The Silver Dragon's Evolution

It's scary to think about it. People who can be mages in DND have very high intelligence points, and the heroine of this book is a genius among mages. She can learn everything quickly. As a person who grew up in a slave background, why should she act stupid in front of the protagonist? She is so scheming.

Are you new to writing? How is that possible? It's too mellow. Tell me honestly, what did you write before?

Does the author have any idea to write the little loli to death and let the protagonist have magic talent and eyes?

I feel like the dragon you wrote is so weak! Dragons written by others are natural disasters! The dragon you wrote about is a big lizard that can spray all kinds of things and fly! Nothing fancy!

That's right, it's me, Otto Apokalis!

Have you finally stopped following the development of five-color dragons and started to attack metal dragons?

The protagonist disappears from several scenes at every turn, and the sense of existence is too low. I suggest that the author's plot without the protagonist should not exceed one chapter. Otherwise, it is not bad.

The biggest failure is that it could have been upgraded well (and easy to write) but it has to involve a conspiracy plot (the key is that it is full of loopholes, I really want to complain)

Seeing this introduction reminded me of "The Classic of Mountains and Seas".

I think the author has made a mistake. In the last 10 chapters, there has been almost nothing without the protagonist Silver Dragon... As for the previous episode with the Wild Boar, it was too protracted. I don't think it is necessary to write it in such detail, just write about the ambush and the successful capture of the prisoners. All subsequent introductions to the northern situation can be described in detail after the Silver Dragon evolves and wakes up, like The subordinates report the situation and throw out the settings in the same way as the quilboar is forced to confess. At the same time, the silver dragon also gives people the feeling of being online all the time. In the early stage of the novel, the protagonist is separated from the protagonist for more than 10 chapters without describing it. Also, since it's fun, let's finish it all at once. Let's write about what abilities the red dragon and green dragon have gained by evolving this time, and then enter a gentle plot transition, and it will be better if we throw away the setting. Personal advice, please don't spray.