A Mortal Who Cultivates Immortality, I Am Senior Brother Lu

Come on, author, I am a fan of mortals, and I like to read this kind of mortal novels. However, I think some of your details are not as good as those of mortals cultivating immortals. I feel that the bottle is indispensable for Han Li to become an immortal, but I feel that it is his caution and low-key that lead to his later achievements. I feel that you have written it very well, but I feel that mortals should be cautious and unassuming. I don't know if what I said is right, it's just my opinion. And I feel that the author does not need to panic and write slowly. This is how ordinary mortals become stronger step by step. It is not good to mention many things in one stroke. For example, going to Tianxing Pavilion to buy medicine, and leaving as soon as the medicine is cultivated. I think I can write a chapter about the inner drama of the protagonist, such as where to sell it, how to keep the wealth secret, and not to attract other people's attention. Because it is still in the Qi training period, it is too weak, so you have to think more about these things. I just feel that the author is a bit hasty in writing. In fact, there is no need to panic at all. In the early stage of Mortal, I spent a lot of time writing about gangs. In fact, after reading Mortal, I felt that this book was the one I remembered the longest during my mortal and Qi training period. Well, these are my little thoughts. I have only seen the front part. I hope the author can become a god with one book like Wang Yu Da Da.

I'm a little speechless. It's a matter of Zhang Tian Ping, and the Chen family brothers and sisters actually got involved. This is a big poison.

The catalog persuades him to quit, even if Han Laomo doesn't have the fairyland chapter. The Single Mortal Chapter is not something that you, a modern person, can steal. You are like Lao Han, who is so cautious in doing things that he is afraid of being killed even when he sleeps. Are you going to steal him? ? ? He killed his master to save his life, and he went through many life and death tests before arriving at Yellow Maple Valley. You, a modern person who grew up in a greenhouse, traveled through life and death with Senior Brother Lu, and you want to seize the halo of the protagonist? Not to mention that this book won't be popular, even if it nods, it will be sprayed to death by a large number of ordinary fans, and any imitator will follow the template and rise to the top.

After the persuasion of many book friends, this book will completely delete the system settings and purely return to mortals. I hope book friends will support me! After repeated thinking and the affirmative support of his family, the author guarantees the completion of the book with his personality! The specific ending has probably been conceived.

I was dissuaded after reading the comments, but the protagonist actually went to steal the bottle? After stealing it, the protagonist shares the bottle with others? God, only people with two goals can write like this

I've seen so many people criticizing the author. Much more comfortable

Steal a vial? . . . In the end, Grandma Han is also a big Luo again. She has returned to the original point. She has cultivated the law of time and is also the protagonist of saving the world. Can you succeed in stealing?

This is bullshit. At the beginning, a monk came out of a Taoist novel. I couldn't read it anymore. Desire

I feel that the setting of this World Honored One is not very good, and it is easy to persuade him to quit.

Chapter 1: Persuading to Quit

Has the author finally signed on? Come on!

Having said that, the beginning was really vicious, and I no longer had the desire to read any more. I went to read another Mortal Brother Lu. Although it plagiarized a lot from the original work, it still had its own characteristics.

You've gotten a lot of poison in the first three chapters, so find a job in a factory!

I hope the author will work hard. Although I don't really like this style, I can't help but give you the recommendation vote number 2. I hope you can stick to it.

I have been a eunuch for two years, and I am looking forward to being a eunuch for two and a half years.

There are so few people writing about ordinary people, so come on, author.

Why do you have to steal the vial? There are so many kinds of chance novels about cultivating immortals, why don't you make up a few yourself? When you write a fanfic about mortals, you have to fill it in reasonably according to some rules of mortals. Otherwise, you will inevitably find it funny and abandon the book.

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