The Heavenly Dao Equation

After discussing it with some friends, I feel that Ermu does not have a clear understanding of the success or failure of the book Witch. Where is the witch? Several interesting female characters and a detailed farming story. Where did the witch fail? A chaotic setting that suddenly unfolds violently in the middle period. From this perspective, we will find that compared to The Witch, this book has carried out a comprehensive study to remove the dross and eliminate the essence, and violently develops messy settings, but at the same time, it simply replaces farming. In The Witch, the establishment of the city of Neverwinter can make people see that it is not easy to build brick by brick; while in the way of heaven, Jinxia is like a game player operating, and she can raise tall buildings from the ground with just a few instructions. And in the middle period, there is a strange setting. I don't know why Ermu insists on trying to write a large-scale story, but it is obvious that the change in the reputation of the witch has shown that readers do not accept this sudden violent development, not to mention that Ermu's writing skills are obviously not good enough to control this kind of setting. So Tiandao and Witch have almost the same development. They are a bit interesting in the early stage - inexplicable in the middle stage - and completely collapse in the later stage. It's just that compared to the witch, the interesting part of the way of heaven was simply passed by Ermu and fast-forwarded to the inexplicable part. Actually, this book is really not as good as deleting the West Pole, rockets, pre-civilization and other nonsense. I don't see the significance of these settings at all. Big Eyeballs can build a space station in the magical world because they have the foundation of the world system of the Xiling Empire, and their writing power is there, and it is laid out from the beginning, and there is obviously a clear outline. The second eye gives people the feeling that they suddenly thought it was fun, so they added it and then didn't know how to proceed. In fact, if we delete all these messy things and simply talk about how Jinxia developed farming step by step and unified the country bit by bit, interspersed with some emotional lines and stories of small characters, and write a sense of the progress of the times, it will definitely be much better than it is now. I hope that Ermu will have a clearer understanding after this time of being thrown into the street. The next book will not have a big setting that is strange and weird, but the circle will never come back. Instead, it will lower the pattern and tell a story in a small pattern. With Ermu's writing power, it will definitely be exciting.

