Harry Potter: Legend of the Holy Temple

Having read about 20 chapters, here are a few suggestions. For the past six months, I've become obsessed with Harry Potter fanfiction. I read each story with goodwill, after all, writing books isn't easy for the authors, and I certainly couldn't write as well as they do. (Writers are all cultured people, I envy them.) This novel is quite creative, starting a year younger than Harry Potter.

As long as the writing isn't too bad, many people enjoy reading the female lead Hermione. As for those who say they're tired of Hermione and want to quit reading, they probably prefer the politically correct version, haha. Currently, the most popular Harry Potter fanfiction isn't all about Hermione, or even those that have been nurtured since childhood, and there aren't many of them at all.

Hmm, I feel the author portrayed Dracula, Grimm, and Tom as somewhat weak in terms of combat strength. Their strength (in a one-on-one fight against the four legendary vampires) would probably be roughly equal to theirs. After all, modern magic differs from ancient magic. Modern magic is faster to cast, something the four legendary vampires can't match, and it usually involves many incantations.

I'll add it to my bookshelf first. Here's a suggestion for the author: stop idolizing Harry, and don't choose Hermione as the female lead. These have become problematic. It would be best if the author had some original content.

The protagonist's mindset seems rather confusing! Did the author get too caught up in the character's own personality? A cursed wand? Creating new potion recipes? These are all fine. In the original story, Merlin is a graduate of Slytherin, so of course, creating a temple or something is also acceptable. But you're just a newly enrolled wizard, and a time traveler at that.

It's poisonous! The Slytherin bloodline went to Gryffindor.

Author, I may have many questions because my personal values ​​are different from yours. The most important question is, why would you call your biological mother "Mom" so naturally when you see her? I also cannot understand how the president of the Thor's Guild could remain without searching for her son for 13 years after settling down.

The protagonist is too arrogant; he threatens others and tries to do business with them all. Please, does the protagonist have the resources or the strength? Does the protagonist even have the qualifications?

So what's up with the male lead's mother? She even has another daughter. If my mom had abandoned me for thirteen years, had her own influence abroad, and had another daughter, I'd expose them both after their reunion and conversation. A mother who doesn't love her child doesn't act like a mother at all.

I skipped around while reading, and when I got to the chapter about the mother and son recognizing each other, I felt really uncomfortable. Something felt off, but I couldn't quite put my finger on it. Didn't the author reread it?