I Was a Swordsman in Ancient Japan

I quickly read the free chapter in the morning, and I can sum it up in two words: a pity. He has the qualifications for food and grass, but lacks experience and accumulation. It can be seen that the author has done considerable preparation and homework in collecting data. However, as a literary and artistic work, the most important thing about the novel is the performance effect, not a simple accumulation of data. This is reflected in the weakness of the plot in the first and second volumes. It seems that everyone in the drama knows what they are supposed to do, such as leading Noh Noodles to perform. On the other hand, readers have no expectations for the plot, especially for readers who have watched a certain amount of Japanese movies. The plots in the first two volumes are nothing more than Yamada Yoji movies. The combination with Daibosatsurei and the villain played by Tatsuya Nakadai (one actor and two roles) is just a little less attractive. Basically, you will know what to do next after watching the beginning Since we started talking from the perspective of movies, let's use movies as an example to expand. There is a simple standard for whether a movie's narrative is full of characters, that is, whether the character's psychology has changed and grown, and whether the reasons are sufficient. Take the early plot in the article as an example. If more interactions with the proprietress Afu can be added to the plot of the wandering house instead of simply becoming a monster spawning point, then the catharsis in the subsequent fight will not be so embarrassing ("What, what, my friend's clothes"), and the emotions will have a process of building up momentum; the second is the scene. Needless to say, its ability to shape the character image, but the author is somewhat weak in this aspect of the narrative. So far, I I don't know what our gyms are like, what the castle lord's residence is like, and what the castle town is like. This can help to shape the master style of the supporting characters and the character of the city lord on the territory. The third is the lines. The novel's genre limits the main way to shape the characters. It is still a dialogue. From a personal perspective, the tone of the characters in the author's narration is too plain and does not match the scene enough (basically all of Ah Fu's language). However, there are also good ones, such as the city lord killing people and "clothes are dirty". This is a reading experience brought about by a movie feel, which should be promoted. It is a seedling after all. If the above is just a bit of complaint and a short-term improvement of the ability problem, the following are the measures that I think the author can immediately improve the experience for readers - length. The plot needs to gain momentum, and the reader's emotions also need to gain momentum, which is reflected in the continuity of reading in the novel. However, the current chapter length is generally only seven to eight pages. In addition, the text is too plain, and the reading feeling is discouraged and becomes a running account. The optimal number of reading pages in standard font size should be 13 to 15 pages. Any longer is generally only available for historical texts. In other words, the author may wish to increase the number of words in a single chapter by 40-50%. This requires adjusting the rhythm of writing or increasing the workload of typesetting, but the effect is bound to be there. The above is just a complaint, I hope it is useful.

I was really drunk. I originally watched it with the intention of giving it a try, but the surprise at the beginning was not much left in the bar scene, and I was very disgusted. Why do you really have to write it as a mentally retarded person? It is obvious that the literary youth is suffering from the disease and wants to write about the so-called growth. But growth is not what you wrote. It's so disgusting. From the time you have been emphasizing the pressure points, people have guessed the whole process. And you still resolutely chose the most profitable way, refused to admit defeat, forced to add points and try again. I am better than you. This is really picking up sesame seeds and losing watermelon, and losing the heroism or personality charm of martial arts swords and halberds. You obviously have a better way: 1. The most mediocre but intelligent person. Seeing so many people coming, I increase the points in advance to prevent accidents. Feeling that it is difficult in the process is a disadvantage. I barely defeated the opponent's senior brother by adding points of assault hand speed. However, the first tool that was destroyed was seen as an insidious villain who had used his tricks. He couldn't help but attack the careless pig's feet with a sneak attack. The senior brother on the other side shouted off the junior brother, saying that I was careless this time, but if I lose, I lose. He asked the junior brother to apologize, and said that there will be a real sword showdown in the competition next month. In this process, you can write that the tool man is ashamed and admits his mistake, and the senior brother is domineering and protective but adheres to the bushido, and the group portrait will look much better. Pig's Foot was also frustrated and realized that he could no longer look at reality from the perspective of the game world, and he would try his best to add some foreshadowing and ambition to improve his strength in the future. 2 Just use your literary youth perspective and think about it without adding any points, but you dare to act and act to highlight the character of the pig's feet, and take the initiative to invite you to stand in the competition. Instead of going all out and working hard to improve, we set up a mini-boss to fight in advance, and there are so many points in the pig's feet. We know that there is also a sense of expectation for pretending to be slapped in the face. In the next chapter, apply medicine to develop daily relationships, and then practice a transition to make a big show. It is better than pretending to be slapped in the face. You want to know why we read books? Isn't it just those swords and swords and heroes and beauties? A person who is submissive and refuses to admit defeat is a buffoon, as far away as Kong Yiji, as close as Grandmaster Ma, who wouldn't laugh at you?

