Pirate's Devouring Fruit

The author's ability to write fruitful and thoughtful ideas is very good. I personally thought of some of them and hope to give the author some inspiration. The fruit ability in this article has the ability to capture. I don't know whether the fruit ability can be captured after developing the ability. It is recommended that the author not write about capturing the specific fruit ability. I personally think it is a bit messy and does not match the reported naval capabilities. There are too many combat abilities in the later stage, and there may be errors or some confusion. 1. It is recommended that the author capture substances such as devil fruit energy after fighting with the ability user, increase the area/number of people covered by the halo ability, and increase the upper limit of the ability of the devil fruit before awakening or after awakening (similar to increasing the area of ​​the barrier fruit). 2. After the ability is awakened (there is a certain probability) (related to the development level of the previous ability user), the ability is taken away and given to people close to oneself. Having said so much, I hope it will open up the author's mind and provide more refinement 🙂.

It's okay, please update it soon...

It's not all forced by life to become a pirate. Now that living conditions are so good, aren't there a lot of gangsters and gangsters? Why should I work hard when I can get rich easily? I'm a pirate, traveling around the world with a machete, controlling other people's life and death with money, women, and it's exciting to watch people kneel on the ground and beg.

The safest place to start in the world of pirates is definitely the navy.

The World Government doesn't care whether there are overlords in the navy, and the navy itself doesn't care. Don't think that having overlords means you are born to be a hegemon. Even the Warring States Period has overlords. The plaque hanging in the office says "Justice reigns over the world."

It's too complicated, with too many narrations, but other than that it's okay

Forget it, the key point is that the author always complains about it. It's really ridiculous. To be honest, for example, the protagonist knew about his life experience, and then complained that the novel changed the world background and so on. Can't you write it well? Do you have to do this? The other thing is water. Who knows, no one else is as passionate as other Pirates fans. The author always emphasizes that the protagonist is handsome and temperamental. Don't put too much emphasis on appearance. To be honest, when people read novels nowadays, the main character will be just okay. Too much emphasis on appearance will make the protagonist look girly, and it also favors female fans. It's not that I look down on female fans, but female fans like to write about appearance. After all, One Piece is a hot-blooded anime. Why are you doing all this? Stop talking and read other novels

The first 13 chapters made me vomit blood and I couldn't hold it any longer. It was like changing a few things and writing them in different ways, and kept writing! Just for the sake of word count, you can't talk so much nonsense, right? Np

It's okay, but the author restricts the protagonist's abilities too much. It's a bit boring to watch. I don't even see the protagonist's strength getting significantly stronger. Especially since the fruit is picky, it's not interesting. Since you have arranged the ability of this fruit, what's the point of limiting the ability like this?

I finally understand why the performance of this book is so poor. I feel that the author is writing a novel in a narrative way, which makes people unable to understand and read it, and the more it becomes boring, the more boring it becomes.

What nonsense. In 1495, Roger was not dead yet, the new world was still in an era of chaos, the golden lion and other older generation pirates were still hurting each other, the era of the four emperors had not yet come, and the Shichibukai system came out, speechless.

Forget it, Ace is dead. Ace is the most useless among pirates and the biggest loser among pirates.

The swallowing ability is not complete, and you still need to swallow the fruit, and the dark fruit can be upgraded and evolved. This way you can swallow up the heaven and the earth

It's useless to even discuss it now. The first book has the same sentences as other fans, and the second book has copied and pasted the content of the first book, so it is completely scrapped. I originally thought of it as a life-saving straw, but it ended up falling into the abyss. I have cried and felt sad, but there is nothing I can do. My father is about to be discharged from the hospital and will undergo chemotherapy. I am just a newly graduated student with no job, so I can only make money by writing books based on my former interest... Regarding Conan fans, when this book is finished, I will slowly revise it and write another one. Please support this book, thank you.

I'm speechless. I've read more than ten chapters and it's all water. I've been rambling all the time.

How did you write more than 500 chapters with just these few words? One million words, 700,000 words of repetitive nonsense.

I can't feel how powerful the twin fruits are.

After reading 50 chapters, there is so much water.

Rubbish, you can tell by reading the introduction. As long as one person is strong in force, he can overthrow the Tianlong people. All conspiracy and tricks are only played by the weak. As long as the strength is strong, who will do those fancy things? Just push it aside and kill anyone who doesn't accept it. If you don't have an invincible heart, you can't be considered cannon fodder in the extraordinary world.

Half of the words are spoken, and then there is more than a chapter of inner drama, and then the second half is completely gone. This book only has one layer of plot, seven layers of inner drama, and the second layer is blinding. The author is really fascinated.

There is too much nonsense, too many repeated words, and it makes people tired to read. There are good ideas and themes, but because of this, I don't want to read it, which makes the eyes tired and the brain tired. The repeated introduction has no meaning. It has been introduced very clearly in the early stage. Farewell is a good book, but it is easy to get tired. Of course, I only saw the ones that are not on the shelves. As for the shelves, is it so weak? I don't know, the idea is really good, and the understanding of pirates is not bad, but there are too many repeated words, which makes people feel visually tired.

Too wordy. Old lady's footcloth

In a world where great power belongs to oneself, the most ridiculous thing is machinations

Do you think I won't be able to write the final chapter 276 anymore? I've been writing about the Straw Hats, Sky Island Acting to provide them with training to improve the strength of the protagonist group, and the game plot of Long Chain Island Foxy, and then the encounter with Aokiji. Can't write anymore? Write so many protagonist and team plot chapters? Can't you write about travel and food? How about going to the East China Sea and South China Sea to have fun and fight pirates? And why not recruit Robin? You have so much historical text. You are a navy and can't take it with you, but you can hide in the palace to accompany your mother. And write emotional scenes to go on dates. There are so many women around you who haven't even held hands. Monet mentioned in 271 is scheduled to be one of the princesses? So, did you give it to Monet for the first time as an old virgin? Why not write it, write a straw hat group? Is the original plot boring?

Some original events that you were not involved in should be written in such detail? Watch the original work?

I dare not count how many hundreds of "and" you said in one chapter. Did you pass your primary school Chinese? You can't even use such simple related words.

It's all a mess of incomprehensible descriptions, so watery that it affects the perception.

The timeline is so messed up, it makes my head hurt to look at it

There are definitely some shortcomings, but compared to most pirate fan fiction, it is already excellent.

As mentioned above, because of the shortage of books, I am also hungry! After all, the book shortage is like taking aphrodisiac but not having the opposite sex next to you. It's very uncomfortable. → Judging from the reading progress of the current 30 chapters, it gives me an extremely bad experience. I am also someone who has watched hundreds of episodes of One Piece anime. However, author, you cannot just abandon "character appearance description" just because you are writing an anime fan novel, just like the Mona Lisa, a masterpiece in the painting world, cannot be without facial features! After all, the novel is neither a comic nor an animation. It has sounds, colors, lights and shadows, and the characters are lifelike. The characters in the novel, not to mention all the characters who appear, at least the protagonists and supporting characters, must have their appearance and even body shape and height described in detail or concisely. Not to mention the world of pirates, the difference in height and body shape is so huge that it's as ridiculous as a joke. Similarly, the character's appearance, height and body shape need to be described by the author. The same is true for environmental description, including topography, architectural vegetation, and even the shape and size of space, which also need to be described by the author. There is a cliff-like gap between the writing level of novels written in the early years and the novels written in recent years. It can even be said that today's novels can no longer be called novels... This is probably the tragedy of the times! Most of those truly capable authors have been squeezed out by the trolls...