The Great Dragon from Cybertron

Author: Is this your first novel? This novel has a good idea and description of the characters. The plot is relatively average and even the plot progresses a bit fast. I probably feel that if you don't make adjustments to your novel, it may become difficult to write around three or four hundred chapters because the characters upgrade too quickly. I would like to give the author a little suggestion. If the author has the ability, in the next war between humans and the undead, he can try to describe the different characters in detail from the three camps of the human camp, the undead camp, and the protagonist camp. For example: What kind of order did someone in the human camp give due to their personality, under what circumstances, and in what form did this order change the situation of the battle on a macro level? Author, your writing style is really flawed. For example, from forty-nine to fifty-one, it is clearly two Western non-human beings meeting, but it seems to me to be a third-rate historical novel. Especially the appearance of those few Chinese poems is too dramatic. Although it is impossible to write a Western fantasy with a translator, but there are fewer Chinese names, and the dialogue language is as straightforward as modern people.

Ah, in addition to the Transformers system, it also incorporates the Tyranid system. This makes me curious about how the protagonist will develop? Because in this case, unless the protagonist develops the ancient god system route of the Force or takes the route of the belief system. The route of the ancient god system of the Force emphasizes not relying on the name of faith, but through self-cultivation and continuous development, and finally achieves communication with the sea of ​​force, thereby becoming a god. Of course, the route of ascending to the gods in the name of faith is about spreading countless beliefs and developing... For details, please refer to the game Dungeons and Dragons. The advantage of this system is that the strength increases quickly, but it relies too much on all living beings. As long as enough faith is accumulated, the divine fire can be ignited, the divine body can be built, the divinity can be condensed, and divine power can be generated. If the protagonist follows the Ancient God System of the Force, he has the opportunity to open up the Sea of ​​Cybertron's Force, evolve a series of Cybertron robots, and become the master of the Cybertron Machine God System. Of course, although these suggestions are very good, they need to be supported by the author's imagination and writing style.

Emmm, I don't know if I should mention it. I actually like the previous prologue about Cybertron and Beastman, but it is too long as a pre-travel content... For old readers who know about Cybertron and Beastman, they may find it very good, but for those who don't know It will play a screening role for new and young readers. It is very likely that they will feel incomprehensible before even reading the main text, because they have not seen the emergence of a protagonist who can be substituted... SO... Well, it is just a personal opinion 😁 Come on.

I was introduced to you by someone else. I just read a few chapters and the writing is good. I will give you a monthly pass. Can you add more content?

Who is the protagonist? Why am I confused after reading a few chapters, apart from knowing a few names, who is who, and who is my sense of substitution couplet?

1. The audience of Beast Man and Transformers is too small It is estimated that not many people can understand the relationship between Beast Man, Super Warriors and Transformers, let alone transforming it into a novel mode? 2. The writing style is rather verbose, and can even be said to be a bit confusing When I read it, I felt like I was reading a stream of consciousness novel. Peng Cheng said in "The Mohist's Wave of Rhinoceros": Every time Bai Letian composed a poem, he asked the old woman to interpret it. If she understood it, she would record it; if she didn't understand it, she would change it. As an online novel, the logical thinking and writing context should be easy to understand. (Except for novels that set knowledge thresholds for specific audiences) 3. The world view setting is not very consistent, and the plot is relatively blunt. The integration of several worlds inevitably leads to the problem of digging holes but not burying them, or some places are not too delicate to make people feel uncomfortable, the plot is too deliberate, etc. Someone asked me to come and test the book, so I took a look. The above are all personal opinions. If there is any inappropriateness, please criticize and point out.

What should I write about? Beast Man, Tyrannosaurus Rex, and time traveler. I can't get straight to the point about consciousness. What is the main line? I've read a few pictures, but I can't see anything.

What's the difference? Isn't it just the difference between bone and steel?

This introduction feels like the speech of a middle-school boy. Others are living well, but suddenly a demon king comes from another world and wants to destroy the world. The reason is that I feel uncomfortable seeing you...

I wanted to scold you, but until now, there are very few people writing Beast Man fanfics. Come on😊