Many places are too blunt. It takes a long time to prepare for the cool points, and then there is only a little bit of cool points. The general direction of the plot has this kind of problem, but the minor direction of the villain is too weak. I gave up many times after reading this book. In the end, I always felt that the author's butt was crooked...

I Became a Swordsman in Ancient Japan is a very regrettable work. The beginning of this work is indeed very beautiful. Especially when it comes to the creation of villains, it's rare for me to see such a work that can portray a villain so ruthless that it makes one's teeth itch. The first villain of this book, the bloodthirsty and indifferent bastard Daimyo who regards human life as nothing, is really a very classic villain image. This kind of villain creation makes the protagonist's first revenge battle at the beginning of the chapter, the battle scene in which the Daimyo is slaughtered, really relieving and beautiful to watch. This also allowed the work to not only achieve very good results at the beginning, but also create a very good story and many famous scenes that make readers hooked. It's just a pity that after the first villain's name was solved and the second part of the work was entered, perhaps because the villain in the first part was too well-created, the author's advantages in characters and emotions were not continued in the follow-up, which made the emotions drag on. Although the author still maintains good writing skills, the lack of characters that can make people excited is still a bit regretful.

(It's an unsatisfactory novel. The main flaw is that the plot is expected and unreasonable.) Let's talk about the advantages first - the first hot-blooded novel adapted from a book on the way of the king. It has the first-mover advantage. Although the author considers himself to be a sword and halberd movie and uses many Japanese movies, the reckless protagonist, monsters and upgrades, etc. Are really hot-blooded comics. And although the plot is stiff, it is not ambiguous when it comes to the climax. Overall, it is okay, and it is considered a high-quality novel. The shortcomings are also huge - they are expected and unexpected. As soon as the lord appears at the door of the gym in the first volume, and as soon as Mamiya surrenders in the second volume, there is no suspense in the rest of the story, which is to be expected. The protagonist kills hundreds of people in revenge for the gym (cannot understand the bond), the lord is really as bad and stupid as the emperors of the Northern Qi Dynasty (it does not conform to the thinking logic of normal people), the lord of the Erdao style saves the protagonist once and then inexplicably abandons him (the protagonist is manipulated like a goose), highlighting an unreasonable situation.

Final commemoration + reflections. As a bookworm for 15 years, I have read thousands of online novels, with the number of words estimated to be nearly 1 billion. In my impression, there are probably only a few dozen that I could read to the end, and I clicked most of them before the authors entered the palace. There are probably no more than 5 online novels that can really move and praise me from the bottom of my heart. Especially now that I am quite picky about books, I can only say that the author of this book is really great. I am looking forward to your new book!

It's too watery, I always jump to watch it

Congratulations to the author on the release of his new book! A few months ago, I heard the author say in the book group that he was going to release a new book. I have been waiting until now, and finally the new book is here. Congratulations to the author first. I have been reading the author's debut novel since last year. It can be said that I have watched the author grow step by step until now. The deepest impression the author left on me is his writing attitude of never-ending updates and updating at least 4,000 words every day 😄 I believe that when writing this book, the author can also continue his excellent character of never-ending updates and eunuchs in his last book. It's been a long time since I've seen this kind of book that you can safely collect and invest in.

Great book! ! Great book! ! Great book! ! What the author writes is really good! ! ! It's like watching a TV series, and it's endlessly memorable. The characters are well portrayed, the events are compact, the local customs, historical events, etc. Are really colorful! It can be said that it is the head series among the books I have read! ! The author has opened a new book that is related to this book, so look forward to it! ! ! I hope the author can write a work like the Mercenary Trilogy, come on! ! ! ! !

