Abyss Ancestor

After reading this book quickly, I found that there are many problems. As for what the problems are, I think the author knows them all. (Examples: various modal particles, water plot, adding settings in the text, etc.)

I don't dare to get such a golden finger. I am so scrupulous that I have lost such a powerful golden finger in vain. Look at the main god's avenue. Every god-breaking character has to be played. If you want to trick the protagonist, don't rely on deliberately suppressing the plot, but rely on creativity.

After reading it quickly, I have one comment: The writing is too plain, the plot is weak, the core is average, and the sense of substitution is poor. If you want to succeed, keep working hard. Tips: Don't use too many modal particles. The protagonist's IQ also needs to be improved. Don't include settings in the content of the article. What readers want to see is the plot, not your settings.

Stop being a eunuch Come on (ง •̀o•́)ง

Since we have to choose this name, if the protagonist is still viewed from a human perspective, this is a big failure. Personal opinion, don't criticize if you don't like it.

The main character is too weak and stupid. I really can't stand it anymore, no wonder my grades are so low. Even elementary school students can write better than you.

The author often appears, which is very funny and there are problems with the setting. The order of origin and so on feel like it is specially used to cheat this world, and there are no shady side effects 😅

Come on, author. I think your writing is good. Why is no one reading it? Your promotion is inadequate.

Even if you dress as a devil, you don't want to kill anyone. . . . Then why did you write that he dressed as a devil?

The author's writing style is not very good, and the emotions are not expressed. The way the protagonist evolves and expresses his personality is a bit stiff, and the plot is too compact (it just won't be substantial. Adding a large number of chapters in the middle can at least double the word count several times), but it is still good for newcomers.

Come on

Since I can't reward you, I'll give you a red envelope of 100 starting coins, so you don't want to be a eunuch! Aoli gives!

Just a little bit, get one for free. Those who complain that the protagonist is not like a devil, please look back patiently. I don't know how many times I have said this, how can you, a normal person, kill people without blinking an eye and eat people without salt as soon as you go to other places? You have to go through a process. I just wrote down the thoughts of the protagonist before he changed. What is there to complain about? In the world that Wang Mo is currently invading, a lot of innocent people have died. Do you have to eat hair, drink blood, and eat people's bones to be called a devil? That kind of pure darkness, killing everyone on sight, wouldn't be fun to watch! Besides, I have compressed the transformation process of the protagonist into a very short time. If you still want to complain that you don't look like a devil, then I have nothing to do.

The protagonist is the king of demons, but he has no control over the transformed demons. How low.

I thought he was so talented! Why do I feel like the protagonist is a bit of an idiot? Why does the protagonist have to follow the plot? Why is he getting involved? Does it make sense? And I think it would be best if he has no emotions here. Also, why do I feel like he is like a loser! Does he need to conquer a few useless vampires? And is it necessary to ask their opinions?

It's the third day today and there is no update yet, so is it really true that I entered the palace? ? ?

Author, you can write about a saint. I'm not talking about a saint in the church. I'm talking about a kind and pure girl. The protagonist tries to corrupt the saint. For example, a civilian girl is very kind and innocent and doesn't want others to be harmed. She can even sacrifice herself for strangers she doesn't know. This is a real saint. The protagonist degenerates her into a murderous girl. The devil of sex, for example, can degenerate a pure and noble girl into a lewd succubus. Why can't she be degenerated into a murderous and lewd succubus? Because if this is the case, how can she kill and rape? It seems that she can also be murderous towards others and seduce the protagonist in every possible way, but the protagonist is determined and will not accept its temptation (I don't believe it even if I say it)

I found the author's tone of voice to be a bit peculiar and a bit earthy.

For example, the author had better change the word "".

I feel like we can refer to the Zerg base in StarCraft... To create a demon base belonging to the abyss? ? ? ?

This book is so beautiful. The author must work hard. Don't be a eunuch. I will give you a recommendation vote and reward you.

Author, this is the end 🤔🤔🤔