Xianyun Road

This novel is relatively outstanding among novice novels. First of all, the writing is smooth and the logic is not confusing. Nowadays, in order to cater to the author, many novels add some vulgar plots, or blindly pretend to be funny, and finally become different. The second point is the character of the protagonist. The road to immortality is long, and a person who walks a hundred miles is only half a hundred years old. What is needed is perseverance and perseverance. The protagonist already has it. In order to find the miracle, he still needs to improve the details. The protagonist should act more cautiously. The excitement of foundation building in the middle stage of Qi Refining is still too risky! Overall it's pretty good, thank you to the author💪

[Book Title] Xianyun Daotu [Book Review] The writing is very stable, and the plot is solid [Advantages] The plot and characters are very stable, and the writing is very good, with the atmosphere of Jin Yong's martial arts, it will be popular [Disadvantages] The end of the first chapter can arouse a little suspense and expectation for the Taoist and the protagonist, but the ending is a bit dull. The rest is great, no shortcomings can be found [Evaluation] B+ [Remarks] I hope it is helpful to the author, if you don't like it, please don't comment.

A suggestion: It would be best to set up a good brother of the protagonist. I feel that most of the male characters nowadays are just sidemen. Adding some such tasks can make the work fuller.

I only wrote about the male protagonist reaching the stage of pill formation, which is a bit short. Come on, author, make reasonable arrangements for your studies and side jobs.

How do mortals without golden fingers rely on to become immortals, how do they surpass geniuses and stand out, do they rely on luck? Then it's not a mortal flow, it should be a luck flow. To put it bluntly, Goldfinger is the author. Whatever he lacks, he arranges things to get it.

This book is still in the exploratory stage. I hope friends who have read it can make some suggestions or appear in the book. It is also an important encouragement to me. Thank you everyone!

Because I have difficulty naming, I am soliciting names for supporting characters (you can also add background skills and the like) If I think it is better than my own, I will definitely use it Thank you everyone! 😁😁😁

Because I have to take exams recently, I will update one chapter every day at 8 pm, and after the new year, I will update two chapters every day I hope everyone will support me!

A mortal would still want to be angry if he didn't have a golden finger?

Class group, school group! Where did you get the news from school (doubtful)😠

The following is my personal opinion, please forgive me if it offends. I won't mention the writing style. The writing is smooth, the wording is accurate, and the focus is on the plot. First of all, in my opinion, the role of Su Xiu is redundant. If she is used to let the protagonist experience the vague feelings of the beginning, I think it is a bit far-fetched. Can the two of them meet for less than a month to develop feelings? If I were to write it, Su Xiu would definitely die because she knew that the protagonist had killed Qi Ling. Since the protagonist didn't know how good or bad the Qi family was, one less person would know that it was one. However, the protagonist could not do this. Instead, I could write that Su Xiu was killed by the mechanism in the temple. It could also remind the protagonist that people's hearts are sinister and they have to guard against it in the future. It would be better to silence them again. If you want the protagonist to experience love, you can write about a beautiful woman in the martial arts competition, the kind with superior strength, let the protagonist look up to but cannot get it, the two have no communication, they are strangers, and it can also be used as foreshadowing in the future. Secondly, if the role of the ancestor is more fleshed out, it would not be good to just give him a chance. First of all, if the Qi family knows that the protagonist has killed Qi Ling, they can make Qi Ling's father a red face. To catch the protagonist, they must trade their lives, one life for another. At this time, the ancestor came out to make a fool of himself, saying that since he died, he was not strong enough, and there was nothing to say, but since the person died, you were the one who killed him, so we will seek justice from the Sword Throwing Villa. The protagonist was only 16 years old at this time. He must be afraid of causing trouble to his parents. At this time, he made a plea. The ancestor took out a contract and asked him to sign it. After telling his request, he gave him the opportunity to cultivate immortality, a big stick and jujubes, and the child couldn't resist it. There is not much to say about the rest, it is very well written, the author should not stop updating, this book will be a hit

The writing style is very good, and there is nothing poisonous about it. I hope the author will support you later.

The novel is well written, good luck to the author! 👍👍🌹✊✊

Based on Feng Yu Calendar In 384, Yun Yang was born in Throwing Sword Villa and obtained the "Xuan Bing Jue" In 390, by chance, Yun Yang began to practice In 400, Yun Yang entered the Return In the same year, he worshiped Nangong Yu as his teacher In 406, Yun Yang entered the fourth level of Qi training, and began to learn alchemy in the same year In 410, Yun Yang took Wu Xing Dan, his qualifications were raised to the fourth level, and he advanced to practice Fifth level of Qi In 422, Yun Yang advanced to the seventh level of Qi training In 423, Gui Yi Sect held a sword test meeting, and Yun Yang entered the first century In 425, Yun Yang met Han Qishan and learned about the Foundation Protection Pill , and in the same year the demons invaded in a large scale In 433, Yun Yang rose to the ninth level of Qi training, accepted Chen Zhao as his disciple, and went to the Huanyue Secret Realm to compete for the elixir In 435, Yun Yang successfully built the foundation