The free part has a lot of rereading and chatting, but the text quality has improved significantly after entering the paid chapters. The problems that appear in the free part rarely appear in the paid chapters.

I just finished reading the first volume and I can't stand it any longer! The quality of this first volume! I ordered all the rest immediately! You can look forward to it! Hahaha, it's really good-looking. I like this kind of hard-core battle, which is what the author calls a surreal battle, as well as this kind of growing protagonist, and the plot! The plot is also very attractive to me, and the author is really great. I will keep following it. In addition, thanks to another brother for reminding me, I turned off book reviews. Although I don't know what will happen if I don't turn it off, it's good to be able to concentrate on reading if I turn it off. I also recommend that others turn it off so as not to affect the viewing experience.

The ending of Chicago was criticized miserably. The author should give Ittousai a good ending! ! ! Because I feel that the author really likes be aesthetics

When I saw the chapter "Attack on Shiranui Ri", I had the urge to post a simple book review. Up to now when this novel is written, everyone has their own distinctive characteristics. Of course, it is still a little short of a penetrating portrayal (dog head🐶), but we can already easily remember the labels of the main characters in the novel, what kind of people they are, why they become like this, how they usually behave, etc. Their faces are distinct and distinctive, and there are not many repetitive routines. But here I want to discuss the role of Balrog alone. I replied in a post about this chapter that the Balrog will definitely go back after escaping, and the Maple Leaf Forest in my heart will become an eternal regret. His attributes as a social person mixed with his emotions for his adoptive father and his adoptive father's expectations for him will push him back to Shiranui. His original personal attributes of letting himself go will still return to the original track due to the law of inertia. This is actually what we, all kinds of people in society, can do. How many of us can let go of everything that seems to be shackles now and run towards the white moonlight in our hearts? Very few. The social attributes of social beings are the causes and effects linked to us. These causes and effects bind us like earth-bound spirits, which we cannot escape or leave. The Balrog is actually the epitome of us ordinary people. No matter how powerful your body is, if you cannot get rid of the shackles of your mind, you will still be an ordinary person. These shackles trouble us, but sometimes they are also the internal cause of our strength. Complex and indivisible emotions make it impossible for us to evaluate a person simply. They are not simple black and white in the dichotomy, nor are they chaotic gray. Everyone is a colorful complex. Emotions and memories, those fragments that are tumbling all the time, always appear in front of us at an inappropriate time in the dead of night, when the work of the hands stops. Why do love, family affection, and all kinds of strong feelings end up being heartbreaking and why are they so difficult to let go of? In fact, what makes it difficult to let go is those common memories, memories, and cause and effect.

That's it

I quite like this realistic book. Although it also has a "cheap finger" system, it is not as outrageous as other books. Similar to the system of killing monsters and upgrading, I can still accept it and keep watching it.

Because I just won the monthly reading, I can't subscribe, so I can only give a small reward. Come on, author (ಡωಡ)hiahiahia

Update, update, so much is not enough

This is my last recommendation vote, the real last one

It's very exciting, but the days of waiting for updates are too long. When our senior year of high school officially starts, we don't have time to read novels. Please give it a boost ^0＾~Updates

