The Zhang Clan's Cultivation Chronicles

This is my first time writing a book, so please don't criticize me if it's not well-written. I've read many fantasy and family-based cultivation novels. I want to write a family-based story based on my own understanding. Please point out any shortcomings in my writing.

Having read this far, I'd like to share my thoughts. So far, the protagonist hasn't contributed anything to his family; he's been entirely self-serving. Even when he gets opportunities, he doesn't share them with his family, even if he doesn't need them himself. For example, he obtained high-grade pills but didn't give a single one to his parents.

After looking at the first three pages, I feel there's a certain vibe to it, but the paragraph breaks are rather poor. I also have too many things I want to write. A gradual approach would be better. Outputting so much all at once is also a headache.

I feel the protagonist should give the spoils from the cave to his family. No matter how powerful you are on your own, can you compare to the power of your family? One person has to refine elixirs, grow herbs, raise spirit beasts, cultivate, and practice swordsmanship.

How shameful! While writing, I started plagiarizing from ordinary people.

It died

The biggest problem in the early stages was that the family intrigue was made the main plot, while the protagonist was marginalized. The biggest challenge in family-based games is balancing the family and the protagonist.

This plagiarism is so vulgar, it's like something a primary school student would write.

I still hope the author can widen the gap between major realms, making it an insurmountable chasm. The protagonist can be invincible within a major realm of equal strength, but it's best not to cross major realms. This is to truly highlight the difference between major realms.

After reading seventy or eighty chapters, it's basically just a diary entry, and there are all sorts of illogical and contradictory details everywhere.