I saved a hundred chapters and took a while to read them. I personally think there are several problems 1. The content is not substantial enough (this is a fundamental contradiction) From the word count alone, the content of these one hundred chapters is really not enough. But the bigger problem is that there are too many plots crammed into these short one hundred chapters, from the end of the naval battle to the head-on confrontation with the Privy Council, during which Li went out to fight and the Privy Council's infiltration and destruction. The story moves so fast that a lot of details are lost. For example, the food shortage crisis in Shenzhou was solved by Xia Fan relying on netting fish, but the specific plot is that Xia Fan proposed the concept of netting fish in the morning, the net was built in the afternoon, and the next day the tree boats were fully fired, killing everyone. This kind of situation is really regrettable. In this section, Mo Yun also appears, but he begins to become a tool person, as if he is a research institution of the protagonist camp, without his own initiative, and the character creation can be said to be tragic. 2. There is a disconnect between the speed of technological development and the degree of characterization This problem is mainly due to the separation between Jinxia's technological development and character creation. First of all, all the development of Jinxia can be divided into two aspects. On the one hand, it is driven by our protagonist Xia Fan alone. Perhaps this is not the author's original intention, but in the process of specific description, this is the fact. Xia Fan proposed an idea or technical solution that was ahead of the times, and others were just passively accepting or adapting. On the other hand, there are external environmental factors. For example, Shuzhou brought a large number of Qi sensers to Jinxia. But no matter where it comes from, Jinxia's technological development speed is really like a rocket. This may be due to the fact that the author neglected to pay attention to the timeline in the detailed description process. This problem is also reflected in the specific description of technological progress. It is good to indirectly reflect the technological level through the changes in residents' lives, but the description is really too little. It is only mentioned in a few sentences, and the impression is really not much better. 3. In terms of characterization, all the characters have become tool-human Not only some of the supporting characters, but also our protagonist Xia Fan, the princess, etc. Have begun to collapse to a certain extent. Why is it called collapse? First of all, let's talk about the princess. In the beginning, the princess in my eyes was like this: her mother was killed, she went to the border for revenge, she led a team to kill in the army, she secretly cultivated her own power, and she had the image of an avenger. But now, Xia Fan seems to have become a vase of a person who has nothing to do but is invisible. Let's talk about Xia Fan. Xia Fan's performance in the book can be said to be that of a full-stack engineer who is proficient in everything. Taking away the author's golden finger and discussing it only from the perspective of 'human nature', Xia Fan in my eyes is more like a machine with a certain emotional response, just completing the character assigned to him by the author? Why do you say this? First, in most of the plots, no matter what happens, Xia Fan is always at ease and calm, rarely showing the emotions that normal people should have. Second, the author's characterization is not deep enough, making it difficult to have a sense of empathy. After talking about these two main roles, let's talk about the supporting roles. The most obvious tool personification belongs to Luo Qingqing. In the previous stories, Luo Qingqing showed the characteristics of "lawful". I think in the early stage of the story, Luo Qingqing can be said to be one of the most successful characters portrayed by the author. However, since Luo Qingqing became the "listener", he seemed to have lost his soul and became one of the "thugs" of the protagonist group. He kept saying that the order created by Xia Fan is better and I want to protect this order. Completely labeled, lacking enough content to support the image of a "genuine" listener. Besides, does anyone remember Luo Youer? Princess Evil Horse? He's just a tool for opening maps. Qian Zhi? Not a cute refrigerator? Fang Xiandao? Who are you? Wei Wushuang? ? ? There are many characters in the book, and it is very difficult to portray each one of them in a profound way. The author must have very deep skills. However, the next best thing is to describe the contributions of these people in Jinxia, ​​a city that has undergone drastic changes, and their daily lives in some slightly daily plots. Isn't it possible to interact? I think the author is fully capable of doing this, and he can do it very well. 4. The collision between the Qi-sensing setting and modern technology The Qi-sensing setting allows those who sense Qi to transform their cognition into specific substances. The more they know, the stronger their combat capabilities will be. So much so that our protagonist group can improve their character level just by understanding a few simple concepts of physics (basic physics). But on the other hand, from design to production practice, the combination of specific feelings and technology can be easily conveyed. During battle, the emphasis is placed on the improvement in combat power brought about by the "concept". I don't know if it is to maximize strengths and avoid weaknesses 5. Advanced ideas are just slogans We know that the people are the creators of history. Only political parties that truly represent the people's fundamental interests can get the support of the people. Serving the people is the fundamental purpose and original mission of our party. I think the author also fully recognizes this. The protagonist Xia Fan also loves the people and is determined to develop productivity and build socialism in a different world as quickly as possible and economically. However, at this point, the description in the book is just a slogan and does not touch the fundamentals. I won't go into detail on this point, everyone who knows it will understand 6. The conflict in the story is not sharp This book does not have extremely sharp social conflicts like the witch. On the contrary, as the Seven-Star Privy Council replaced the royal family and became the actual person in power, the princess's revenge (rebellion) became unnecessary and even harmful. It can be said that there are no irreconcilable conflicts between the Privy Council and the protagonist camp. At most, it is just a dispute over routes. However, as the plot develops, we can see that the route of the protagonist group is obviously the better solution. Then the next plot development is how to merge the two forces with the same origin and resolve some internal conflicts. What else do we do after this? In other words, what is the task that the author assigns to the protagonist group? This is still unclear and may be resolved as the plot develops. 7. Gender distribution of the main characters I won't say much about this. I just want to ask how many wives Xia Fan has at the end 8. Summary I said a lot, but maybe I didn't say anything. After all, I am just a lousy reader of novels. In addition to the above-mentioned problems, this book has many other shortcomings, which I will not go into details here because apart from all the problems in 7, there are only two problems in the final analysis: First, the description is not enough, which is reflected in the fact that the content of the author's two updates a day is similar to the content of others' one update, not to mention that there was only one update a day recently. Second, there is a problem with the rhythm of the story. The development of the story is sometimes fast and sometimes slow, which makes people confused. If you see this, you may have a few questions Q: Who is your jiba? A: I only read novels Q: Why don't I feel the problems you mentioned? A: I can only say that it varies from person to person, but please read 3 carefully. At least this point exists objectively. Q: Are you trying to be embarrassing by talking about so many issues? A: If you say yes, then it is. It's really embarrassing. Is it necessary to write a short essay? Book friends are welcome to discuss rationally, and if there are any questions, please correct them!