Character Card Name: Ogata Issei Gender: Male Class: assassin Alignment: Neutral Evil Attribute: Human Strength: A Dexterity: A Durability: A++ (the first three are understandable because they are immortal) Magic Power: E (Ogata himself There is no energy-based means from beginning to end) Luck: D (Ogata spent the first half of his life wandering around) Class skills Aura masking: A (Shiranui-ryu stealth technique) Innate skills Immortality: A Recover a large amount of health points, and continue to restore health points each round (3 rounds). Selfless Realm: EX The performance of one's own strength, speed, and skill command cards are greatly improved (1 turn), and the power of the Noble Phantasm is increased (3 turns). Wuwo Sword Style: A Acquire a large amount of charge, double the number of attack hits of your normal command card (1 turn), switch the form of the Noble Phantasm (1 turn) Color Card Power Swift Skill Noble Phantasm Pass Penetration of Self·Shura's Strike: C Anti-personnel Noble Phantasm/10hit/Green Card The own attack power is increased (the effect is increased when overcharged), causing huge damage to a single target (level 1), and the self gains dodge status (1 round) Destroy the army and kill the generals·Unparalleled in the world: A Anti-army Noble Phantasm/3hit/Red Card Cause huge damage to all enemy characters (level 1), reduce the opponent's attack power and defense, increase your own critical hit rate and critical hit damage (pass (The effect increases when recharging) Voice ——Combat—— Start 1: Why are there always idiots who overestimate their abilities and come looking for death... Start 2: Line up for me, there are many people who want to kill me, "Executioner Ittosai". Skill 1: No one told you that I seem to be immortal? Skill 2: (breathing sound) Okay, let's get real! (Because the breathing sound of the source's breath is too long, I omitted it) Skill 3: Two-sword style of no self, Shura ginseng! Command card B: One-sword style of Sakakibara·Waterfall! Command card Q: Two-sword style of no-self! Blade return! Command card A: Times have changed! Ogata style· Kasumi Nagi! (Ogata Style Spear Drawing Technique hahaha) Noble Phantasm Card 1: Cut off the head with just one blow! Noble Phantasm Card 2: It's like a god at this time! Noble Phantasm Card 3: Sanada's spear is sharp, my sword is not at a disadvantage! (Red card limited Noble Phantasm) Noble Phantasm 1: Seeing that your spirit is a little slack, I will kill you with one sword - it's that simple! Transparent selflessness·Shura's blow. Noble Phantasm 2: I am myself, but I am also the world! Transparent selflessness·Shura's blow! Noble Phantasm 3: The roar of the class moves, a cavity of blood surges up in the throat, and the shadow of the sword breaks through the sky! Destroy the army, unparalleled in the world! (Limited red card Noble Phantasm) Voice ——Summoning and Strengthening—— Summoning: Assassin, Ogata Yisei, is a ronin for the time being, and may have other nicknames, but I will introduce them later. (Quietly): Thank God I didn't turn into a woman. Upgrade 1: Well, Master, I seem to have had this experience of making my body lighter during my lifetime, but thank you anyway. Upgrade 2: Well, my strength and agility have increased, although they are not as good as before when I was alive, but thank you anyway. Second Ascension 1: After changing my clothes, I seem to have regained the feeling I had when I was free of feudal clan and wandering around. Ascension 2: Speaking of which, it shouldn't scare you Master. At this time, my nickname is Human Slayer and Executioner. Second Coming of the Spiritual Base 3: Da Shi Tian and Da Zi Zai... Master, thank you for helping to find them. With them, I can exert some of the power of the Wuwo Sword Style. Ascension 4: The most unparalleled sword in the world, Ogata Yizhi joins in! Although it is a bit shameful to say this, but after all, I can't live up to your expectations, Master. Even in front of ten thousand armies, I will definitely be able to cut a smooth path! ——Personal Space—— Bond 1: What do you mean, swordsmanship is very handsome? That kind of thing exists just for killing people, and there is no point in talking about whether it is handsome or not. Bond 2: Ah, yes, I once used the pseudonym Majima Goro. What, Majima Goro also has a lot of wild stories? Well, I hope you didn't write me too outrageously. (Ogata's inner OS: Misstep, I guarded against Ogata's power but not Majima Goro!) Bond 3: I heard that there is a book that says my hairstyle is Tsukiyo hair? How is it possible, that hairstyle is too ugly, hahaha! Bond 4: Assassinate the feudal lord? I don't deny that I did these things, but it seems to be a pity that my other companions who assassinated that scumbag once were not able to be passed down to the world in the end. Bond 5: The sky is thousands of miles wide, but the sword is only three feet long. Even if you have the ability to restrain the gods and send generals, you can only kill things within 3 feet. Therefore, although I am just an ordinary person who knows some swordsmanship, I will cut through all the obstacles within three feet for you. Go forward boldly, Master. (Ogata's inner OS: You are not here anyway, so I'll use it to show off first, hahahahahahaha) Dialogue 1: You are that Nioh... I have really admired the name for a long time. Should I say this to you again, Tachibana-kun? (Holding Tachibana Aoden) Dialogue 2: Every time I see you, I feel that my current body is really great, thank God. (Possessing Miyamoto Musashi) Dialogue 3: I heard that you are an unknown swordsman. That's really awesome. You actually usurped Sasaki Kojiro's position with an unknown person. It's amazing. (Possessing Sasaki Kojiro) Dialogue 4: Oh, you actually came to Chaldea? That's really like meeting an old friend in a foreign land. (Anyone who holds the Calabash House) Dialogue 5: Although I am also Japanese, I always feel that he is very different from the character in my memory. (Possessing some Japanese Servants) Dialogue 6: Although you may not believe it, but maybe I was Chinese in my previous life? Um... Or should I say a previous life? (Possessing a Chinese Servant) Dialogue 7: You said you have eaten mermaid meat? There is actually a second such scourge in the world, tsk tsk tsk. (Possessing Sesshōin Kiara (MoonCancer)) Dialogue 8: Although you are very young, after all, you are the ancestor of an elder of mine, and I will still maintain a certain respect for you. (Possessing Fuma Kotaro) Like things: Do you like things? Well... There are quite a lot of food, wine, and beautiful scenery, but what I like most is the peace and healthy life for me and my family and friends. Things I hate: To be honest, I don't hate many things, but I really hate those guys who don't treat ordinary people as human beings. Those kind of people should die. About the Holy Grail: If there is such a universal wish-making machine, I would really like to try to make one. Although I haven't decided what to wish for yet, maybe I can try to make a contradictory wish?

