One Piece: Flash Pirates

Actually. Bundle. After reading the introduction. Bundle. I even hope that all the original Straw Hat Pirates give up. Create your own people. It will be better. You found it. Seriously. Many of them are similar to previous books. . The last thing the Straw Hat Pirates need is Robin. All other requirements. If you take one piece apart, it won't be a straw hat anymore.

The title given by the bounty order is too neutral to be tolerated, and it is too Chinese and too dramatic.

The writing is flawed, the description is not perfect, the characters say things that are not in line with their character, the environment and scene descriptions are not enough to set off the atmosphere, etc. Please help me point them out, I will accept them with an open mind, and I will not let you down. . Ahem, change it if you can🤓🤓

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I found the second one in the new book today. Isn't it time travel, and now Qidian has become popular in a new style? A few suggestions: ① The protagonist is not clear, there is no sense of substitution, and you are completely confused when watching it. You said group portraits, maybe it's because this is a novel, and you need to have an entry point first! ②The last just interpretation of the topic, my personal suggestion is not to mention it. Because in the pirate world, from a modern world view, there is no real justice. The radiation range of justice is too large, plus the butt problem. If the author likes it, he can use it as his own hidden main line. Forget about the introduction.

I think it would be better to write a time travel fan fiction.

Passing by, it turned out not to be a sparkling fruit negative review

What do you call the Shining Pirates if they don't eat Shining Fruit? How can you write about One Piece without eating Devil Fruit?

There are two things I can't understand. One is that a 7-year-old pirate who can offer a bounty of 3kw per second cannot defeat Kuina, and the other is that he can practice armed color at such a young age? Just like the aunt, he was born easy to talk about, which shows that he is gifted. It is too outrageous to cultivate this armed color at the age of 7. Doesn't this thing need to be developed before it can be cultivated? . . .

Nowadays, these fan fiction writers can't write without women around them. Write and write and become a heroine

Come on! I'm optimistic about you🤓

I have read a few chapters and would like to make a small suggestion. When writing dialogues, don't always appear like this xxxxx said: "..." xxxxx said: "..." xxxxx said: "..." Does it feel a bit dramatic and deliberate to follow a set like this? A little more like this "..." Xxxxx said, "..." "..." Xxxxx said. "...". More changes, just some details, I don't have much else to say.

When I played One Piece before, my pirate group was called the Flash Pirates.

Haha Originally, it was just a collection to support I didn't expect to find book friends circle, the atmosphere is quite good😁

Seven years old, too young. My aunt is a giant. Born to be stronger than ordinary humans

Sorry, I couldn't survive the first three chapters 😅 After reading the book review, I felt it would be good, but it gave me a painful blow at the beginning. I saw that you, the author, replied to someone else that you wanted to revise the article, and I hope you can revise it. I don't want fantasy-style fan fiction. It is also understandable that the natural color of knowledge is natural. What the hell is the natural color of armed force? It can be hardened at the age of 7, and the upper limit of combat power is too high.

I don't like to see the plot of dismantling the Straw Hat Pirates when I read One Piece fandom...

He was poisoned to death in the first chapter 😥

This is the most consistent fan fiction I've ever seen that fits the style of One Piece.

When I first read this book, I thought the main character had eaten a sparkling fruit. Then I successfully fell into the trap.

Fantasy is fantasy. I have to choose a Japanese comic name. It hurts.

Keep it up, it's very good, it's relaxing and comfortable to read

Wow, it's not on the shelves yet? Power by love?

Congratulations on the completion~🤭🤭

I hope readers will not comment here. I will update the status here and whether the book is almost finished, so that those who are chasing updates and those who are preparing to step into the trap will have a basic idea. Of course, I still hope that you will add it to the collection. If you have enough recommendation votes, please give them to me~ Finally, I am very sorry.