Please take a look at this piece of unfavorable advice: Ermu, do you still remember how the "devil" lost to Roland in "The Witch"? Mortal technology joins the war. Whether it is rifles, artillery, ships, planes, and finally A-BOOM, mortals possess firepower that is unimaginable to the opponent and play a decisive role. Is Othruk strong? He also did not dare to enter the machine gun fire network of the Neverwinter Army. Is Hykezord strong? He was beaten by several fighter planes and fled. Is the God of Divine Creation strong? An atomic bomb was sent directly. The war technology research and development led by Roland easily influenced the war situation. But look at this book. Did the war technology research and development led by Xia Fan play a decisive role in the station? No. The achievements made by the Jinxia Army on the battlefield can be easily recaptured by the opposing mechanical gods every time. There are no tactics, no games, no exchange of advantages, and no situations that may arise in a war. From the moment the enemy's mechanical god appears, it is simply a crushing of power. The increase in the number of Qi sensers, mechas, electromagnetic guns, and even the thought control brought out are all useless against the evil evil. Jinxia relies on a few superheroes to defeat the evil boss, and ordinary Jinxia soldiers have almost no effect. So what is the point of working so hard to write about Jinxia's development? When the enemy comes, all it takes is the superheroes to attack. Anyway, if you can't defeat it, there will be corrections from heaven (the author gave the deus ex machina). The book is called "The Equation of Heaven's Way", but has Xia Fan cracked many of the rules of Heaven's Way, and has it been applied on a large scale? With the collapse of combat power, this book cannot be read!

From the beginning until the princess is seriously injured, the pace is good. I can barely watch it in the middle period, especially the plot after finding the escape tower. Is it because the inspiration is exhausted? Or didn't you write an outline in the first place? It feels like I'm thinking about the number of words while thinking about how to write it down. In the later stage, even if I jump to watch it, I really can't stand it anymore. Why is there such a big gap from the first part? How come the writing becomes more and more backward the more I write?

Compared with the witch, Tiandao has more foreshadowing in the early stage this time, the story unfolds more slowly, and it is not yet clear what the main axis of the story is in the early stage. Only when the fox demon appeared on the scene, the idea of ​​"Release the Banshee" immediately came up. There was no way, the fate of demons being persecuted in the way of heaven had too much in common with witches. It was difficult for readers who had read The Witch not to think this way. After reading on, they found that although the liberation of monsters is one of the main lines of the story, it is not the most important. The real main line of the book should still fall back to the two words "the way of heaven". After the appearance of the third princess, the main line of farming development was brought out. This really made me, a reader who came from a witch, feel friendly. Although the theme has been changed, the two eyes are still the two eyes after all. However, this time the focus of farming seems to be more towards social development and mysticism. After all, the technology in the world of Heaven is not as backward as in The Witch. We already have guns and artillery, as well as tactics against thermal weapons. Even if the knowledge brought by the protagonist can give our own technology a leading edge, it will be difficult to reproduce the technological crushing in The Witch, unless the protagonist can also squeeze out nuclear bombs. In terms of the power system, there is no clear class judgment for abilities in Tiandao, and you have to take out a medicine bag before casting a spell. This aspect will probably dissuade many readers who like cool settings. Well, it doesn't matter what other people think. Anyway, I still appreciate it. Rather than setting a bunch of meaningless classes (it's really meaningless, no matter how many settings there are, in fact no author will write according to his own settings, and the protagonist's leapfrog challenges are commonplace). Ermu's approach of focusing on the essence of power is more to my liking. It is not a blind pursuit of more powerful power, but a rational exploration and approach to the essence of power. The only thing I want to complain about is that the official rank of the Privy Council is too hard to pronounce. Can't we use some more intuitive titles? The character portrayal is just as exciting as the witches, but the interpersonal and social relationships in Heaven are more complicated and not as simple as witches. After all, witches don't have much choice, and social relationships have basically been severed long ago. Everyone in Heaven is entangled with countless looming connections. There are more choices and more entanglements. I hope that when more characters appear in the future, Ermu can still control it. Even the witch is almost unable to control it in the later stage. We must also pay attention to controlling the number of characters and the timing of their exit. Although writing delicately is a good thing, if you cannot control it, it will become a burden. Because the story has just begun, I won't rush to a conclusion yet. I just want to share my thoughts after reading it and share my old knowledge and new knowledge.