Ogata has been summoned to modern times

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"Greetings! Las Vegas Royal Competition~Swimsuit Swordsman Seven-Color Showdown!" Held! Event Limited★4 Servants "Ogata Issei (Saber)" You can get it by clearing the event! Event period: June 15 (Tuesday) to July 6 (Tuesday), 2021 The interference between servants caused by summer—— The so-called summer scenery poem... This year's swimsuit season has also arrived as scheduled! This time the stage is Las Vegas! Participating is the gorgeous "Swimsuit Swordsman"! It is a fierce battle of quantum dance! This battle is the "Seven-Color Battle of the Swimsuit Swordsman"! Bet on one, bet on two, bet on three, and bet on the throne of "The Strongest Swimsuit Swordsman"! Come on, come on, come on, let's decide the winner one by one in an upright manner! ★Ogata Issei★ Class Saber Information Even Miss Ogata Issei, a great swordsman who travels all over the world, cannot resist the temptation of the sea in the hot summer! "Now that we have come to the beach, If we don't change into a swimsuit, we will definitely be regarded as an alien! If it weren't for the purpose of blending in with everyone, I wouldn't wear such shameless clothes!" I put on my sunglasses and thought I was well disguised, Miss Ogata Ise, who had a slightly red face, muttered softly. "You can't let others see this look... "It's decided! From now on, my name will be Hanyu Ichi!" (I originally wrote it at noon and sent it out, but I don't know why I didn't send it out... If I had known better, I would have saved the draft first)

Miyamoto Musashi

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To sum up the advantages: dramatic and tense plot, excellent character portrayal, and in-depth and detailed study of ancient Japan. Disadvantages: Too much pursuit of drama leads to a plot that is too forced, good-looking but without surprises, and too many interjections and memories lead to an incoherent plot. If this is a sword and halberd film, it is undoubtedly very good 👍, and the tense description is indeed wonderful to watch. But this is not the case. Without the actors' performances and the fast-paced narrative of the film, the author's dramatic approach would appear to be very draggy. If a battle is not finished, the camera will change and memories will begin, which is the same problem as in the later stages of Naruto Shippuden 🤔. You must know that a movie lasts two hours. No matter how many characters you have during the battle and how many narrations you add, it will be finished in 10 minutes. The plot will not be interrupted by memories (the audience has not yet come down from the climax, the memories have already been played and continued 😁). But novels are different. A battle can last for half a month or even a month. The protagonist has just faced off against the opponent, and you leave him alone for two or three days to write a supporting role... It's really uncomfortable 😰. I hope the author can properly handle the relationship between dramatic narrative and story coherence. Although the next one will probably be more group-like, I guess this situation may be more serious 😅

After reading, the author has a characteristic in his writing. Every time someone is about to die, the protagonist just arrives. This feels very bad. Is it better to write the battle between Genichi and Nobuhide to kill Genichi? After all, the fight has reached that point, and the protagonist just happens to arrive to save it. There are also clips of Rin Kinoshita. It is equivalent to saying that the villains are all dead, but the good guys will never die. This scenario occurs again and again. There are also Hatsuko and the leader Yi Nin. I was really speechless in this scene. I have forgiven countless rebellions. Don't righteous people die?

