Ancestor Fan Dan

The theme of the story is very novel and worth reading, but the portrayal of the protagonist is very awkward, especially when the weasel almost kills the protagonist by using the three corpse control talismans, and the fox suggests that the protagonist kill him, but actually says he doesn't want to kill him because he doesn't have much hatred. As for other methods of questioning others when someone exposes one's true identity, it was embarrassing to watch. I persisted and watched about 30% of the time, but I couldn't bear it anymore. Come on, author, I'll withdraw first!

This protagonist has no city at all. Was he a high school student before time travel?

The creativity and early settings are very good. Of course, what I like most is your imagination. It's really good 😊😊😊✌️✌️ The time-travel part is also quite to my taste. The main reason is that it doesn't have the strong sense of cheap pretense that some online articles have. This is worthy of recognition. The writing is also pretty good, but there is a lot of competition in Xianxia stories, so it may take a while. Just hold on and update it steadily, you can do it! ! ! Come on ✌️✌️✌️👍🤝✊✊

This book was good at the beginning, but it became boring as I didn't know how to go on.

And it's easy to believe in those monsters, and it's so stupid to do things without thinking, slow in reaction, etc. I still don't want to read this book anymore.

The author should sort out the outline, or cut it out and rewrite it. Anyway, unless you say you won't write it anymore, I will keep it in my collection. Come on (ง •̀_•́)ง

The writing is good, but the protagonist is too passive, making it difficult to take on the role. After all, it's a web novel, so it's best to look like a protagonist! Excuse me

If you don't have a heroine, please keep it first and then slaughter it when it becomes fat

There is a lot of unnecessary content in the book. The writing is too slow. There is no need to write about a dinner in history. There is no plot development, and the world view is very confusing. A general background of the world and the cultivation system should be explained at the beginning. These have not been explained clearly yet. It's also very confusing. If the writing is not strong enough, don't write with a hammer here and there. The place is too big to be taken back later.

The author can come up with a basic system, starting with physical training, skin training, meat training, menstrual training, bone training, and internal organs training, and then the Dzogchen will naturally produce magic power. This is what people who cultivate immortality and Taoism should do. People who practice martial arts should practice Qi. This is the second step. The rest depends on how the author writes it.

The author has written too many narrations. Even when he is having a meal, he writes about how to make the meal, how to use meat, and what kind of meat to use.

Your content is fine, but the introduction is not strong. Otherwise it can attract many readers.

Personally, I feel that this new one written by the author is not as good as the previous one.