Based on the setting and the speed at which the plot unfolds, I thought it was a 2,000-chapter book. It was finished after three months of raising it. I feel that King Yong's death was too sudden, and it was like five years later. I can only think about whether I can continue writing it before writing it. If I say I won't write it and just finish it, I feel sorry that everyone has been chasing it for so long. I also like your books very much. For me, witches and mysteries are almost on the same level. They are both clichéd and logical. I also recommend your books to my friends. If there is another book, I would like to ask you to think more about the readers. Everyone also likes your book and is not pursuing it just to see the unfinished ending.

Excellent start, weak in the middle, close to collapse

Although it jumps, the world view of this story itself is desperate. Lunar Sanctuary, Big Demon, Chaos Entity. Unlike the witch, the big boss can be destroyed by nuclear fusion. The power of destruction of civilization here is irresistible. There is no hope, only waiting for death. Xia Fan had already tried his best to seize the opportunity. In the new earth, without the help of technology, no chaotic entity will be born. With only one human force and experience in the destruction of civilization, there should be no large-scale wars that lead to the emergence of big demons. Humanity still has a future, and it will develop rapidly. Xia Fan's sacrifice was tragic. It seems that being alive destroys this tragedy, but I like Dzogchen.

I read about 400 chapters, and then I picked up the book. Now I feel like reading it in one go will be very satisfying. It turned out that the content was very procrastinating and not very exciting. It felt like a story about a mortal cultivating immortality with a bit of ups and downs... Looking back, I felt something was wrong. When I read it before, I had goosebumps when I constructed a giant electromagnetic gun from ice. Then there will be nothing worth enjoying anymore...

I've just read Chapter 195, and I'll briefly talk about my feelings. Personally, I feel that the author's writing style has changed a lot, and the plot of the story has obviously become much longer, so the description of farming has obviously become very, very slow. By Chapter 195, there is not much progress in farming. Because, first of all, the author's setting for the protagonist is obviously towards farming, right? Since it is developing in the direction of farming, there is no need to expand too much in other aspects of the plot, such as "expanding the tragic ending of Luo Qingqing and his party and the direction of this line after that, discussing what order is, and what they will lead a group of passers-by to do later." This kind of writing is completely unnecessary and seems very procrastinating. Just write that after being injured and escaping, the people in the palace can't find the traces, and then Luo Qingqing goes to find the protagonist. Personally, I feel that the plot of the farming aspect has not been kept up, and the plot feels dragging. In summary, I personally feel that this change is quite a pity. Because writing this way, you won't be able to read the sense of accomplishment and happiness of "farming" like the previous work. Although it is important for the author's writing skills to grow and develop in other aspects, I feel it is a pity that I have lost the "farming style" that I am good at writing. Finally, it is quite interesting for the author to write about the working principles of machines, principles of chemical reactions, the establishment of various work systems, the development of social productivity, changes in social thought, etc. After all, there is a writing basis for the previous work. I think writing in this aspect should be a step forward. It's okay to write some other aspects, such as emotional lines, character experience lines, etc., But first of all, the author's level in this aspect is relatively poor, so it doesn't feel good to write too much, and it will feel a little draggy and awkward while reading. After all, the author writes well about farming. If he didn't write more about farming, the whole book would basically be uninteresting.

This update is really getting more and more hellish

Not everyone is in the group.

The player in the picture is Qian. I think I drew him a little too old, and there is also a problem with perspective. Because there is no character column for Qian, I just submitted it as a book review. This is the last picture in my series so far. Others such as Wei Wushuang's judo and discus, Chi's diving and swimming events have no good inspiration. In fact, the idea for this picture has been around for a long time. At that time, I felt that Qian could definitely become a running back that suppressed the whole field with his ability. However, Qian had not joined the protagonist camp at that time, so the idea was kept. The background is Qian Gua.

