when Song Tang finally walked out of the classroom, Fang Changan also followed him out. Song Yuan glanced at him, and Song Tang followed his gaze and looked back. Fang Changan smiled and said: "Song Tang, I have something to do with you. You go ahead and tell me, I'll be fine later." Song Yuan didn't say anything in the end, and Song Tang followed him silently to the "hall" in the corridor next to the stairs. Song Yuan sincerely apologized to his daughter, but since the house manager was there, he naturally wouldn't say too much and just repeated "too much wine." Song Tang didn't say a word the whole time, just biting his lips and looking at the man who was his blood relative expressionlessly. "Go home with daddy!" Song Yuan talked for a long time, but seeing that his daughter never pretended to be rhetorical, he gave up more emotional exaggeration and repeated the sentence, but Song Tang did not answer. She only said one sentence from beginning to end: "Are you done? Then I will go back to the classroom to do my homework." There seemed to be a flash of anger on Song Yuan's face, but then it turned into an expression of annoyance and sadness. He seemed to want to say something more, but didn't. He took out his wallet and seemed to be preparing to give his daughter living expenses. Song Tang turned around and walked towards the classroom. Song Yuan could no longer hide the anger on his face. He raised his feet and chased after her, holding his wallet in one hand and reaching out with the other hand, as if he wanted to catch Song Tang. It was an early summer evening, the sun was setting in the west, and the setting sun shone into the corridor from the window. The father and daughter were originally in the shadow of the beams in front of the teaching building. Song Tang turned around and walked out of the shadow, and came to the area illuminated by the sun. The bright setting sun shone on her expressionless profile, like a hazy halo, pure and holy. Fang Changan's mind couldn't help but recall the scene where he met her for the only time in the county No. 1 Middle School in his previous life. Suddenly, Song Tang in this life and the "eighty" in his previous life seemed to overlap, with the same pure and stunning beauty, and the same expressionless face. He walked towards the place where light and shadow separated. Before Song Yuan came closer, he stood beside her and gently opened the hand stretched out in the shadow Fang Changan suddenly grinned and said, "Uncle, let me give you a ride." Hearing the voice, Song Tang turned around and saw his father's angry face, but the anger quickly and slowly subsided. He turned around with a sullen face and walked towards the stairs in silence. Fang Changan also suppressed his smile and followed. Song Yuan walked without saying a word, the sun shining on him, casting a heavy shadow on the neat roads of the campus. Fang Changan was holding a book in his hand, humming a song in his mouth, but with a cold light in his eyes, he followed Song Yuandi step by step. The two people walked to the school gate silently. Before Song Yuan was about to leave the school, Fang Changan suddenly stopped, opened his book, and said to Song Yuan: "Well done, uncle, be careful when crossing the river on the way home. I'll read here first." Song Yuan didn't seem to hear, and just continued walking in silence. Until Song Yuan's figure disappeared at the intersection, Song Yuan did not look back. Vaguely, Song Yuan heard Fang Changan reciting a poem. As for what the poem was, Song Yuan did not hear clearly. Song Yuan has been very irritable recently. That weird kid always says weird things. What does he know? To what extent does he understand those things? Absolutely impossible, aren't they afraid that their reputation will be affected? Do they want to lose the breadwinner of their family? But if they didn't say anything, how did the evil kid know? Or is it just a mistake? After thinking for a long time, Song Yuan didn't come up with an answer, but instead became more and more irritable. Agitated, Song Yuan couldn't help but want to do something. It is self-evident what an alcoholic will do when he is upset. ----- At this moment, the drunk Song Yuan finally forgot about the kid who made him uneasy. "No matter what you know, I haven't been caught yet, I can get away with it!" Thinking of this, Song Yuan couldn't help but feel proud, and he couldn't help but get in his car, go to the suburbs and drink a bucket, enjoying the pleasure of getting away with it. In the wind and lightning, the cold wind kept blowing on Song Yuan's face. In this late night suburb, Song Yuan's face was too dark to be seen. Suddenly, a question suddenly popped into Song Yuan's mind: What poem did Fang Changan read when he gave it to him that day. Song Yuan was lost in thought, but couldn't remember anything. Suddenly, a sharp horn broke Song Yuan's thoughts, and a car rushed towards Song Yuan at the same crazy speed. Song Yuan originally wanted to drive away, but his thinking just now brought the two cars too close, and the effect of alcohol made his thinking and body extremely slow. This time, he was really drunk. The next second, there was a violent fire and an earth-shattering loud noise. In the swirling world of loud noises and sounds, the voice of Fang Changan reading poetry became increasingly clear in Song Yuan's mind. The second before Song Yuan lost consciousness, he finally heard clearly the poem read by Fang Changan that had troubled him for a long time. "If there is no reward for good and evil, there will be selfishness in everything!"

The author's writing style is excellent, and I have read several books that are good, but I have not read this one because it is a taboo in the beginning of junior high school. Who among today's readers would watch you grow up from a little kid? Of course I hope the author can surprise me and prove me wrong.

Watching it again, I found it a bit regretful that Wang Yuwei didn't take it away.

Anticlimactic, almost like it ended without a climax.

I gave a reward of 5 yuan. Although it is not much, it is still a small reader's appreciation 🙂

Ahem, I'm here again. Today I went to Xuanwu Lake to play. I scratched the lottery ticket at the door. Twenty-one, and I won fifty. I'll reward you with five yuan.

I have one thing to say, the character portrayal is really good, but the whole episode is really hard for me to stand. I'd better subscribe automatically and wait for ten chapters before reading again. It's really hard to stand up after reading books and see this kind of inconsistency. It's hard to calm down.

What about extras? ? ? Where is the extra? ? ?

After watching it one after another, I have to say that no matter how well the emotional line is written, the business line is just as bad as the writing. And as we get to the later stages, the problems of anticlimactic and unbalanced plot arrangement become more and more prominent, which is really a pity.