Thanks to Gud for making the map! I have marked some important locations in this book with red circles. Ogata's hometown Izumo, Calabashya's base Owari, Shiranui's base Omi...

Many people have questions about Ogata's salary. They think Ogata's annual salary is 50 dan, so why does he live in such poverty. Some people are also confused about whether one stone of rice is enough to feed an adult man for a year. So I will make a popular science post today to tell you how miserable the samurai were in the middle and late Edo period. First of all, to answer everyone's first question: Is 1 stone of rice enough for an adult man to eat? To be honest, I doubt that the person who asked this question has never cooked rice... I found professional information on CNKI to answer your questions. The reference here comes from Wang Mingzhu's master's thesis of Northeast Normal University, "The Commercialization of Annual Tribute Rice and Its Consequences in the Edo Period" As can be seen from the picture above - one stone of rice is equal to 300 kilograms of rice. Anyone who has bought rice should know what 300 kilograms of rice is. 300 kilograms of rice is enough to feed an adult man for a year. Next, let me answer your second question: Why do samurai like Ogata receive so much rice every year, and why do they still live so miserable lives? Without further ado, here's the information: The reference here comes from an article written by Zhu Chengfeng, a doctoral student at Nankai University, in "World History", published in Issue 1, 1990. To put it simply, the warriors had to exchange their rice with the merchants for money, and then they could use the money to buy other daily necessities. This system in the Edo period led to the rapid development of the commodity economy. The commodity economy impacted the natural economy, and merchants gradually became more powerful. The samurai became poorer and the merchants became richer. The reference here is still from Wang Mingzhu's master's thesis of Northeast Normal University, "The Commercialization of Annual Tribute Rice and Its Consequences in the Edo Period" Businessmen occupying a monopoly position began to manipulate rice prices and obtain rice from samurai at extremely low prices. Simply put, samurai were exploited and squeezed by merchants. The reference here still comes from Wang Mingzhu's master's thesis of Northeast Normal University, "The Commercialization of Annual Tribute Rice and Its Consequences in the Edo Period" As can be seen from the picture above, in the middle and late Edo period, the average actual annual income of lower-level samurai was 35 shi, which was similar to that of ordinary farmers. Ogata's annual salary is 50 shi. After paying taxes according to the rules of "four public officials and six citizens", 30 shi meters are left. After paying taxes according to the rules of "five public officials and five citizens", 25 shi meters are left. In other words - no matter which tax rules are adopted, Ogata's actual income is lower than the average, even lower than that of ordinary farmers. As a samurai, Ogata had to spend a lot of money to maintain his sword. At the same time, Ogata still has to pay tuition for the Sakakihara Sword Hall. You have to pay tuition to learn swordsmanship! Opening a sword gym is not charity! Because I think it is common sense to pay tuition to learn swordsmanship in the sword hall, so I did not mention this expense of Ogata in the text. But judging from the current situation, a considerable number of readers have ignored Ogata's considerable financial expenditure... So--to sum up, Ogata, whose income is below the average line and not even as good as a farmer, still has to spend money to maintain his knife and pay tuition. It is normal for Ogata to live in poverty.

When I saw it on the shelves, I was a little confused. Why would a person in modern society not want to change his life if he traveled back to the poverty-stricken life in ancient times? There are always articles that despise the aesthetics of martial arts, which shows that there are modern people's thoughts. What is the reason for the protagonist to practice swordsmanship so hard instead of improving his food? The system does not have any tasks or anything like that, it has hard and fast rules! There is also a section about not giving up. Who is the protagonist? Long Aotian? I can't stand you beating me? When I saw that Senior Brother could admit defeat, I thought that this kind of plot would never happen, but I didn't expect that he suddenly stabbed me. Not to mention the plot, there is no subjective consciousness at all later on, it is all passive triggering of the plot. The character design is not clear, and the plot is not well written. But this is the situation with most of the novels on the website now. There is nothing good to say about the author. I just took a look at the comment section, and all of them were praising the author for his good writing? I'm just curious now, do you have the right amount of money? Or do you really think it was well written?