This book is indeed a good book, but the chapters are too "short and concise"...

It's a fox~

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Always pay attention to Li's description of the Great Wilderness... In the end, because Li was too weak, there were still some details that he didn't tell!

Luo Qing was injured. Isn't he looking for death in the palace now? Someone should save me

Will the character arrangement be a bit deliberate when connecting the plot...

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Luo Qingqing set the color scheme of Suzaku with blue background and white clouds. After several attempts, he couldn't adjust it well, so he gave it a try. If you have a chance, try another set of clothes to restore it (the chin problem has been corrected) Many people said that the chin was too sharp, so they adjusted it slightly.

Tiandao Winter Olympics - Pairs Figure Skating The players in the picture are Xia Fan and Li

I have read The Witch five times. I read this book as soon as I opened it. After reading more than 300 chapters, I couldn't stand it anymore. At that time, I felt that the homogeneity was too serious, and the things written were numerous and miscellaneous, and there was no main line to tie them all together. Unexpectedly, it has been so many years since I last saw this book. I can only say that it was expected. Well

What is the purpose of farming in the early stage? It's for opening Wushuang in the later stage! In the early stage, you should be cautious, but the protagonist is like Long Aotian. He starts in a kingly way, and half way through the development, he is full of hatred without preparing anything. The enemy's army presses in. He scrapes together three products without products, and then rushes into battle, and then narrowly defeats the enemy. Even after this, he still didn't restrain himself. He disclosed his details in various ways, and then attracted a wave of stronger enemies, and then managed to cope with it. Is this farming? Where is your dog? Where is your Wushuang? I saw the protagonist develop in a hurry, and then start to attract hatred in various ways before the foundation is stable. Then the protagonist's IQ is lower than the limit, his courage is beyond the limit, and he tries to commit suicide in various ways. Then he relies on the enemies' various childish tricks. They just beat you, but they don't kill you, and they start acting. In the end, the protagonist exploded and killed the enemy... Instead of relying on new technology and new weapons. Then what's the use of farming? I also feel like the world will collapse at any time without the protagonist, and I feel like I'm going to have obsessive-compulsive disorder. I think it's better to let the protagonist disappear and let the world that should collapse collapse! ! Moreover, the technology is not as good as that of explosive seeds. Others can defeat all methods with one blow. Then stop using technology and develop magic.

It was good at the beginning, but it started to be inexplicable in the middle, and then it completely sucked, which is a pity.

In the middle period, probably after the prince ascends the throne, the plot is a piece of shit.

The farming plot in the early stage is good, and the single volume of the West Pole adventure in the mid-term is very interesting, but the two contents feel very disconnected when put together, resulting in a high sense of dissonance after returning from the adventure. The part between the two and the second prince is also too abstract. The enemy's defeat was all due to the inner ghost. The latter is also path dependent. Every organization has insiders. In addition, the world view expands too fast, and the perception becomes worse. The most embarrassing thing is the evil horse plot. Everyone wanted to see the part where Princess Yama defeated her superiors and took power without writing anything and skipped directly to the result. Inexplicably, she spawned a BOSS and directly raised the upper limit of combat power to the level of Dragon Ball. Then the sudden mechanical deity killed the BOSS and the BOSS behind the scenes. Following this is the unfinished "Five Years Later", in which he starts to criticize Tiandao for no apparent reason, doing the same things as the previous behind-the-scenes boss, which can be said to be the ultimate double standard. All the foreshadowing plots laid before were quickly passed by, leaving only the results. The above is my nonsense after reading it. I can only say that I am quite disappointed.

The ones who get along better with the protagonist are all supporting female characters, and even the character cards are mostly female. At first I thought it was quite interesting. First there was a genius girl from an aristocratic family, then there was a girl with animal ears who was not accepted by the world. The protagonist had super upright views, and then there was a female princess. . Is it different from the Witch one? It's so homogeneous that it's really disappointing that the reviews collapsed in the middle.

The part about foreign countries in the back is really ugly. I can't stand it anymore.