Old Watcher

Suggestion: Can the author stop emphasizing the character of the protagonist throughout the novel? Like a beautiful boy, a pretty little loli, etc., Don't always emphasize the protagonist's body and posture, how much they compete with the bright moon! ! Can you give straight men like us a little reading experience and give the author himself a chance? (´;;`). For a girly setting like the protagonist, it would be nice to give it a little bit of advice!! Come on, author😊

Xia Xiao in nightmare form🥺

The first volume is finally over, and the plot has begun. Readers, please feel free to eat it, it won't be too slow. I will also build a character building and I will consider adding more characters. Character name ➕ gender ➕ personality ➕ unique ability

A few suggestions, 1: The male protagonist Japanese Lolita Shota style has too few audiences. It belongs to a particularly niche style. It is an anime drama, and the audience for this kind of protagonist is mostly female. 2: Although I quite like the power system, it is still a bit complicated. Although the first level, second level and third level feel very simple, it is indeed more acceptable to readers. For example, Lord of Mysteries is not my level 0 to level 9 system, and your game has turned to reality and does not give level 1 to level 10. It feels hmm... 3: Cool, I don't think I saw it. The protagonist is of noble birth and has no enemies. The beginning of the chapter is all about settings, and there are little lolita in the settings, well, daily life. And it heats up slowly.                                    The game Alien and Spell Truth, which is still popular now, is also very slow to warm up. It also has a lot of settings in the early stage, it is also pseudo-DND, and the backend is stronger, such as the goddess of magic and the legendary female teacher, but the results are very good. When others start learning, there are ordinary players who are more pretentious. Anyway, it is slow to warm up and has a lot of settings, but it also has a lot of fun points. Author, you don't see anything cool about this. And the style is too niche, the game is from another world + pseudo-DND + weird, and the audience is quite large. The protagonist is forced to be a "little loli", and there is no feeling of a time traveler, because you, the author, just watched the scenes like watching a movie. This forcefully drives away readers and filters them out. If you just want to write a novel that you like, just pretend I didn't say anything.

Your writing method is in the wrong section. You should go to the light novel section. It has a main character, a family, and a sister. It has the style and writing method of a light novel.

I have basically finished reading it. I think the power system and world view are very good. The plot is also okay but it is slow. It is the description of you, a little loli, and the protagonist is a transvestite. It really feels like I was watching Xiaoshota's journey to another world at station B, but you added a piece of player's memory. I thought it would be better when I grow up, but it turned out to be even worse. I just looked like a goth loli. Apart from her appearance, she was probably just a little loli. Anyway, I didn't have a sense of empathy at all. It's a pity that I quite like this power system and world view.

This secret realm is really not good-looking. It doesn't ask for so much. Can you grow up and become a man quickly?

It's very well written. There are very few of this type nowadays and almost no one writes it.

I think the criticism that everyone criticized for being too dry in the front is not a problem for me. I also enjoyed reading games like Magic Truth. I thought that although the setting was messy, the author put a lot of thought into it, which was good. But for me, there are two things I can't stand. One is that I emphasize that I am mentally mature but then act like a child, and the other is that I always emphasize that I am just a little loli...

This book is simply a suture monster. I at least saw the shadow of the three books "Lord of Mysteries", "Soul Crown" and "Player Super Justice"

Chapter 108 really embarrassed me. The head of such a smug family really has no trump cards! There really is no trump card! There really is no trump card! The so-called trump card, teleportation and other encounters, has never been used once, and then he started to experience the kind of vulgar plot that exploded. His sister was really so relieved that he went out without leaving any trump cards on him. Author, you are actually more suitable to write a novel with the hard-working warrior as the protagonist. While emphasizing that the bloodline nobles are awesome, they are different from the hard-working people outside, while at the same time experiencing the plot that only the hard-working people will experience, and it is still the routine of Xiaobai's novel several years ago! It really amused me to death! Look at what the protagonist of Magic Truth has when he goes out to experience everything for the first time. How is the plot and exciting points arranged? How many chapters and words have you written about the experience plot? Is this part good to watch?

After it was released, a bunch of inexplicable battle chapters suddenly appeared. Is it really interesting to be so dumb? What kind of black market, the routines written are like novels from many years ago, why does the head of the Dixia family play such low-level things? It's a bit funny. Could it be that the author can't imagine high-level things? Is this all you can write? It would be better to set it as a wild transcendent from the beginning. His temperament matches up better. I want to write about a noble but I can't write about the noble temperament and noble background. It's funny to repeatedly emphasize my identity and bloodline. I thought the so-called experience plot could be more interesting. But it's still the same old-fashioned novel, and there is a sense of separation from the people before you. It's just to keep yourself entertained.

I don't know why it looks like the natives who got the time-travel system and reverse time-travel.

I am Jiang Xiao, Xia Yan, okay Xia Xiao👌

Not bad, the writing is concise and the plot is acceptable

If you become a eunuch, there will be no little JJ. Please think carefully.

I feel like I'm not good enough and I can't understand 😂

Now when you see a book with amazing looks, just click ❌. It means that I am an ordinary person and cannot be substituted.

Just a small question, is there no action of the protagonist in that person's memory? Why do I think you want to be mysterious?

Why do I feel like the author is a girl?

I think the head of the protagonist's family who was involved in trouble in the past should have predicted the future just like the protagonist. . .